Banished Immortal: Tian Sheng [Top]

I feel like I have been manipulated by heaven since I met my apprentice←_←

Master... Refers to the great working people. In fact, you should use the master. Once you are a teacher, you will always be a father.

The protagonist has been replaced in the next film, but so many foreshadowings have not been explained clearly? Doesn't the protagonist of this article appear?

It's actually over!!! Okay, I said that as I have already jumped into the pit of n cultivators. . . Congratulations on the completion~\(≧▽≦)/~Spread flowers and spread flowers

Overall it's pretty good, but the ending is not so good

Very very good

The ending feels a bit sudden, because suddenly time has passed and the protagonist seems to understand everything, and we have no idea what happened, because why does he seem to have a memory? What kind of memory is that? It's not clearly written here, and why does it make Fang want to laugh when Shao becomes his apprentice? I can't understand this either. In addition, I don't understand the previous memory of "Yuxuan" either. It ended instantly and I burst into tears without any intention of continuing. [Although I was very anxious to learn the sect, I still endured it. Since he learned the cause and effect, he has understood the reason why Shao Yun fell asleep for so long. Actually, what is the reason for this? I was confused until the end. Although Shao had fainted before, so he thought that this would be a foreshadowing, but the reason behind it was still not found, so what was the reason? Well, the author said later that there will be a sequel, but the title is science fiction, I don't know if there is a reason for it, but I feel that it is both cultivation and science fiction, and it feels a bit awkward. General comments: The author's writing style is fresh and refreshing. I thank the author for bringing us a period of daily life of cultivators. This writing style reminds me of fresh writing on farming. During the "Internet Revolution" moment, it is not recommended to do something inappropriate for children~~ Although Shao has always been a child, which makes people seem a bit fetish, but as a fresh writing, it is a good writing. Let me complain about typos again, hahaha, there is something weird here, don't take it personally~ I saw a paragraph in the article about "beauty" entering the city lord's place. When I encountered this word, I deliberately read the article up and down, and finally understood it to mean "no one", because only after "no one" will jump. . . . . . [Hang your face, am I right? Then there is another situation where the "Hui" sect is here. I thought, is it "Hui" sect or "Hui" sect? Um, if inspiration comes and goes quickly, I think typos are nothing, because I have also made typos~ [Fuck~] Then let's talk about the author's control. I think the storyline is good, and the author's adventures one after another are good, but the sense of layering is not very strong. I always feel that the author suddenly entered the adventure and was confused all of a sudden~ In fact, the literary concept is great~ Come on~!!!

The author is cute, it's really amazing to attack you, and it's mainly about Wen Meng.

Doesn't the protagonist dislike being touched by others? Just because that child is a sufferer, do you want to break the previous setting for him? There was no transition at all, just a few words of "I don't know why this happened." It felt too stiff and a little strange. It's not that you can't make special cases for Shou, but you can't have no transition at all... I hope there will be an explanation later... Otherwise, it will give people the impression that the protagonist will become the Holy Father as soon as he meets Xiao Shou...

Came over to urge you to draw!! And become a god quickly. I will hug your thighs. System, I love small systems! To sum up, write well, don't let the ending be bad, and don't hurt readers for the sake of transparency and hugging! Ouch!