[Reborn] The Good-for-Nothing's Golden Finger

In fact, this article still has a lot of problems~ Let's go one by one. The first is the copywriting. I read it twice and still don't understand what this article is about. Maybe it's a way to write a cool article with the system (Goldfinger) after rebirth? In fact, if you don't know how to write it at the beginning, just try to express clearly what the protagonist wants to do in the most concise language~ Then comes the plot. I read the first four chapters, and I only saw the [plot] of rebirth, and the rest was all daily life. So the question is, are these characters who appear in your daily life your supporting roles or important supporting roles? If not, please consider deleting it. In fact, it is enough to express the plot of your rebirth in the first chapter, and then the plot can be unfolded in the second chapter. For example, the system mentioned in your copy, how the system came out, what impact it had on the protagonist, what twists and turns it caused in her life, and how she solved it are far more explosive than if you write about daily life. Some authors explain the background of rebirth in the first half of the chapter, and then directly unfold the plot in the second half of the first chapter. The plot must be entered quickly and accurately. In addition, my writing style is quite satisfactory. Of course, the writing style here does not refer to the choice of words and sentences. What I mean is that the description of things is not very vivid and immersive. Finally, please work hard, the more you write, the better it will be!

Can you not use the first person pronoun? I can't stand it anymore, especially the word "I". Don't you think it's too much? It's really fun

The problem with the article is not that it is imaginative. The author has a beginning and an end to the whole article. However, the golden finger is too big and it is written in the first person. It is simply shameful. In addition, the writing style is too literal.

Swimming and riding a bicycle become instinctive once you learn them. . . .

It's pretty, it looks very comfortable, it doesn't use your brain, it's silly and sweet, and it's sweet until the end...

Do you know why no one reads your articles? It's because of the system. People don't like to read the system.

Come on ↖(^ω^)↗

I was browsing books these days and happened to see a big article. What should I say? Looking at the copy, why is there a Xueba system, and you can also gamble on stones? Forget about gambling on stones, you are here to cultivate immortals, and you still have a boyfriend from your previous life! ! Taking the heroine to cultivate immortality π_π I couldn't get the cuteness at all. It felt like different systems were put together, a hodgepodge! After reading the first few chapters, I wonder, do you want to write about the story of rebirth, farming, family life, and campus youth Mary Sue? ! The dialogue that feels irrelevant is a little too long-winded. And this is a world of cultivating immortals. The heroine has an awesome husband who is the head of the sect? ! I feel out of place with the world of cultivating immortals. If the heroine has no memory of cultivating immortality, when she wakes up after being reborn in this life, why can she calmly accept the rebirth, the system, the fat cat, and the cultivation of immortality so quickly... I always feel that it is difficult to change the style of painting from the style of rebirth and farming to the style of rebirth of past and present lives.

Readers like to read space articles, but hate to read about systems. The Internet is full of junk articles with bad writing and low IQ. It's not that the space is bad, it's that the writing is bad and the IQ is low! Do you understand?

Come on \^O^/