Enchanting Beauty

The more I look at it, the less I can stand it. . . It makes people upset

Where has the author gone? He has reached the most exciting place and disappeared = =Waiting to see~

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Hey, okay, I'm a day late for a rough review due to various reasons, what's up with the author! To put it simply, this is a story about a half-demon girl who sells her sex to look for her parents and is eaten up by the big boss. There is no suspense about finding clues from the Hades Palace and reincarnation, which are said to be able to fulfill all kinds of wishes, and from there, she gets to know the boss and her gay friends. Generally speaking, it can be said that there is nothing outstanding about this setting, and the establishment of "Underworld Palace" and "Reincarnation Hall" are also repetitive in nature, both using "conditions" in exchange for "wishes", but the former used to get to know the male protagonist seems more isolated from the world. So I think the next step is that the author may need to make the difference between the two more clear. The highlight of the overall setting should be the special ability of the heroine's eyes to see people's hearts, but so far, apart from showing a sense of presence when hooking up with the hero, the heroine's other scenes are not strong. This may also depend on the author's next plot arrangement. The author's expression is fine, and the description is also very careful. It is not within the scope of "little white text" at all, but there are some not so good points, which leads to the bleak data of the article. So let's talk about it in detail next. In terms of plot, current Xianxia novels basically follow two routes. One focuses on upgrades, and the other focuses on relationships. I think the author should focus on the latter, but judging from the previous article, there are big problems with the relationship between the two. Let's not evaluate the heroine's character first, but let's take a look at the meeting between the male and female protagonists in the Hades Palace. The heroine was suddenly taken to a strange place, and saw a strange man and another man who might kill her. The reaction should not be like this. Please put yourself in her shoes. Even if your IQ is 80 and EQ is 140, you should be instinctively afraid, curious, and frightened. But come on, author, don't you think the heroine's reaction is too bland... It's like she knows that the hero likes her, so she does all kinds of mischief without fear of being rubbed by the hero... Every time I see the heroine kicking her nose and getting into her face, I feel extremely pained... The hero just falls in love with the heroine for no reason, and the heroine treats the hero unscrupulously and without regard for her own life for no reason... Orz... It seems that it is unrealistic to change it after writing 100,000 words. Anyway, the two of them have an inexplicable affection for each other. Just like a comment below said, this is a romance, so there is a male and female protagonist. Because the male and female protagonists are to be together, there is a male supporting actor who can give advice... In short, it is all kinds of inexplicable. Such emotional scenes feel a bit mechanical, unnatural and unsmooth. In terms of character creation, compared to the two protagonists, I think the two protagonists are more outstanding: the military advisor who needs to constantly change his skin and the elder brother who has not been in bed for three days. As for the rude female protagonist and the male protagonist who is cold on the surface but actually funny... However, I always feel that this combination is poorly written and there is nothing particularly eye-catching about it. The last thing I want to say is that some of the turns in the whole text are too abrupt and are not explained clearly to the readers, such as "'What is your master's name?' 'You are not allowed to ask the master's name at will.' 'Oh.' It turns out to be Jun Mo." I still don't understand how this sudden change happened. Was it asked directly by myself, the maid, or stalking the wooden boy? There are several places similar to this in the following article. Although it may not affect the reading and trend of the full article, it still makes people feel awkward. Well, that's it. Generally speaking, the problem with this article is that the emotions in the early stage are abrupt, which scares away some readers, and the subsequent plot is not particularly interesting... Well, in short, that's it, no problem, but not outstanding... Plus, there is no exposure at all... So... I hope the author will not be discouraged, and I also wish the article will get better and better! It's good to have exposure! ——West Wall★Illegal gathering | Changpingpu

The most important roles at the moment: Because this is a novel, the female protagonist appears. Because this is a romance novel, the male protagonist appears. Because the male protagonist and the female protagonist need to be brought together, the wingman Bai Mu appears. Because the female protagonist needs to feel important to her natal family, Baili Xiao appears.

Ouch! What's that devil about male Zhu Su?

Hey hey~~ Come on, big demon ⊙▽⊙

I've finished reading. Cheers, author~