Reborn: Winning Over the Top Student

The development is too fast, and it is impossible to fall in love at first sight. There is no logic and it feels so novice.

Isn't this too fast? A bit abrupt...

Only I can think of another novel, in which Yan Moyu, a white lotus flower, defeated her sister with her pitiful appearance. Later, the female supporting character was reborn to counterattack Yan Moyu.

Progress is a bit faster...

The overbearing president falls in love with me

It's such a vulgar novel, but I like it hahaha~\(≧▽≦)/~

Review of "Rebirth: Knocking Down the Academic Bully" Thank you, the author, for naming me. I am the commentator responsible for this long review: Uncle. Today is October 28, 2014, and the reading progress is all free chapters. At the beginning of the long review, I would like to first congratulate the author for entering v. Secondly, I want to say sorry. Due to my personal reasons, I delayed the long review for a while. As a result, when I officially started reading the article, the article was already on the shelf, so I couldn't read more chapters. After some reflection recently, I discovered that I have a shortcoming as a reviewer: I am very bad at praising authors and am always used to explaining the shortcomings of articles. I thought this was a very bad phenomenon, so I conducted self-criticism and set a goal for the future - to strive to become a New Three Reviews commentator who is good at discovering the bright spots of authors and articles! Well, so today's long review will start with the advantages! First, let's take a look at the title, copywriting, and subject matter. I noticed a detail in "You have something to say" before. Is this the author's first time writing an article? I think it's pretty good if it's the first time I've written an article and it's reached this level. When many writers write an article for the first time, let alone getting it published, they may not even be able to sign a contract, so the starting point for authorship is still very high! When I saw the order for the first time, I made a decisive decision to accept it. Part of it is because of the roll call, but what about the other part? It's because of the title and copywriting. The girl's copywriting is very concise, without any fancy code, and it looks quite comfortable (but it's best to enlarge the font size). Although it is very simple, it is not monotonous. It concisely and clearly explains the main plot trends, as well as the names and even personalities of the male and female protagonists. The small theater is a bit bland, but it is still interesting and necessary to exist. Overall, it's a very accurate and well-written copy. I haven't seen such crisp and clear copy in a long time, and it left a particularly good impression on me. The title also left a very good impression on me. Seven words, three keywords: rebirth, knockdown, academic dominance, a very eye-catching title. First of all, "rebirth" is the theme of Guiwen, an enduring and popular theme. "Knock down" and "xueba" are two-dimensional red words for a period of time. A very good title, which not only points out the subject matter, but also points out the direction of the plot, as well as the cuteness. It's just perfect! Such a title, such a copywriting. Is it possible not to get readers' attention? Of course it's impossible! Author, I have to praise you, this beginning is so beautiful! I think the author should have made sufficient preparations before writing the article, so he can have such a good copy and title. I often hear people say, "Opportunities only come to those who are prepared." Now that I think about it, it couldn't be more true. #Energy ahead, non-combatants please evacuate immediately! ##Repeat, this is not a drill! # Maybe it's because the copywriting and the title of the novel left such a good impression on me that the gap felt a bit obvious after I clicked on the main text... Frankly speaking, whether it's the style of writing or the direction of the plot, Guiwen is not my favorite. Putting aside my personal taste issue, I feel that Guiwen is a bit immature in terms of writing style, rhythm control and character creation. The room for improvement is still huge. Since the author has no special requirements, I will mainly focus on characterization and writing rhythm, which I personally think I am good at analyzing. First, let's analyze the heroine, Su Ruoli. As for this person, he died of a heart attack in his previous life, and then he was reborn with maximum luck. Then she naturally gave me the first impression of a weak, delicate, sickly little girl. Then I realized that I was totally wrong... This girl was so cool that she could fly! ! ! For example: I got rid of the scumbag who was chasing after the original owner, and taught a lesson to the idiot White Lotus, Balabala. From this, we can get a glimpse of the author's positioning direction for the heroine - a cool and crazy girl. Well, I feel like I summed it up pretty well haha... However, imagination is beautiful, but reality is cruel. With all due respect, apart from your intuitive description, I can completely see that it is not coming out, coming out, main, corner, to, bottom, where, inside, energy, field, strong, big. I have told the authors more than once: characterization does not mean piling words on her, nor does it mean piling words on her! ! ! If you just say "xxx's powerful aura makes xxx scared" readers will recognize that this character is really powerful! What about persuasion? Have eaten? Spit it out! I just don't understand. What did the heroine do to make everyone think she has a strong aura? Just because I saved a little white flower? Slap