The Apocalypse Tough Girl

The writing itself is good and has a certain appeal, but the writing needs to be improved!! Spread flowers and encourage!!

Just reading the first two paragraphs, I can tell that the author is a newbie →_→... A bastard.

Rich people who can't afford an RV….

To be honest, it was very tiring to watch. I really can't figure out the characters' personalities. They are like this sometimes and then that way. Are they all fine points? These people have quite big hearts, and each of the characters seems to be mentally retarded. At first, they actually threatened people with deductions of subsidies to kill zombies or donate food. This was quite divorced from reality and seemed extremely extreme. Maybe the structure is not set up properly, so it's quite confusing. I hope the author can hone his writing skills again.

So, the spicy Wang Shangcai yelled for a while and then retched when he saw the zombies? ...

_(:з∠)_

It's best to note that each type of person has his own characteristics when speaking. A very important feature of the characters' language in novels is colloquialism. When talking about [food], in reality, it is usually said [food]. Very few people talk about [food] in writing. In real life, there are many things that are left unsaid. The author's language is too literal and loses popularity.

Why are there always more weird things in novels than in reality? My campus life is not a mess!

The heroine was ruined. People who have been with me for more than ten years are still thinking, oh, this is not a friend, not a gay friend, let alone a best friend. Haha, is it a friend? It doesn't look good at all. It's so cute to think that you don't give anything sincerely and yet you want others to give everything. Do you think the "best friend" in your copywriting is a fool? This chapter also said that you need to go find your parents. Didn't you mention why you should go to them? They have the right to have money and live a better life. I thought you didn't want to drag them down. I thought of you too well. You can read between the lines their disgust. You thought they were ignoring you and abusing you, but it turns out it was just a quarrel. It's okay to say it's indifferent, but I can't be with you if I'm selfish. This heroine is the typical original heroine in the most popular black heroine novels some time ago.

It turns out that this is the best friend mentioned in the copy. Haha, be taught