A Close-Knit Neighborhood

This chapter reminds me of my childhood, which was silly and earthy.

It's quite cute, please come on, author!

Hello, author~ This is Daihua serving you (/ω\) So let's get to the point right away and look at the copy first. To be honest, the author's copywriting of this article is really too simple. Although it summarizes the plot of the story well in one sentence, it may not be able to show the real cuteness and highlights of the story well, making it too straightforward. A good copywriting will affect the reader's collection and desire to poke in and read, so it is recommended that the author slightly modify the copywriting to enrich it as much as possible. Let's take a look at the middle of the story. The first half of the story is basically the childhood of Monk Sensen, and the author has put a lot of effort into portraying and describing this innocent time. During the reading process, the plain and warm feeling was very comfortable to read, and the author described some of the living customs of that era very seriously and meticulously, which made me feel a lot better after reading it. However, I still have to mention that the narration of the article is too bland and boring. Although the author also said in the copy that this is a farming article, the too bland plot and narrative may make readers feel that there is no plot to read and abandon the article. Therefore, it is recommended that the author carefully considers the writing in the process of narrating the plot, spends a certain amount of time to conceive the plot, write a small climax/climax appropriately, and try to write a plot with some highlights in the dullness. Let's talk about Sensen and Shang Shang. The author has obviously put a lot of effort into the portrayal of these two children. The author has been very serious in describing Sensen's every move, especially the aggressive temperament as Shang Shang's protector, which was well reflected at a young age. There is also Shang Shang. In fact, I still feel that there is a big contrast in the character of Shang Shang. In the early stages, the cuteness of crying appeared frequently, but in junior high school, he became aloof (?). I think this kind of plot connection is a bit abrupt. I don't know what the author thought⊙▽⊙ Finally, let's talk about some minor problems in the article. There were several errors in the use of punctuation marks in the early stages of the article. For example, when someone wants to speak, add [:] followed by [""]. However, the author's article contains only double quotation marks and no colons. You can check it in the first few chapters and then make modifications. There are also layout issues. The author's layout is too compact, with almost no paragraphs. Everything is crowded together, which is really uncomfortable for the eyes. It is recommended that the author separate a line after describing a scene before moving on to the next scene, or put some dividing lines appropriately to separate the plot. The above is my opinion on this article. The author's writing style still has a lot of room for improvement. I hope that I can continue to work hard to continue this story. Come on! City of N——Chrysanthemum

There are always some girls who risk their lives and don't know how to die.

It feels like Du Sen is slowly moving away from Lin Shang, and I hope Lin Shang will become cheerful.

Shang Shang is quite cautious!

It's very plain and comfortable, but also very exciting. Good luck to the author.

Such an innocent childhood

The relationship gradually became impure. I really like this kind of romance.

The article is well written and I like it very much. Good luck to the author. Looking forward to it. . . .