your ex-crush's current crush in the face? I'm sorry I can't agree. I think no matter what it is, there must be proof. Just because she is the protagonist, she can't open a cheat, right? Also, by the way... Why does the heroine Mao want to save Xiao Baihua? Is it because she wants to highlight her ancient charm? Or is it that she already likes to be nosy in her character? Seriously... I don't see the need to save Xiao Baihua at all! Did I miss something? ! I thought the heroine was a cool girl! It felt like there was no foreshadowing at all, it just happened so suddenly... And I also became good friends with the heroine... OK, let's continue with the topic. Originally, I just felt that the shaping of the heroine was a little puzzling. But it wasn't until the male lead showed up that I dropped my glasses. Yes, it's so surprising... Such a powerful and cool girl... Turned into a delicate flower that blushes at every turn. The contrast between before and after is too great qaq Ah... I really have mixed feelings. I feel like the heroine is a sexually transformed version of the crazy CEO. In this case, the male protagonist is a crazy CEO who has not yet changed his gender⊙o⊙! Well... The little white flower is a typical little white flower, pitiful and pitiful, but with a strong heart... The second male lead is a typical evil playboy, and then he hangs himself on a little white flower... After a deep sadomasochistic relationship and a thousand sails, the two finally get married! Wow! ! ! Did you see that? ! What a big advantage! What? What is it, you ask? Needless to say, spicy! What I think is particularly great is that although the author, you are relatively weak in shaping individual characters. However (this twist is super important), all the main characters have completely different personalities. It can be seen that - the heroine is a cool girl, very flamboyant and powerful; the second heroine is a girl who is soft on the outside but strong on the inside, and is very shy; the second male lead is a charming and a bit carefree type; the male protagonist is usually dark-hearted, but when he meets the heroine, he becomes an infatuated man (specifically, he falls in love at first sight), and has a soft heart (specifically, he likes the heroine orz when he sees the heroine touching a kitten). Ignoring the point of pale characterization (the portrayal of other characters similar to the heroine is all a matter of wording), I feel that the most gratifying point is what I just mentioned - the personalities of each main character in the article are different. Nowadays, many novels actually have the phenomenon of facial makeup of characters. It seems that there is no difference between two characters except their names. At this point, the author has done a good job! ★Suggestion 1: Pay attention to the shaping of characters, and learn to enrich the characters with plots. I went and scanned the word count and felt that it was a big deal. I actually wrote so much. Then let's briefly talk about some issues in the writing! I feel that the pace of this article is too hasty. Many plots could have been expanded upon. I feel that it is too hasty and not interesting enough. Then there could be less unnecessary descriptions of the characters' appearance, but too much would make it seem deliberate. ★Suggestion 2: Pay attention to detailed writing and don't blindly pursue simplicity. Then the relationship between the male and female protagonists was a bit unnatural, and it felt like it was progressing too fast and too abruptly. What's more... I've already touched her personally, and then saying "I'm not such a casual person! What do you think of me!", Doesn't it sound a bit like playing hard to get... ★Suggestion 3: The relationship between the protagonists is not natural enough and too abrupt. Overall, I think Guiwen is a slap-in-the-face and cool article. Of course, this evaluation does not contain any derogatory connotations at all. As far as the current trend is concerned, Shuangwen is still quite popular. A very obvious problem with Takabumi is that he was hit in the face, but it made him feel a little uncomfortable. Why? The secondary reason is that the pace of the writing is too hasty. Before the reader has entered the state, the slap in the face has been completed, and there is not even a lingering sound. It is like a dream... The main reason is that the IQ of the supporting characters is too low, and there is no sense of accomplishment after the game! Do you know what I mean? It's the kind of feeling when a maxed-out player beats a rookie who just came out of the novice village to the ground like he's looking for teeth - it's so natural. There's no need to feel good, it's just a shame! Only when you defeat someone who is at the same level as you, or even better than you, will you feel "Wow! It's so cool!" ★Suggestion 4: To put it simply, please improve the IQ of the supporting characters. In order not to exceed 3,000 words, I will end it quickly! Although this long review is more critical, it also has a lot of complimentary words... I hope I didn't offend the author, otherwise I might have to die to apologize... What's the point, it's still the same sentence, I have a bad mouth, but I have a very kind heart! If I offended you in any way, I really didn't mean it! Hope Haihan qaq Finally, I wish the author a high income and become a god as soon as possible! ——By Shicheng Studio. Commentator: Uncle. ——Serve you wholeheartedly=U=

The feeling of the president's writing. . .

What's your logic? I want to ask if the heroine has super powers? How did she find that Yan?

Don't give up, ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh