Migratory Birds

I haven't seen you for a long time, and the story has already changed a thousand times.

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In response to your request, I will post the long review below~ Long comment 1. Hello, I am a power solar term, please take care of me~ Generally speaking, it is just a rather tangled article. The tangle started from the copywriting. Just looking at the copywriting, I think I saw two male protagonists: the male protagonist in the literary version is Guo Ping, and the real version is Qiao Zijiao. And I think the literary version is the male protagonist (a lot of pen and ink is used to write about the female protagonist and his childhood sweetheart), and the real version is the second male lead. Since the second male lead is also very important, it is also included in the copywriting. Damn it, there are only so many places in copywriting. If you write too much, no one will read it and it will be troublesome. If you write too little, sometimes you will feel unclear. In fact, what you wrote is just right, but you spend a lot of ink describing the second male lead, which makes the first male lead feel so embarrassed... The copywriting of the literary version said that the male and female protagonists were childhood sweethearts, but they experienced some hardships (?) In the middle. In the end, the female protagonist accidentally made someone fall in love with her. Yes, I feel that this is the meaning of the copywriting... The first sentence is very good and artistic, but the last sentence does not connect with the previous sentence at all. Secondly, the real version told me that the male protagonist was another person, and that he and the literary version were two different people... And the main text told me that the male protagonist mentioned in the real version was the real male protagonist - Qiao Zijiao. Let's talk about the text The characterization is good. From the dialogue, we can clearly understand the character of the heroine. The heroine is lively and cheerful, but also a little bit wretched... She is so willful and so on, but she is so funny. Let's complain about the male protagonist here. ——"Yes, Qiao is not talented, but I still hope to live up to your father's trust." ——"Mr. Guo." When the male protagonist said these words or sentences, it shocked me deeply. Are you sure the male protagonist is not an ancient person? (T-T) The male protagonist is very artistic... He wears it...? The male protagonist's venomous tongue comforts the female protagonist when she vomits wildly in the toilet: ——"If you want to lose weight, you must control your mouth. If you can't control it, then at least you must know how to cherish your body." What a great comfort... Wait, the male protagonist entered the women's restroom...? "It looks like it's time to take action."... Since the male protagonist wanted to make a move against the female protagonist before but the time was wrong and he didn't, according to this sentence, the male protagonist likes the female protagonist but he just didn't find the right time to make a move. But why does the male protagonist always look at the female protagonist with sarcasm in his eyes? Logically speaking, the male protagonist should be very happy to meet the heroine. Is it because the heroine's words and deeds are inconsistent? Occasionally there are typos in the article... It may also be due to unclear expression that I didn't understand a few paragraphs. Pay attention to the harmonized words, just add a small "/" between the two harmonized words. Almost every chapter has a few squares, which is awkward, and sometimes you can guess what is written and sometimes you don't even know what is written... The novel is one of those without major twists and turns. It just talks about the process of the male protagonist pursuing the female protagonist. It has a pretty leisurely pace. There are so many characters appearing in each chapter, it's hard to react. I feel like there are so many new characters in each chapter that I can't remember them~~~~(>_<)~~~~Sometimes you need to read the previous chapters. Finally, I hope more people will read your article. Long comment 2. Hello, author, Banxia is here to serve you. The following comments are only the opinions of one family. If I am wrong, please forgive me. First of all, there is the problem of the title and copywriting. The title is too literary and the main plot cannot be seen at all. The author may say that this is what he wants, but Banxia would like to say that it is not attractive. The title of a novel is a key factor in attracting people to click in. Ban Xia can only say that the author's big title is not attractive enough, and adding art and freshness may make people abandon the article immediately. As for the copywriting, first of all, the font of the copywriting is too small. I suggest you go to the Jinjiang copywriting code column to see how to design the copywriting. At least make the font larger. The artistic version of the copywriting feels unfocused and not as attractive as the real version of the copywriting below. The entire copy of the literary version focuses on the second male lead, and the male protagonist is mentioned at the end... Which is a bit of a twist, so I suggest the author use the second copy. In addition, Banxia also noticed a problem with the number of words in chapters. The author Dada's first chapter is 5,000+, which is too much for the beginning. Moreover, the author Dada's word count control in the subsequent chapters is not stable enough, with more than 2,000 and more than 1,000. It is recommended that the number of words in each chapter be stable at 2,000-3,000. Regarding the issue of update time, it is recommended that the author fixes a fixed time for updates, and the most important point is: do not interrupt updates. Three thousand updates a day will earn you something to eat. Because once updates are discontinued, it is very likely that newcomers will lose readers. Then after clicking on the first chapter, Banxia had one more thing to say to the author. Typesetting is very important. Too dense typesetting is likely to make the little angels click the × in the upper right corner for the first time. It is recommended to leave blank lines appropriately. Generally, one blank line per paragraph is appropriate. Then there are the author's great language problems and oral problems. Questions about sick sentences and symbols, "I couldn't help but sigh, no wonder there are so many older leftover women in today's society..." Who sighed? Although it can be seen from the context, it still needs a subject. For example, it can be changed to "She couldn't help but sigh..." There is also an ellipsis problem, no. . . . . . But... First, not all usages of "De Di De" are used. For example, the "De" in "Qiao Zijiao's gentle smile" should actually be used as "De". Second, the problem of verbalization. In view of the strict crackdown, many words will be harmonized into oral. It is recommended that the author click the preview button before publishing the article and add a / between sensitive words. This problem will be solved and it will not affect readers' reading of the article. Next, we have to talk about an important issue-rhythm. The author's pace is slow and it is easy for the little angel to abandon the article. First of all, take the first three chapters. In order to retain readers, at least the first three chapters should give a small climax or suspense to attract young readers to continue reading or collect. However, the author obviously failed to do this. Judging from the first few chapters, it is as dull as a lengthy soap opera. And judging from the author's main plot, it should be a story in which the female protagonist meets the male protagonist on a blind date, and then after a series of twists and turns, she successfully turns over, kicks off the scumbag she has been secretly in love with for a long time, and happily gets married with the male protagonist. However, the author's writing style is not enough, and it is easy to add superfluous information, such as inserting lyrics... In that paragraph, there is no need to paste the entire lyrics. You can choose a few sentences with feelings to enhance the atmosphere. There is also the issue of the heroine's image. The heroine's image is too one-sided and thin. Sometimes, in order to highlight the heroine's beauty, the male protagonist's perspective is used to add ancient Chinese poems to exaggerate how beautiful the heroine is. Banxia just wants to complain. The author, you, while saying that the heroine's belly is round and round as if she is pregnant, also said that the heroine's "eyebrows are as light as autumn water, and her jade muscles are accompanied by the breeze." Is it really so precise? Originally, the author's writing style was quite fluent, but inserting such descriptions will only make people feel that the strong Mary Sue style is overshadowed, and more importantly, it will make readers think that the male protagonist is too nymphomaniac... Everything must be done in moderation. It doesn't matter whether the female protagonist is beautiful or not. What is important is that the female protagonist can make people feel included, not inconsistent. The image of a protagonist cannot be summed up in a simple word. For example, the author tries his best to create a gentle and gentle male protagonist, but a truly gentle and gentle male protagonist will have such psychological activities as "Damn, why didn't the phone call come in?"? The author knows that the character's psychological activities and behavior should be in line with the protagonist's image, rather than doing it randomly, which will only give people a sense of character collapse. There is also the issue of plot setting. Judging from the later plots, the author mostly wants to describe the ambiguous plot between the two, but Banxia just wants to say that there can be many kinds of ambiguity. It does not necessarily have to be about the other party being attracted to her, or having other thoughts because of her beauty. Even if you want to write, please write it in a more subtle way! Don't give people the impression that the male protagonist is a smart guy. You were clearly disgusted at the beginning, but why are you attracted to him later? Plot need? This is unreasonable. The relationship between the male and female protagonists progresses too fast. I suggest the author think carefully about it. Don't promote emotions in order to promote the plot, but promote the plot in order to promote feelings. To sum up, the main problems in the author's article are as follows: First, the details determine the success or failure of incorrect sentences, symbols, colloquial expressions, and usage issues. Banxia suggested that the author should pay more attention to it. After all, such problems can be avoided. Second, the title of the novel. A good title can better attract little angels to the author. Banxia suggested that the author should not choose such a literary title. It is difficult to understand and has no relationship with the main plot. Third, the typesetting is too dense. Banxia suggests that for visual comfort, it is better to have empty lines. Fourth, there is a problem with the rhythm of the plot. The plot is protracted and has no excitement and suspense. Ban Xia suggested adding appropriate foreshadowing and cutting off unnecessary plots. Don't promote the plot in order to promote the emotions between men and women, but let the emotions of the male and female protagonists change with the changes in the plot. Fifth, the problem of the protagonist's image is too thin, and sometimes there are serious deviation problems. For example, the author originally set a gentle male protagonist... There can be psychological activities, but please ask the gentle male protagonist to carry out psychological activities, so that there will be no sense of violation. Sixth, the issue of word count and updates. The appropriate number of words for a chapter is 2,000-3,000. Too short or too long is not good. There is also a fixed update time. Three thousand updates per day are sufficient. Seventh, there are too many characters in the first three chapters, and it is easy for people to be confused about priorities, and even facial expressions, making it difficult to tell who is who. Banxia suggested that the plot of unnecessary characters should be appropriately deleted, or their appearances should be postponed. The above are just the words of Banxia family. If there is any bias, please forgive me. This article was reviewed by [This is a review shop] reviewers [solar terms] and [Panaris pinellia]

What a refreshing statement! I have always liked this kind of gentle male protagonist. I have just read two chapters, and the number of characters appearing is already a bit overwhelming. I took it down and read it slowly. Cheers to you!

I originally thought the heroine was pregnant

"Does the three correct views count?" Ha ha ha ha

Wow wow, this beginning is quite attractive. Quite a lot of information The pace can be slower This boy wearing a mask is the male protagonist, right?

Dear, I came to see you. Wenwen is well written! It's just that the layout is a bit dense. Change it. Some sentences could be more concise and better.

The writing is very good. Although the plot is a bit bland, it feels like watching a family drama. It is best to watch it slowly in the afternoon with a cup of tea.