Could anyone have it worse than her? She got rejected twice in six months! How humiliating!
She should have just hidden away and avoided him!
But by a twist of fate, he became her boss. What was she supposed to do now...
Mo Lingran decided that since they were bound to keep running into each other, she might as well take advantage of being so close and get in there first. To hell with politely turning him down!
PS: 1. A warm, healing story, with both secret and open love
2. The male lead is a sly young gentleman with a rather sharp tongue
3. Updated daily...
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Emma, this is the first time I know that you can still talk while diving.
It seems that my sister also likes it
By the way, shouldn't the brakes hit the car glass? Why did it hit the back of the head?
After a while, I think the male protagonist is a little too much~
Hello, author, I am a freshman from Mengmengda. I'm sorry that it took so long to comment. Please forgive me. (づ￣ 3￣)づ
Now let me share my personal thoughts on this article.
First of all, the character's personality is not outstanding enough. Judging from Chu Yan's character, it is unlikely that he would treat Ling Ran to a meal or a trip to the park just because she looks carefree. It is not enough to have only one incident of anger before such things. In fact, the author can talk about what he was doing when he met her (rescuing animals, helping people, etc., Of course, my metaphor is more vulgar), and then find out what kind of person she is from these little things, and then develop a little interest in her (but not like). Only in this way, when he rejected Lingran's confession, he might feel a little sorry for her and have the idea of helping her, so that it would not seem a bit abrupt.
Next, let's talk about the author's supporting role in this article. After all, this is a romance novel. It is best to focus on the affairs of the male and female protagonists throughout the article. Some idlers will not appear if they can. The appearance of some supporting characters must be helpful to the development of the relationship between the male and female protagonists (the deputy CP is another matter). Otherwise, there is no need to give names, just mention them in one stroke. But obviously, the author wanted to write too much. When I read Chapter 15, I didn't know how many people appeared in the article. I was stunned by the names, and my whole thinking was confused. What's more, when readers read the article, the article is still in a serialized state, so how can we ensure that when reading it for the second time, they can still remember the previously unimportant characters and plots?
Finally, I would like to share my suggestions for this article and my suggestions for the author's next article.
The author's writing is very smooth, I'm serious. The author's description of each story is very clear, and the change of each scene is very natural and the transition is very good. It can be seen that the author is still talented in writing articles.
However, when each short story is connected, it is a bit unsatisfactory. In my opinion, this is because you, the author, want to write too much, and the result is counterproductive.
Therefore, I suggest that the author keep these points in mind in future articles——
First, the protagonist must appear in the first three chapters. And, in the following chapters, people must unswervingly believe that he/she is really the protagonist. [For example, in this article, I feel that everyone is competing for the heroine's role, Shen Qingluo, Lu Lu, and even her sister. I thought about it and found that this is not because the heroine is a novice. It doesn't matter if she is a novice, but the author did not highlight her novice aspects. She doesn't interact enough with the male protagonist, so when a female protagonist with a dazzling aura comes along, the author, your heroine, is easily forgotten.
Second, the development of all events must revolve around the male and female protagonists. In fact, there is no need to say this again, it has been said above. The author's description of the events is quite good, but why is he unwilling to write more about what happened between the male and female protagonists?
Third, the character setting must be done well. For example, the character of Cai Chutang in the author Jun Wenzhong is relatively good, maybe it is more funny or something. Still talking about the male protagonist, after reading the comments the author replied, it seems that the male protagonist is aloof? [Hey, why didn't I see it again? Where did I see the author say, 'A warm man is better than a cold man? '] So the author has to stick to this setting. Will Gao Leng treat you to dinner just because he is angry with you? I think the most he can do is look at you once more when he passes by you, and then withdraw his eyes before you can react, right? I don't know if the author can understand this. In other words, once you have set it up, don't break it because you have other ideas, such as eager to highlight the differences between the male protagonist and the female protagonist. In this way, the character's personality will not be distinct, and the aura of the whole person will be dimmed. [Here, I am thinking of a digression. For example, someone writes a fanfic. Because they like a certain villain very much, they remove some of his shortcomings and make him almost perfect. However, you must know that if we like a person or a character, we can tolerate everything about him, even his bad characters. Once it is removed, will he be perfect or will he still be the same person we like before? ←This is nonsense]
Well, that's all. The author's writing style is really good. I hope you can pay more attention to the above three points. I think your writing path will become smoother and smoother (*^__^*)...
I'm usually pretty strict, but I feel like it's okay this time →_→
Anyway, please keep up the good work!
Silly Meow Long Review Shop——Freshman Year
Congratulations on the completion~\\(≧▽≦)/~
After reading the full text, the emotional line is not very clear, there are too many characters, and there is no serious introduction.
It's a bit inexplicable that I like it, and there's no progress. The male protagonist doesn't like it very quickly either.
I don't have much experience describing the characters. For example, when I was in Qianqian 419, I just caught up with him in the next chapter and it felt a bit jumpy. OJZ
I always thought I missed a few chapters and read them without reading them, and I didn't give details where they should be~
The wording is not very good in some places, it's a bit like "write whatever you want to write"
However, the whole article reads smoothly and is not ridiculous, so I can still read it~~
Come on, the author's new article will make more and more progress -)
Is it my imagination... Why do I feel that the name is wrong... I obviously feel that it should be Chu Yan's written Chu Transcript... O(╯□╰)o
Author. . My father has the same name as the hero. My mother's last name is Mo... Help!!
