[One-sentence summary] In the 21st century, a model who looks almost exactly like Captain America is recruited by S.H.I.E.L.D. to pose for a commemorative Captain America poster. Later, the model meets the real Captain...
Setting:
Captain America x professional model
Cap is 26, Chris is 25.
The plot touches on the ending of Captain America: The First Avenger and a tiny bit of the Avengers plot. The extras involve the Fantastic Four and Captain America: The Winter Soldier.
Warning:
OOC, a fluffy, silly little fic! OOC, a fluffy, silly little fic! OOC, a fluffy, silly little fic! (Important things must be said three times.)
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Theme:
Awesome~ The author, please come on and write more good articles!
PS: I stand with Dongdong!
Why haven't you recognized it yet (⊙⊙)
Good lookingヾ(@⌒ー⌒@)ノ
... A bunch of bad friends...
Bruce... I thought you were a good person..., Tony led you astray TT
The author, please go to the store and ask for a cover. Although it is finished, people rely on clothes rather than suits, and there will still be many new readers~~
The author's writing is super~~great~~ (I think it's so cute when I cover my face (weird person)
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Mirror likes the captain very much, so as soon as he saw the author's request for comment, Mirror followed.
From the author's content page, we can tell that this is a short story about Captain America. The two protagonists in the story seem to be Captain America and a model who looks very much like him. What kind of situation would it be like for these two characters to collide and talk about feelings? I have to say that the moment I saw the introduction, Mirror's mind was already filled with thoughts.
Because it is a short story, Mirror is just a matter of reading and commenting at the same time. Whenever you see a point that needs comment, stop and say a few words. It can be said that Mirror hopes to be able to reproduce the reader's mood when reading this article!
If, while reading the review, the author thinks: Why are the sentences written by this person so strange... Why are the links before and after so strange, and why is the writing so weak? Jingjing apologizes, because Jingjing is trying voice input recently, so sometimes the words are spoken without thinking. Orz, I will modify it after typing, but I guess it will still look a little strange.
If the author is struggling with the nonsense about mirrors... Well, this is a character issue Orz
Comment while reading
After reading the first chapter of the author, Jingjing feels that the more active readership of this article should be within the circle, because some of the names do not have special character introductions, and some of the jokes require some knowledge of the work to understand. Of course, it is precisely because of this writing style and feeling that readers can feel that the author is writing for true love.
In general, after reading the first chapter, Jing Jing feels that although the author is not the kind of person who is particularly cautious and gorgeous in word choice, his writing style is very smooth and the organization is relatively clear. Although I haven't seen some translations that fans of British and American dramas hope to see, I think it is a successful description method that allows readers to think of the voices and smiles of the original characters while watching.
After reading the second chapter, Jingjing felt that the author was quite casual in his writing. For example, the writing style of sunglasses ok, mirror ok, although not so rigorous, gave people a more casual feeling. Generally speaking, it gave people a more life-like feeling! Another person feels that when the real captain and the fake captain met, Chris kept talking about playing Captain America. In fact, more words could be spent describing the appearance of the real captain. Because just reading the last words of Chapter 2, you don't feel that this is an encounter between two people who look very similar. Such a dramatic moment seems not to be fully expressed.
In the third chapter, Mirror can only say that there are too many dialogues. Although it can be felt that the author is really trying to use dialogue to highlight the characteristics of the two people, it still feels a bit confusing when viewed line by line. The necessary character expressions, etc. Still need to be added, because if you just read the third chapter in this way, it is really difficult to feel which sentence was said by which person if you don't study it very carefully. Especially among readers who read books online, most people just drag the mouse to the end. In this case, the readers may not feel very good about the third chapter. And I personally feel that it is better to try to write more actual plots in each chapter.
However, considering that the author's article is a short story, I think it is up to the author to take charge of it himself.
After reading Chapter 4, I still feel that the plot setting of two people who are very similar is not outstanding enough. After all, I find this point to be the most attractive point in copywriting. The author can highlight this feature more strongly through more emotions and the perspectives of passers-by and bystanders. After all, because the author wrote in the introduction about "a model who looks very similar to Captain America," readers thought that the two people should look similar to twins from the beginning.
If the author wants to write about two people who are similar but others can tell them apart at a glance, I think some preparation should be made at the beginning.
When Jing Jing was writing his own articles, one of the things that made him very irritable was that he rarely had the opportunity to write about his daily life, and he was always rushing to write about the plot. But I don't know why, after knowing that the author wrote short stories and reading several daily chapters in a row, Mirror began to look forward to some plots other than daily life.
Another thing related to the previous article is that in terms of daily life, Jingjing has always felt that no matter how much you write, as long as it is written with love, readers will like it. But the mirror feels that it might be better if a third, fourth or fifth person is added to daily life. Because through the eyes of others, coupled with the drama and some dialogue generated by two very similar looks together, it may make daily life more cheerful and make readers like it more.
