I Don't Dare Say Your Name

Hello, author, I am the bun from Shamao Changpingpu. Please forgive me if I don't like or find anything inappropriate. O(∩_∩)O First of all, the title of the book "I Don't Dare to Call Your Name" is very literary at first glance. The one-sentence copy is "Who did you sing the ending of that song about us." It looks a little sad, and Baozi likes it. However, in order to attract other readers, Baozi suggested that the author write a relatively detailed introduction (either text or cute). This is fine. You can also go to the store to ask for a nice cover to increase the visual sense. In terms of chapters, Baozi feels that the title is a bit messy. The so-called messiness means that there should be no old and modern titles such as "My heart is full of joy for you, I don't know you" and "Please take me away". In terms of word count, it is a bit lacking. It is best to use 25 for a chapter of Jinjiang article. The optimal word count is between 00 and 3000. It is also the first time that I have seen the author actually use double quotation marks and commas in the dialogue. Author, what are you doing? I am so gorgeous that I hope the author can improve. As a reader, if you don't look carefully, you won't know that this is a dialogue, and you will think that it is just a simple statement. If an author can't even use punctuation marks, the reader's first reaction will be to doubt, can this author write well? So the author should take punctuation marks seriously, they have feelings (O(∩_∩)O). Finally, let's talk about the description: 1- Probably because the author's story starts from the childhood of the heroine and the hero, the pace is a bit slow, and the author's punctuation marks make it a bit confusing for Baozi to see, which is really difficult to express. In addition, the pace is slow, Baozi thinks that the main plot of such childhood sweethearts stories is usually placed on the male and female protagonists after they become adults, so Baozi will not comment here. However, it is best to speed up the rhythm. You may not write anything at all, but try not to procrastinate, lest readers gradually lose appreciation and click the upper right button to close. Also, the story about childhood sweethearts cannot take advantage of Jinjiang and is even a bit unlucky, so it is a cold story. This kind of articles will basically be buried in the sea of ​​books in Jinjiang where the pace requires speed, so the editors try their best to remind authors not to write on such topics, and even if they write, they should speed up. 2-Speaking of description, Baozi feels that the author sometimes seems to be literary, a bit like a fresh and refreshing movie, which is very comfortable, and sometimes feels that the writing is bad (although I know the literary route the author took, there are still deviations in some chapters). Although there is a slight difference in the writing of literature and literature, Baozi still feels that the characters who grow up in the author's works lack enthusiasm. They are very flat and unfulfilled characters. The stories are basically told simply, lacking the meaning of interaction between the characters, and there is no vivid sense of reality. 3-Baozi feels that the author has missed some considerations and added some words that need not be written. However, some Baozi feels that when it is time to highlight the emotional direction of the heroine, the author is a bit too light and understated in the description, although in the later paragraph he wrote to his brother, The letter is well added, but there is still a lack of emotional description in the first few chapters, so Baozi feels that while the author is blindly considering the literary style, he should also pay attention to the necessary description of the characters (such as the background of the scene, actions, eyes, etc.). Finally, Baozi wishes the author Jun Yue to write better and become a god soon. Silly Meow Changping Shop----Baozi.

If you have a cold, take a good rest. I feel like the description in this chapter is too simple. It should be rendered with more pen and ink. It will make people cry even more. Good night.

The author of this chapter has something to say, which makes him very emotional for a long time. As a child, I also saw the shadow of my own childhood in Su.

Oh, it's Li Wenchou, I was beaten into a dog. This chapter Ji Enge is so cruel

Haha, does Li Wengou like poetry?

Ji Enge was so kind to his sister. I really wanted to have a brother like him. ^O^ It's good that my brother loves his sister. I hope the warmth will continue. There is another question. Shishi is so strong that she was able to pull Ji Enge out of the pit. Here comes the tomboy♥

I'm in tears, this chapter is so sad. Let me cry for a while. It is destined to be a tragedy for an ordinary girl to fall in love with an outstanding boy. . . . . .

My friend is here, you have to keep writing. Orange likes your story very much.

Xia Qixi has a short story called I Dare Not Call Your Name, because the male pig's trotters and the female pig's trotters have the same name. But what you wrote is also very good. It's about a brother-sister relationship. I really like the brother-sister love story recently. Will pay attention.

, You can get a better-looking cover. After reading this article, I really like this girl Su Muye so much. She knows exactly what she wants. Even if he uses any unfair means, I will not hate her. I also saw myself in her when I was younger, humble but unwilling to give up. As you said, I was never a name you suddenly called out when you were drunk. I was just the woman who has been standing on your right side for so many years, chatting with you and growing up with you. But I am still very happy to meet you in my most beautiful years. But I am still very happy to meet you in my best years. I miss loving you when I was younger. Come on.