Recommended by a friend~ Come and check it out
Finished with flowers><
The endings of the characters are clearly explained =w= I think the ending is pretty good.
Looking forward to the extra episode~
Emma, this is the first time I know that you can still talk while diving.
It seems that my sister also likes it
By the way, shouldn't the brakes hit the car glass? Why did it hit the back of the head?
After a while, I think the male protagonist is a little too much~
Hello, author, I am a freshman from Mengmengda. I'm sorry that it took so long to comment. Please forgive me. (づ￣ 3￣)づ Now let me share my personal thoughts on this article. First of all, the character's personality is not outstanding enough. Judging from Chu Yan's character, it is unlikely that he would treat Ling Ran to a meal or a trip to the park just because she looks carefree. It is not enough to have only one incident of anger before such things. In fact, the author can talk about what he was doing when he met her (rescuing animals, helping people, etc., Of course, my metaphor is more vulgar), and then find out what kind of person she is from these little things, and then develop a little interest in her (but not like). Only in this way, when he rejected Lingran's confession, he might feel a little sorry for her and have the idea of helping her, so that it would not seem a bit abrupt. Next, let's talk about the author's supporting role in this article. After all, this is a romance novel. It is best to focus on the affairs of the male and female protagonists throughout the article. Some idlers will not appear if they can. The appearance of some supporting characters must be helpful to the development of the relationship between the male and female protagonists (the deputy CP is another matter). Otherwise, there is no need to give names, just mention them in one stroke. But obviously, the author wanted to write too much. When I read Chapter 15, I didn't know how many people appeared in the article. I was stunned by the names, and my whole thinking was confused. What's more, when readers read the article, the article is still in a serialized state, so how can we ensure that when reading it for the second time, they can still remember the previously unimportant characters and plots? Finally, I would like to share my suggestions for this article and my suggestions for the author's next article. The author's writing is very smooth, I'm serious. The author's description of each story is very clear, and the change of each scene is very natural and the transition is very good. It can be seen that the author is still talented in writing articles. However, when each short story is connected, it is a bit unsatisfactory. In my opinion, this is because you, the author, want to write too much, and the result is counterproductive. Therefore, I suggest that the author keep these points in mind in future articles—— First, the protagonist must appear in the first three chapters. And, in the following chapters, people must unswervingly believe that he/she is really the protagonist. [For example, in this article, I feel that everyone is competing for the heroine's role, Shen Qingluo, Lu Lu, and even her sister. I thought about it and found that this is not because the heroine is a novice. It doesn't matter if she is a novice, but the author did not highlight her novice aspects. She doesn't interact enough with the male protagonist, so when a female protagonist with a dazzling aura comes along, the author, your heroine, is easily forgotten. Second, the development of all events must revolve around the male and female protagonists. In fact, there is no need to say this again, it has been said above. The author's description of the events is quite good, but why is he unwilling to write more about what happened between the male and female protagonists? Third, the character setting must be done well. For example, the character of Cai Chutang in the author Jun Wenzhong is relatively good, maybe it is more funny or something. Still talking about the male protagonist, after reading the comments the author replied, it seems that the male protagonist is aloof? [Hey, why didn't I see it again? Where did I see the author say, 'A warm man is better than a cold man? '] So the author has to stick to this setting. Will Gao Leng treat you to dinner just because he is angry with you? I think the most he can do is look at you once more when he passes by you, and then withdraw his eyes before you can react, right? I don't know if the author can understand this. In other words, once you have set it up, don't break it because you have other ideas, such as eager to highlight the differences between the male protagonist and the female protagonist. In this way, the character's personality will not be distinct, and the aura of the whole person will be dimmed. [Here, I am thinking of a digression. For example, someone writes a fanfic. Because they like a certain villain very much, they remove some of his shortcomings and make him almost perfect. However, you must know that if we like a person or a character, we can tolerate everything about him, even his bad characters. Once it is removed, will he be perfect or will he still be the same person we like before? ←This is nonsense] Well, that's all. The author's writing style is really good. I hope you can pay more attention to the above three points. I think your writing path will become smoother and smoother (*^__^*)... I'm usually pretty strict, but I feel like it's okay this time →_→ Anyway, please keep up the good work! Silly Meow Long Review Shop——Freshman Year
Congratulations on the completion~\\(≧▽≦)/~ After reading the full text, the emotional line is not very clear, there are too many characters, and there is no serious introduction. It's a bit inexplicable that I like it, and there's no progress. The male protagonist doesn't like it very quickly either. I don't have much experience describing the characters. For example, when I was in Qianqian 419, I just caught up with him in the next chapter and it felt a bit jumpy. OJZ I always thought I missed a few chapters and read them without reading them, and I didn't give details where they should be~ The wording is not very good in some places, it's a bit like "write whatever you want to write" However, the whole article reads smoothly and is not ridiculous, so I can still read it~~ Come on, the author's new article will make more and more progress -)
Is it my imagination... Why do I feel that the name is wrong... I obviously feel that it should be Chu Yan's written Chu Transcript... O(╯□╰)o
Author. . My father has the same name as the hero. My mother's last name is Mo... Help!!
Recommended by a friend~ Come and check it out
Finished with flowers>< The endings of the characters are clearly explained =w= I think the ending is pretty good. Looking forward to the extra episode~