To be honest, by the time I got all the way to Chapter 11, I had almost forgotten the setting that the two people looked similar. I think in fact, as a normal plot trend, when two people with similar looks stay together, there will always be some wonderful collisions or feelings. However, there are still relatively few that can be seen in the article.
When I read Chapter 13, someone finally lamented that the two people were twins. However, if we can focus on this and focus on some of the surprises and even frights of others, I think it will be a cute point of the article.
In addition, I think a small plot can be added. For example, the directors, producers, or even Chris himself, will have some ideas after seeing the captain... For example, when filming a captain promotional video, let the two captains appear together, or have the two captains appear together at the premiere of the movie. This kind of behavior and ideas are like hype. I think after all, the author mostly writes about daily life, so some small ideas from daily life can also be added to make the two of you have more fun. This also prevents readers from feeling that the author's novels only have a few characters and are relatively monotonous.
When I saw Loki's appearance in Chapter 20, Jing Jing felt that this kind of plot was quite exciting. At least it was more exciting than the previous daily routine. Then the mirror began to have a sense of anticipation for such a plot, needing... More! More! More! Drama! The mirror is hungry.
In addition, Jingjing felt that the author was relatively strict when writing the battle scene between Captain and Rocky. In terms of the description of actions, energy description and sequence, he was very clear and made the whole battle scene lose some momentum, as if he was listening to a more straightforward football commentary. In other words, it's like people in the martial arts world compete with each other using verbal moves, without the immersive feeling of fighting.
Mirrors are also a big weakness in combat, so I can't make any specific suggestions for modifications. Personally, I think the author can refer to other articles, such as fight scenes written by boys. I think it is more worthy of learning.
Summary
I feel that there are too many daily routines in the whole article, and the story in the daily plot is not full enough. I think there can be more daily plots, but I hope the content is more substantial so that the two protagonists can have more fun. Also, put more passers-by A, B, C, D, etc., So that there are not only a few people left in the whole world.
Although the original work has more plot, it is not suitable for some authors, but for the authors of true love, it is also a good way to make readers happier.
However, I think the author will make rapid progress in writing articles after completing each one, because when I saw the introduction, Jingjing liked it very much. When I saw the plot description of Loki's appearance, Mirror also found it very exciting. In other words, the author actually knows how to capture the readers' appetite. It's just that Jingjing believes that when the author wrote this article, he hoped to write something he liked, so he did not follow the commercial route and did not necessarily cater to the readers' tastes. However, Jingjing firmly believes that as long as the author continues to work hard, readers' hearts will be seduced bit by bit, until they are seduced by the author and can no longer look away!
Come on! Looking forward to more works in the Male God series!
New copywriting! The little spider is coming~ By the way, Alphabet King is me 233
Loki can actually lift 5 tons, he is a giant.
Awesome~ The author, please come on and write more good articles! PS: I stand with Dongdong!
Why haven't you recognized it yet (⊙⊙)
Good lookingヾ(@⌒ー⌒@)ノ
... A bunch of bad friends... Bruce... I thought you were a good person..., Tony led you astray TT
The author, please go to the store and ask for a cover. Although it is finished, people rely on clothes rather than suits, and there will still be many new readers~~
The author's writing is super~~great~~ (I think it's so cute when I cover my face (weird person)
Good Words Collection Shop|Mirror Orders Words written in front Mirror likes the captain very much, so as soon as he saw the author's request for comment, Mirror followed. From the author's content page, we can tell that this is a short story about Captain America. The two protagonists in the story seem to be Captain America and a model who looks very much like him. What kind of situation would it be like for these two characters to collide and talk about feelings? I have to say that the moment I saw the introduction, Mirror's mind was already filled with thoughts. Because it is a short story, Mirror is just a matter of reading and commenting at the same time. Whenever you see a point that needs comment, stop and say a few words. It can be said that Mirror hopes to be able to reproduce the reader's mood when reading this article! If, while reading the review, the author thinks: Why are the sentences written by this person so strange... Why are the links before and after so strange, and why is the writing so weak? Jingjing apologizes, because Jingjing is trying voice input recently, so sometimes the words are spoken without thinking. Orz, I will modify it after typing, but I guess it will still look a little strange. If the author is struggling with the nonsense about mirrors... Well, this is a character issue Orz Comment while reading After reading the first chapter of the author, Jingjing feels that the more active readership of this article should be within the circle, because some of the names do not have special character introductions, and some of the jokes require some knowledge of the work to understand. Of course, it is precisely because of this writing style and feeling that readers can feel that the author is writing for true love. In general, after reading the first chapter, Jing Jing feels that although the author is not the kind of person who is particularly cautious and gorgeous in word choice, his writing style is very smooth and the organization is relatively clear. Although I haven't seen some translations that fans of British and American dramas hope to see, I think it is a successful description method that allows readers to think of the voices and smiles of the original characters while watching. After reading the second chapter, Jingjing felt that the author was quite casual in his writing. For example, the writing style of sunglasses ok, mirror ok, although not so