When all the glitter fades, people are lonelier than fireworks.
The cogs of fate mesh and turn.
I thought I was nothing more than a bystander, yet every step forward left me torn between advancing and retreating.
Honestly, you deceived me for all these years.
That moon-white figure leaning against the carved window lattice stood aloof and untouched amid the scattered, dancing flames.
Or perhaps it was that silent, stern profile, with eyes as deep and steadfast as an ink-black sea beneath long, thick lashes.
"As long as there's someone you want to see, you're never alone."
I transmigrated into another era in pursuit of the world's greatest treasure, but could not avoid being drawn into one entanglement after another: bloody fights and covert attacks between martial sects, power games among the factions of the dynasty, and a struggle centered around a legend. Beneath the calm surface, undercurrents surge. Where will we go from here?
"Young master, save me."
"Don't cry. What's wrong?"
"I'm starving to death."
"..."
School has started in the past few days, and I can't afford to hurt a university dog. It's too much trouble to do research. Therefore, I will not update my articles in the near future. After the National Day, I will make major revisions to my articles, hoping to present better works. Thank you for your favor, I will keep working hard. If there are many changes in the article, I may open a new pit, but the main line of the article, old memes, and characters will not change. When the time comes, I will explain it below the article. So please enter the trap with caution. I have been thinking about this story for a long time and will not give up.
&Nbsp Hello author, this is Yueyue, the clerk of Typos King's review shop. I am very happy to receive your order. &Nbsp I'm really sorry for delaying the order for so long. I am a slow reader and have been sick for several days. I can't afford medicine and injections. Without further ado, here is my brief evaluation of this work. &Nbsp About the details It was quite interesting to read the whole article. The main story of the article is that the heroine traveled to ancient times to look for the snow book, met Qing Ran and Qing Yue, who was suspected of developing JQ with the heroine. As well as story plots derived from several characters appearing later in the article. &Nbsp The article is remarkable, with good highlights, and the story is attractive and makes people want to read on. This is good, and it has captured the readers. At least I am still very interested in the plot of this article. There are good things, but there are also problems. As for the copywriting of the article, I think it will be OK as long as the last paragraph "Once time traveled... Where will we go?" Is left, it is short and relatively summary, and there are basically no flaws in the above part. &Nbsp The biggest problem with this article is that the details of the story are not clear enough in some places. Many places are written unclearly. For example, at the beginning of the article, the heroine's parents ask her to travel to ancient times to look for a snow book. I never understand why she is looking for a snow book. The article does not reveal any information about this. Also, the heroine's Mom actually trusts her teenage daughter to travel alone. Is this the stepmother's rhythm? And the heroine actually accepted it happily== In Chapter 12 of the article, where the heroine and Qingyue are enjoying the lanterns, Qingyue suddenly questions the heroine's identity. It's strange that Qingyue didn't show any doubt before. It feels like this question comes out of nowhere, and there is no foreshadowing in the previous article. If the foreshadowing in the previous article is not written in place, the readers will have more difficulty reading the later articles, because many places are not clearly written, and the readers will have more and more doubts. &Nbsp About the characters Since this article is in the first person, the character creation other than the heroine is not very good. After reading the article, it is not easy to determine the characters of Qingyue and Qingran, two people who appear more often. Moreover, the emotional scenes of several characters were not handled very well. Let's talk about Qingyue first. It is suspected that he and Luo Ge are old friends who have emotional entanglements, but they only mentioned it and didn't write much about it. Qing Ran likes Gu Yao, but she said it, but I didn't notice it. Qing Ran has always been calm and indifferent in the previous article, and she didn't show anything, so when Gu Yao said "I'll wait for you to grow up", I just thought it was Gu Yao's unrequited love. However, Qing Ran later told the heroine that she liked Gu Yao. It was a bit surprising that a 13-year-old girl could hide it so deeply. In fact, there are many places that the author deserves to expand on and describe, and there are many good plots that could be developed that the author has ignored. This is indeed a pity. Another big problem is that there is too little psychological description of the characters, the characters are not vivid enough, and it is really difficult to write in the first person. I suggest that the author try to use the third person for his next article, which is easier to grasp. &Nbsp Summary The author's narration is not good enough, and his ability to control words needs to be honed. In this regard, the author can only read more and write more. Pay more attention to the details in the description. If you grasp it well, this will be a good work. &Nbsp ——The Typos King comments on Pu Yueyue
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I'm so lucky to be updating this article so late::>_
I'm so lucky to be updating this article so late::>_
Very cute and warm^-^ The people in the story all have their own obsessions. Some people speak out about it, while others bury it deep in their hearts. I like Qingran very much, she knows what to let go and what to cherish. Update quickly, come on↖(^ω^)↗
Update soon. . . . Flowers and flowers. ,. .
The word count is a bit short. . . .