As the old saying goes, "Xiao He can make you, and Xiao He can break you." There could be no better saying for Mu Zixuan. He was brought low by Du Yiman, and he rose again because of her. Du Yiman, however, believes that everything depends on its true nature. Mu Zixuan's success came from Mu Zixuan himself. After all, he's got the looks and the talent, and, most importantly, he's devoted. All in all, this is the story of a pretty boy's rise, with help from women as well as hard work of his own.
Author's Note: 1. This is a one-on-one romance, with no harem, I promise. 2. No celebrities served as models for the characters, so please don't dig around. 3. All you lovely readers are welcome to come say hi. My ongoing story, "Soul and Skin," is also open to you lovely readers, so come say hi there too.
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What can I say? Reading this article makes people feel aggrieved. I still like the plot of Su Yidian. The author's writing style is very good.
My first impression of the heroine was very bad. I thought she didn't love the hero.
There is always only one truth, expose it and restore the heroine's innocence
I always feel that the fanatical fan before was Xiaohan
Let's be together soon and be sweet
Why don't you doubt that Xi Xiaohan? I feel like she is suspicious in every aspect.
HI, I\'M JANE
After reading the full text, I feel quite good. The writing style is sophisticated for newcomers, and the plot structure is okay and not draggy, creating suspense points. Even speaking, the subject matter is relatively new.
Personally, I am very selective when reading books. Basically, I really have nothing to say to Lao Na, so no comments are needed at all. This article is already excellent.
It's hard for Jinjiang's orthodox urban literature to get ahead, and they usually struggle to get published, so the data isn't very good, so there's nothing to be sad about. After looking at Lao Na's column, it seems that she has just signed a contract. After Lao Na applies for the list, she should be outstanding.
Well... Let me give you a few shortcomings that outweigh the flaws.
Since it is about the entertainment industry, it is best to add the words "entertainment industry" to the title of the article. Otherwise, just using the word "male god" may not attract many online readers.
Copywriting and covers can be ordered at Jinjiang Shop.
Then I will officially start talking.
First, Lao Na's use of the male protagonist's perspective can be said to be brilliant, but in fact it is also a drawback. Jinjiang is dominated by women, and they hope to enhance their sense of agency. Looking at Lao Na's novel, I think Du Yiman should be the heroine, and Xi Xiaohan should be the naive female supporting character. Regardless of whether my analysis is correct or not, as a reader, I hope that Lao Na can point out who is the first heroine in the copywriting. Because this affects the readers' alignment.
No matter whether Lao Na's story is mainly about plot or romance, readers don't want to be slapped in the face because they are both women and their favorite "first heroine" turns out to be a supporting role.
Regarding the first point, I would like to say that since Lao Na has not been published, it is best to tell readers who the heroine is in the copywriting or otherwise.
Second, the differences in the portrayal of the characters are not too obvious and are relatively flat. After reading it, the only thing people can think of is "This is a magical male protagonist." Of course, the portrayals of many people are not very clear, but if Lao Na wants to write better, she will vigorously distinguish the differences between characters to make the characters vivid. As for this article with a male protagonist, it is best to portray the male protagonist as extraordinary, but the female protagonist should not be too low, and should be worthy of the male protagonist. The female supporting role should be as low-key as possible, after all, she is a clown.
Regarding the second point, I can only say to practice writing as much as possible. When did Lao Na's writing become truly flawless?
Third, I actually saw dialogue like "..." And "...". But I didn't mind it at first, because from the perspective of the whole chapter, there was no problem. But in the next few chapters, I think I should remind Lao Na that it is best not to have too many lines of dialogue without description like this in one chapter. This is because I am afraid that readers will read the text too quickly and not be able to distinguish who is speaking in a certain line. Maybe it's okay once or twice, but too many times and it just sucks.
Regarding the third point, I can only say an appropriate amount.
That's all. After thinking about it for a long time, I finally said cheers. It's not easy for a newcomer, especially writing this kind of article. Being cold is almost universal, but this doesn't mean that the article is bad. The important thing is to persevere. If you value data, hot topics, hot elements, good titles, and good copywriting are all the best choices.
Don't forget your original intention. There is nothing more important than perseverance.
The above are my personal feelings and do not represent the overall level of all Shamei staff. If you are not satisfied, you can place an order at another store, thank you. Come on, you will be better.
