Trouble of One's Own Making

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When shaping the character of the male protagonist in this article, the author used two completely different characters in his writing techniques. The male protagonist in the boy's version is elegant and gentle, but his character in the girl's version is completely different from what you have recognized before. You may think he is a victim in the first paragraph, but in the next paragraph he becomes an out-and-out "villain". Although the author has made some appropriate foreshadowing in the previous article, the overall effect seems to be that the character change is too sudden. This suddenness will cause the reader to have a selfish thought. The heroine doesn't love him anymore and is looking for an excuse to leave the shackles of this marriage. The reasons she told Chen seemed even more feeble. There are several conflicts in details in the work, such as: The heroine said to Yang Chen: "Find a boyfriend who is obsessed with my appearance." However, at the beginning of the article, the author said: Beautiful girls will take the initiative to approach him. How deep is the male protagonist's definition of "beautiful"? No one knows, but he can face "beautiful girls" without being tempted. Readers may be tempted to ask, is he really obsessed with appearance? Or some people may say that this just means that he has high requirements, but - who doesn't like a "beautiful woman with inner qualities"? Why do you say that the male protagonist loves her appearance? Of course, in the work, the author also deeply analyzes the inner world of the male protagonist through the dialogue between the male protagonist and the female protagonist. The heroine took the initiative to call Chen when the hero left. This shows that the heroine has already made plans in private. A person who has made all plans will say to the hero: "Next Friday, even if I ask for leave, I will come to pick up the airport. You must remember to call me every day and send text messages!" At this point, the heroine does not look cute at all. I can only say that maybe the author just wants to expose the hypocrisy of the male protagonist and the female protagonist (collectively referred to as the hypocrisy of human nature, haha ​​^_^). Chen's appearance was in the girls' version, and there was no sign of such a person appearing before. As a short story, good use of this point will give the novel unexpected effects, but in this article, the author still wants to mention the existence of this person, even if it is just a passing mention, you can even just say "she once had a childhood sweetheart." Chen's late appearance, coupled with the deep affection "given" to him by the author, this relationship is like a castle in the air, making people feel too insecure. The above represents my personal opinion. The overall effect of the short story is pretty good, and the plot is unexpected. Because it is a brick post, it may be a little harsh, so please forgive me, both the author and the fans.

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