Memories of a Lonely City

I thought "I" in the first two pictures was a man

Well, I also came here from Tieba. I think it's pretty good~ The style is similar to a youth novel, but the traces are too heavy. In fact, it seems more suitable to write a short story like this. There's a bug in the first chapter, holding a funeral, right? The heroine's name cannot be tolerated +1. In addition, I also suggest changing your waistcoat & what I said in the forum is indeed excessive.

Those who have not graduated from elementary school said that they saw the article from the post bar to worship the original poster. Work hard, waiting for you to become a great god.

I saw it on the post bar. Come and take a look. It feels like a running account when written in the first person, very much like a short narrative. But come on!

I suggest changing the title to "Small Town Years". The heroine's name is too dreamy and the hero's name is not nice. Also, change the name of the town, it's too fake. It's best to mix flashbacks and interludes in the article, with more detailed descriptions. In addition, your story is progressing too fast, and you won't be able to write ten thousand words like this. I saw on the Internet that you had a fight with someone on the forum. It is recommended to delete the post and change the vest.

It's rare to see such a sincere emotional novel, I really like it.