"The moment Cheng Xiaowan stepped into the hall, she knew the owner of this Jiuli Wine House was no ordinary person. There was no floor-to-ceiling glass, yet sunlight was being played with in the palm of someone's hand. The entrance opened directly onto the center of the hall. Each of the two side walls had two hexagonal windows about a meter across, and the windowsills were mirrors that could be remotely adjusted to any angle against the walls! That way, sunlight reflected onto the ceiling, where a crystal chandelier hung. The partition between the first and second floors had been removed, so the rooms on the second floor surrounded the chandelier. Downstairs, sunlight scattered everywhere through the crystal, filling the entire house with sunshine. The effect was far better than anything floor-to-ceiling windows could achieve!"
Jiuli Wine House is a tavern at the far end of Qili Shantang. The old building had changed hands several times, and now it was run by an unknown woman... The passage above describes Cheng Xiaowan's arrival at the beginning.
(Seriously, I haven't even written the story yet. I'll come back and revise this once I have!)
The writing is pretty good, but I don't know what I'm saying. For paragraphs, it is recommended not to be so long. Each chapter should have a narrative focus. Chapter 1 is almost all about describing appearance, nothing interesting. We need to create more attractions to make people want to watch more.
I was speechless... Although SSX abandoned readers... But I still came to watch... Those languages are really boring...
Dabao, when did you come here? Rabbit, what did you do again? In addition. . . Ruiyu is equivalent to a passerby. . . .
That. . . . . My thoughts are. . . The captain's description is very good. . . But. . I think it's a bit too jumpy Rui Yu is a good name. Were you inspired by Rui Jue? This guy has a lot of roles, right? . . . . I lov this name XOXO. .
The description of the clothing made me think...
. . I have to come out and say this: He has such a white plot. . . I sweat a lot. . . The language has improved, Xiaopang will be so happy to see it. . . I have already recommended adults to read your old articles. . She was probably sweating too. . . And your gibberish. . . Are the two boxes ellipses? I finally understand a little bit. . Only then does the plot enter. . It is recommended to replace Chapter 3 with Chapter 1 and then rewind it. . . If you can write a dull plot with great artistic conception. . I will also convince you. . My current estimate is: the emotional line seems to be out of the box, but the main line is quite interesting. . . Waiting. . .
Suddenly I felt like the progress was getting faster. .
Also, your word count per chapter is too few!!
I spat out the last sentence, and couldn't help but think of a certain classic dialogue in modern romance: Come on, XXX, come over and ask me to see it for real. . . Also, how do you type? Why are there so many garbled characters? This is the first time I have seen this type of article. . . Oh, it's a pity it's romance. . . The name of this wine shop is too weird, two wines? . . . Forget it, I know you like weird names the most. . Top one. . Friendly link, I will get it right away. . .
1 Your language is too clumsy. . . It's hard to write "Anne Hathway" and "CHLOE" in the language of "Dream of Red Mansions" without sweating. . . 2 There's too much elaboration about appearance, and you're talking about me? You have made great progress in this area as well. . . I saw one sentence in 820 words: A modern woman bought an old house. 3 The content of your article seems to be quite out-of-the-way. . When I first saw it, the first thing I thought about was the Japanese manga about pets. . . 4 The name of the female pig reminds me of some red flowers and emeralds in a certain ravine. . . 5 What does the word "" read? 6 We are all friends no matter what. . Are you touched by typing so many words for you?