Jiang Chen! Open Up, I've Got a Package

My friend's name is Qiudi, I'm speechless~

Is this an update resumption?

Is the ending of Edward's unrequited love HE or BE?

... Will Guo Jia's reincarnation appear? Quite like him

I will continue to pursue it, the author, please come on! Great writing!

Are Tiandao and Hongjun BOSS?

I saw this one in one go, it's so great! Keep up the good work!

... Is Taoist Yuan the villain's boss? !

A mixture of modern cities and fantasy legends, a mixture of Western fantasy and Eastern legend. The setting of the article is far contrary to the current craze. It does not chase the trend or follow the popular direction. It just creates a general who calls himself Jiang Chen and lives peacefully in this bizarre world. Okay, let's talk about the title and copy first. The meme of opening the door to receive express delivery quickly became popular in every corner of the Internet as soon as it spread on Weibo. When the author came up with the idea, he must have put a lot of effort into making it clear and eye-catching. The copywriting also has a matching conversational structure, and I have a rough idea of ​​the CP attribute. I originally thought this must be an article about rejoicing over enemies or about being in love with each other, but it turns out that I am really weak. The beginning of the text focuses on farming and urban life. Jiang Chen is a doctor who lives a calm life and is calm and open-minded. Because of a courier, he got his destined little friend - Cain. The two are both tall and lonely, and they develop a crush on each other as they get to know each other, so the whole novel is about falling in love and fighting monsters. It highlights all aspects of the protagonist's attack, strength, strength, and brain capacity, and also depicts a not grand but extremely unforgettable battle between monsters. Through the full text, it can be seen that the author has carefully crafted every character in the text. Even the soy sauce delivery boy has certain preliminary attributes. And what I like most are the conversations that are casual or linked to context. Tactful but not procrastinating, subtle but hiding philosophical points. It can hit the center to draw out the character's psychology and subsequent development, and it makes people feel neither obtrusive nor boring. As the saying goes, "It's hard work but not indignant, and it's a sigh of relief when you watch it." There are ingenious settings, hard-working ideas, and diligent depictions. These are the advantages. The author please continue to persevere! After talking about the advantages, let's talk about the disadvantages. 1. Cain is one of the cute points of this article. He is imprisoned in a box, but he is not willing to let the mermaid be eaten. According to the previous chapters (chapters 1 to 5), he should be an elegant, aloof, evil, domineering, arrogant and even contemptuous king. He should not be shaken by anyone or anything even if he is imprisoned for thousands of years. But later on, the characteristics of being explosive, arrogant, impulsive, and silly gradually appeared. Perhaps the author wanted to flesh out the characters, but the transformation was a bit harsh. There is a hint that this character's character may be unstable or have a tendency to collapse. 2. The pig's feet are extraordinary. This is the first thing that attracts people's attention. To lay out the foreshadowing and pave the way for the future, the writing paragraphs are all clues. Cain's incident leads to the pig's foot attack, which is a good joke. But why are there still so few comments? You can think about whether the time you gave the instructions is wrong, or whether the way you spread it out is not surprising. Fantasy settings and suspenseful clues have always been a magic weapon to hook fans, but they are also double-edged swords. Based on the outline, the author should consider whether it is the right time and the right way to present each surprising paragraph of the article to the readers. 3. There are always several irrelevant points throughout the story. One second it was a critical moment, and the next second the characters would complain. Sometimes this feeling of sadness and joy is not achieved at the same time, but it makes people visually tired. The author has just started writing the article, so there is no need to worry about polishing the writing skills. If the writing is stable, the plot is reasonable, and the characters are flexible and distinctive, then it's great! 4. Please use the psychological activities of the characters flexibly. Too much will make the character feel pretentious, and some may even guess that there is no need to continue reading; too little will not resonate with readers. Some may also be mistaken for trying to make up the word count. Furthermore, for a long description of scenery and characters, write three sentences on the key points, and go over the non-key points in one sentence. For example, the castles, palaces, sounds, nights, etc. That appear, concise language may leave more room for imagination o(*^▽^*)o The reason why there is not too much emphasis on plot and character setting is because these are areas where the author is very good at. The biggest problem is "degree". As long as the technical description, character psychology, etc. Are controlled within a reasonable "degree", it will be a great novel. I hope the author can continue to work hard, and one day he will get the excitement he deserves. (づ￣ 3￣)づ ~ Illegal gathering long review shop by: Kui Xi

Come on, well written