"What love? I thought we all understood that this was just a game we both agreed to play!"
Some people seem to have been here once. The pain has faded until it's as faint as last year's runny stool.
"Tell me, will I lose you?"
"I don't know."
Some people make no demands and ask for nothing, yet they never let you forget them, not even for a moment.
Is it her?
How could it possibly be her?!
Some people are so wonderful that she wants to run away. So wonderful that she wonders if she still deserves a love that will leave its mark on her forever.
Was she alive, or dead?
Is she still alive, or dead?
Will she be alive, or dead?
How many more people will come and go? She's tired, worn out from dealing with it all.
But no matter how hard she struggles, she can't hold on to the tail of her lover, can't keep a passing stranger from flirting with her, and can't even hold back her own tears.
Maybe today just isn't right. In the real world, the ideal person can only reach that so-called tomorrow through death! An eternal tomorrow!
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Various setbacks delayed updates for two weeks. I may do another major revision over the next three days, so don't be confused. The author really is this obsessive. They say a work reflects its author, and like its author, Seeking Survival is a slow burn. This is my first time publishing a story, and I've revised it over a hundred times so far. I've spent more time carefully considering and planning it than actually writing it, and have been building up the material for more than five years. I only hope that taking my time will let me craft a novel readers can't forget or resist. I know this is a niche subject and asks a lot of its readers. If you genuinely enjoy it, please leave your valuable feedback. Feel free to be harsh; I'll take it all to heart. I'm not afraid of a niche subject or slow updates. I'm only afraid that you'll pass through Xu Yi's life in a hurried moment.
P.S. The entire story is undergoing a major revision. Wait for me! Revising my handwritten manuscript takes time, but I will never abandon this story. I'm revising it all over again, and only the first three chapters are done. The plot may change considerably this time. Revision in progress.
The first chapter really feels too long. There are too many exclamations in the crowded section at the beginning. In fact, it can be simply mentioned in one sentence. How to attract readers to be interested in reading? A good start is especially important. The above are purely personal opinions, but I still have to support the author and work hard!
Personally, I think the first chapter is the best, with charm and sophisticated writing.
How to say it? Personally, I think the first chapter is the best, with charm and sophisticated writing.
Let me tell you something. I haven't started reading it yet, but from my point of view the writing is terrible. This copy has no focus, the dialogue is unclear, it does not reflect the character of the protagonist, and the direction of the story cannot be seen. It is a copy that makes people want to click on it after reading it, and has no desire to attract people to click and read. Copywriting that is too vague is not suitable for fast-paced web articles, and most readers will not have the patience to decipher it. I hope the more you write, the better.
Hello, author. I was a little confused at first. I have low acceptance of spoken words with dialects. I understand that the author may want to make the text grounded. However, the author's description is very detailed and close to reality. It can be seen that he is very careful. I have to praise him. However, he is still a little lacking in the grasp of the overall rhythm and the ability to render the atmosphere, such as the ambiguous atmosphere in the private room. It seems to be superficial, and the little thoughts of the characters are not reflected, so it is not particularly attractive. There are many details that readers hope to empathize with. In addition, the general background and general direction are best seen in the first three chapters. In addition, I like the countdown part of 54321 very much, it is very graphic. For the above personal opinions, please support the author.
The writing is really good, but the first chapter feels a bit long. Although there are some sentences that reveal reality and some resonance, there is no cuteness in the first chapter, and the plot also feels vague and unclear, with no sudden focus. The first chapter should be very important... Come on!
Come on, the writing is very good, I hope it gets better and better!
After reading the first chapter, I am showing off as a person who has been through this. I hope Yiyi doesn't mind. Many people should know: It is best not to exceed three lines in a paragraph, otherwise readers will be tired. There should be gaps between each paragraph to make the chapter look beautiful. Also, there is too much introduction in the first chapter, and the plot is a bit vague. This may be a foreshadowing, but it has to be interesting, right? Collect it first and look forward to your growth. Mwah
I came to the forum. Although the author's conception is very serious, I feel that the writing style is still a bit jerky. Need to improve writing skills. The paragraphs in the article are too long. The language dialogue is simple and tends to be streamlined. The scumbag opinions can be ignored. Spread the flowers and come on. I wish the author will write better and better. Let's encourage each other.
The writing is very good, but there are too many things in the first chapter, which is a bit like the constant flashbacks in a movie. There is too much information that I need to accept and digest. Looking forward to the next article