Completed short story
The Xiangshen Clan has been gifted since ancient times, able to glimpse fate and discern the secrets of heaven. Yet their own destiny is to be imprisoned in the underworld forever, awaiting extinction.
As the clan's Keeper of Fate, Ji Yuan must save his people. But as Ji Yuan, all he wants is to save one person. As long as Shen Yin lives, he is willing to bear heaven's punishment.
But, my Keeper of Fate, I don't want to live on my own. Whether in life or death, even under heaven's punishment, we'll be together.
Premise:
Madam Truthfully Qi, I think this article is very good. Although I generally know the article's worldview and core "conflict" (saving tribesmen or saving loved ones), the conceptual impact is not that strong, but from the perspective of "writing" the story, the layout and planning are quite exciting. First of all, the language environment and artistic conception are well created. After reading so many of the author's modern words, I realized after reading this short story that this is the author's final language style, using realistic beauty and humorous language to create the ethereal and real reality of the fantasy world. Then, the story has almost no delay, the conflicts are concentrated and interlocking, and it feels like it is completed in one go. It just feels like everything is where it should be. For example, where the analysis of past events should appear, there is a just-right memory, and where suspense should be left, there is a crisp cut. If a long novel can reach this level, a masterpiece will be just around the corner. Please share how to achieve such a layout~ Finally, I like some finishing touches. At this moment, I can recount the details that hit my heart without looking back - the judgment about love is as simple as: if the man who said he wanted to accompany me breaks his promise, I will not resent him; but I will not forgive you. PS started talking nonsense. 1. It is quite hard to come up with so many strange spells and so on. 2. I suddenly discovered that "Wu Ming" is not a good name... It has no sense of existence and is not as memorable as an uncommon name, haha. Didn't the adults just give her a random name if they couldn't think of a name? It's too biased... It's better to have a name. 3. Although the existence of the master's brother promotes the plot, I have a question. The great god's father was so cruel that he wanted the great god to succeed him. He even ruined himself and stayed with his wife and daughter. Why did he leave the great god's younger brother behind? Aren't you afraid of brothers being jealous of each other? It always feels weird.