—— BY JANE, reviewer of Shamei Long Review Shop
Hello~~I saw you on Tieba~~How did you sign the contract~~I'm so envious~~
A newbie~collect and encourage each other~~
It's very well written. I like this style of writing very much. Maybe I'm just a passerby, but I really want to be friends with you. It's not easy to meet a like-minded person. Can you be a friend? I am the Penguin, and I want to fight side by side with you.
What can I say? Reading this article makes people feel aggrieved. I still like the plot of Su Yidian. The author's writing style is very good.
My first impression of the heroine was very bad. I thought she didn't love the hero.
There is always only one truth, expose it and restore the heroine's innocence
I always feel that the fanatical fan before was Xiaohan
Let's be together soon and be sweet
Why don't you doubt that Xi Xiaohan? I feel like she is suspicious in every aspect.
HI, I\'M JANE After reading the full text, I feel quite good. The writing style is sophisticated for newcomers, and the plot structure is okay and not draggy, creating suspense points. Even speaking, the subject matter is relatively new. Personally, I am very selective when reading books. Basically, I really have nothing to say to Lao Na, so no comments are needed at all. This article is already excellent. It's hard for Jinjiang's orthodox urban literature to get ahead, and they usually struggle to get published, so the data isn't very good, so there's nothing to be sad about. After looking at Lao Na's column, it seems that she has just signed a contract. After Lao Na applies for the list, she should be outstanding. Well... Let me give you a few shortcomings that outweigh the flaws. Since it is about the entertainment industry, it is best to add the words "entertainment industry" to the title of the article. Otherwise, just using the word "male god" may not attract many online readers. Copywriting and covers can be ordered at Jinjiang Shop. Then I will officially start talking. First, Lao Na's use of the male protagonist's perspective can be said to be brilliant, but in fact it is also a drawback. Jinjiang is dominated by women, and they hope to enhance their sense of agency. Looking at Lao Na's novel, I think Du Yiman should be the heroine, and Xi Xiaohan should be the naive female supporting character. Regardless of whether my analysis is correct or not, as a reader, I hope that Lao Na can point out who is the first heroine in the copywriting. Because this affects the readers' alignment. No matter whether Lao Na's story is mainly about plot or romance, readers don't want to be slapped in the face because they are both women and their favorite "first heroine" turns out to be a supporting role. Regarding the first point, I would like to say that since Lao Na has not been published, it is best to tell readers who the heroine is in the copywriting or otherwise. Second, the differences in the portrayal of the characters are not too obvious and are relatively flat. After reading it, the only thing people can think of is "This is a magical male protagonist." Of course, the portrayals of many people are not very clear, but if Lao Na wants to write better, she will vigorously distinguish the differences between characters to make the characters vivid. As for this article with a male protagonist, it is best to portray the male protagonist as extraordinary, but the female protagonist should not be too low, and should be worthy of the male protagonist. The female supporting role should be as low-key as possible, after all, she is a clown. Regarding the second point, I can only say to practice writing as much as possible. When did Lao Na's writing become truly flawless? Third, I actually saw dialogue like "..." And "...". But I didn't mind it at first, because from the perspective of the whole chapter, there was no problem. But in the next few chapters, I think I should remind Lao Na that it is best not to have too many lines of dialogue without description like this in one chapter. This is because I am afraid that readers will read the text too quickly and not be able to distinguish who is speaking in a certain line. Maybe it's okay once or twice, but too many times and it just sucks. Regarding the third point, I can only say an appropriate amount. That's all. After thinking about it for a long time, I finally said cheers. It's not easy for a newcomer, especially writing this kind of article. Being cold is almost universal, but this doesn't mean that the article is bad. The important thing is to persevere. If you value data, hot topics, hot elements, good titles, and good copywriting are all the best choices. Don't forget your original intention. There is nothing more important than perseverance. The above are my personal feelings and do not represent the overall level of all Shamei staff. If you are not satisfied, you can place an order at another store, thank you. Come on, you will be better. —— BY JANE, reviewer of Shamei Long Review Shop
Hello~~I saw you on Tieba~~How did you sign the contract~~I'm so envious~~ A newbie~collect and encourage each other~~
It's very well written. I like this style of writing very much. Maybe I'm just a passerby, but I really want to be friends with you. It's not easy to meet a like-minded person. Can you be a friend? I am the Penguin, and I want to fight side by side with you.