rigorous, gave people a more casual feeling. Generally speaking, it gave people a more life-like feeling! Another person feels that when the real captain and the fake captain met, Chris kept talking about playing Captain America. In fact, more words could be spent describing the appearance of the real captain. Because just reading the last words of Chapter 2, you don't feel that this is an encounter between two people who look very similar. Such a dramatic moment seems not to be fully expressed. In the third chapter, Mirror can only say that there are too many dialogues. Although it can be felt that the author is really trying to use dialogue to highlight the characteristics of the two people, it still feels a bit confusing when viewed line by line. The necessary character expressions, etc. Still need to be added, because if you just read the third chapter in this way, it is really difficult to feel which sentence was said by which person if you don't study it very carefully. Especially among readers who read books online, most people just drag the mouse to the end. In this case, the readers may not feel very good about the third chapter. And I personally feel that it is better to try to write more actual plots in each chapter. However, considering that the author's article is a short story, I think it is up to the author to take charge of it himself. After reading Chapter 4, I still feel that the plot setting of two people who are very similar is not outstanding enough. After all, I find this point to be the most attractive point in copywriting. The author can highlight this feature more strongly through more emotions and the perspectives of passers-by and bystanders. After all, because the author wrote in the introduction about "a model who looks very similar to Captain America," readers thought that the two people should look similar to twins from the beginning. If the author wants to write about two people who are similar but others can tell them apart at a glance, I think some preparation should be made at the beginning. When Jing Jing was writing his own articles, one of the things that made him very irritable was that he rarely had the opportunity to write about his daily life, and he was always rushing to write about the plot. But I don't know why, after knowing that the author wrote short stories and reading several daily chapters in a row, Mirror began to look forward to some plots other than daily life. Another thing related to the previous article is that in terms of daily life, Jingjing has always felt that no matter how much you write, as long as it is written with love, readers will like it. But the mirror feels that it might be better if a third, fourth or fifth person is added to daily life. Because through the eyes of others, coupled with the drama and some dialogue generated by two very similar looks together, it may make daily life more cheerful and make readers like it more. To be honest, by the time I got all the way to Chapter 11, I had almost forgotten the setting that the two people looked similar. I think in fact, as a normal plot trend, when two people with similar looks stay together, there will always be some wonderful collisions or feelings. However, there are still relatively few that can be seen in the article. When I read Chapter 13, someone finally lamented that the two people were twins. However, if we can focus on this and focus on some of the surprises and even frights of others, I think it will be a cute point of the article. In addition, I think a small plot can be added. For example, the directors, producers, or even Chris himself, will have some ideas after seeing the captain... For example, when filming a captain promotional video, let the two captains appear together, or have the two captains appear together at the premiere of the movie. This kind of behavior and ideas are like hype. I think after all, the author mostly writes about daily life, so some small ideas from daily life can also be added to make the two of you have more fun. This also prevents readers from feeling that the author's novels only have a few characters and are relatively monotonous. When I saw Loki's appearance in Chapter 20, Jing Jing felt that this kind of plot was quite exciting. At least it was more exciting than the previous daily routine. Then the mirror began to have a sense of anticipation for such a plot, needing... More! More! More! Drama! The mirror is hungry. In addition, Jingjing felt that the author was relatively strict when writing the battle scene between Captain and Rocky. In terms of the description of actions, energy description and sequence, he was very clear and made the whole battle scene lose some momentum, as if he was listening to a more straightforward football commentary. In other words, it's like people in the martial arts world compete with each other using verbal moves, without the immersive feeling of fighting. Mirrors are also a big weakness in combat, so I can't make any specific suggestions for modifications. Personally, I think the author can refer to other articles, such as fight scenes written by boys. I think it is more worthy of learning. Summary I feel that there are too many daily routines in the whole article, and the story in the daily plot is not full enough. I think there can be more daily plots, but I hope the content is more substantial so that the two protagonists can have more fun. Also, put more passers-by A, B, C, D, etc., So that there are not only a few people left in the whole world. Although the original work has more plot, it is not suitable for some authors, but for the authors of true love, it is also a good way to make readers happier. However, I think the author will make rapid progress in writing articles after completing each one, because when I saw the introduction, Jingjing liked it very much. When I saw the plot description of Loki's appearance, Mirror also found it very exciting. In other words, the author actually knows how to capture the readers' appetite. It's just that Jingjing believes that when the author wrote this article, he hoped to write something he liked, so he did not follow the commercial route and did not necessarily cater to the readers' tastes. However, Jingjing firmly believes that as long as the author continues to work hard, readers' hearts will be seduced bit by bit, until they are seduced by the author and can no longer look away! Come on! Looking forward to more works in the Male God series!
New copywriting! The little spider is coming~ By the way, Alphabet King is me 233
Okay, doesn't it feel like a self-portrait?