Ruoxi thought that after she transmigrated into the life of a Minister's daughter, she could live comfortably and do whatever she pleased.
But she never expected to be drawn step by step into the undercurrents within the household, the love and hate between sisters from her past, and the power struggles at court...
Worst of all, before long she becomes the daughter of a disgraced official and has no choice but to wander the land with her older brother~
But why, after traveling all this way, has she still failed to escape Yang Qingge's grasp?
With no other choice, Ruoxi begins her happy life of getting married and having children...
[Gentle Reminder]:
1. This story alternates between playful and serious. Please forgive Xiongxiong for being a little split personality~
2. This is a one-on-one romance, an extremely slow burn, with a bit of mystery.
3. The story is fairly freeform, so history buffs, please steer clear.
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Comments on "Miss Shangshu's Marriage"
Hello, author, I'm a lazy person here. Your order was originally written by Xiao Qiao, but I couldn't contact her, so I forwarded this order to me. What I said is just my personal opinion, and it is not guaranteed to be completely correct. The author can also selectively read it.
At first glance, the author's article is very relaxing and easy to understand. There is no difficulty in reading. The author's plot setting does not have any conflicts. For a newcomer, the author is great. From the perspective of a reviewer, let me talk about my feelings about this article.
Now that the author has signed a contract, the authorized project can be changed by the editor. In this case, the points will be more every time he publishes. If the author is a new author, it will be very beneficial to the natural list. If not, it will not have much difference between changing or not.
The article gives me the feeling that the first person and the third person appear alternately. I am afraid that the author used the first person when writing the draft, but changed it to the third person when publishing. This gives people a very strange feeling. It is obviously the third person but reads like the first person, which is very strange.
The whole article is developed through dialogue, and the same is true for scene changes. Although it is easy to read at the beginning, if every chapter is described like this, it will feel boring.
In the article, Ruoxi complains a lot in her heart, always "remembering the past". For time travel stories, there are always one or two "remembering the past", but "remembering the past" will appear whenever something happens in the author's article, which is somewhat unnecessary.
The plot is always too smooth. For example, if Ruo tide wants to know something, someone will immediately explain it to her. Is the protagonist's halo too strong? And he was afraid that she wouldn't understand. He spoke a long paragraph without breathing. It was a bit strange to write like this. After all, everyone always thinks about the mood and situation at the time before speaking. It didn't feel real.
Detailed descriptions are usually briefly summarized by the author in the form of narration. Sometimes you feel like something has been cut out in the middle?
Actually, I really want to ask the author what is your main plot? Because I only saw the relationship in Chapter 13, all I saw was how Ruoxi forgave the people who would kill her, and her willingness to help others without fear of death. As for the main plot, it was really unclear. In other words, the author's main plot is very scattered, making it difficult to grasp the key points and integrate it.
In terms of plot description, after Ruoxi returns to Shangshu Mansion to clarify her interpersonal relationships, the author hopes to be more accurate and careful in writing about her family, such as who is in the mansion, what is their relationship with Ruoxi, what are the courtyards divided into, which courtyard each person lives in, etc. In this case, the name of a certain courtyard will not appear and it will take a long time to guess.
The maid in the article refers to herself as "I", which is not quite right. Using "I" to refer to herself represents the same identity, but the maid and the lady obviously cannot be equal, let alone have the same identity, so they cannot use "I". Of course, this is my obsession.
Finally, I hope that the author will use more action descriptions and psychological descriptions to promote the development of the plot in his writing process, and make the articles more vivid, with less dialogue, and more conflicting descriptions of scenes and events. It may be better if there are a few twists and turns. For example, if a person has any thoughts in her heart, how she looks, what actions she will make, etc.
The above are some of my opinions, author, please do your best!
By lazy person|Coco Island Changping Shop
The main line of the story can be seen from the title: the heroine wants to marry someone, so as a reader, you will have questions, who does the heroine want to marry? What kind of person is the heroine's husband? What will happen?
At the beginning of the article, she was rescued by Dr. Mingyue and had her face disguised. The heroine's face was washed and seen by the doctor. At that time, I thought the doctor was the male protagonist, but from the back it turned out that it was not the case. I believe I am not the only one who thought the doctor was the male protagonist. This will also cause a problem. As a reader, will I be disappointed with the real male protagonist? This will cause a certain rate of abandonment of the article. The shaping of the real male protagonist's character is particularly important.
In the following chapters, the male protagonist's appearance rate has increased significantly, but I still can't figure out the male protagonist's character, whether he is sinister, gentle, or willful. I have to say that the male protagonist's character is a bit crooked.
Let's talk about the pace of the article. I think the author has a better grasp on this point. Shi Liao doesn't like to read articles that make me feel tired, that is, articles that are too fast-paced. The author's writing makes me feel more comfortable. The story proceeds in an orderly manner, one link after another, with tension and relaxation, which is good. But I feel that the conflict is still not too obvious, the climax is not high enough, and the ups and downs are not big enough. The conflict is what attracts readers' attention, and the more stable plot will lose some readers.
After reading through Chapter 21, I think the conflict has several aspects: between the heroine's mother and her concubine, between the heroine and her sister, and between the heroine and her former sisters. When I read the text, I thought it was a house-fight + palace-fight article, but when I read it, it didn't seem like that, because I didn't see any obvious family conflict. The affairs in the palace have not been mentioned yet, so I will not comment.
The clues in the article so far are just a few cases besides the heroine getting married, such as chickenpox, flower picking, and kidnapping of girls... I think the author handled this part very well, making the article unbroken, with a thread running through it, and the coherence of the plot can catch the reader's attention. Shi Liao offers a little flower here to crack the case, which increases the interaction between the heroine and the hero. The emotional drama is interspersed in it. The interesting stories between the two of them all enhance the readability of the article.
But it's still a matter of character as mentioned above. The characters of the male and female protagonists, the character of the doctor... The characters of several main characters left me a little confused. The characters of the heroine's brother and his little childhood sweetheart are relatively stable and three-dimensional, which also illustrates the author's writing skills. Oh, by the way, there is also the content of the first chapter, why the heroine needs to disguise herself. There are many small foreshadowings in the article, which shows that Guliang's thoughts are delicate~
I forgot to mention one more thing. Sure enough, as people get older, their memory deteriorates... Guliang's way of writing. The content of the first few chapters gave me the illusion of being in the first person, and then the content introduced the background. One chapter introduced a lot of characters. I personally think it should be done bit by bit, and what the girl wants to say should be added bit by bit along with the plot.
Hmm... As expected, it's still not cute. Can you please forgive me? I think the plot of Gu Liang's novel is good. It is the skeleton of the article. The skeleton is not crooked and lays the foundation of the article. But the flesh and blood added to it were not plump enough, so it couldn't hold it up. But writing skills will get better if you practice them. Shi Liao thinks so. I hope Gu Liang will persevere and look forward to the following plot!
Jingchu Changpingpu
[ShiPo] comments
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Comments on "Miss Shangshu's Marriage" Hello, author, I'm a lazy person here. Your order was originally written by Xiao Qiao, but I couldn't contact her, so I forwarded this order to me. What I said is just my personal opinion, and it is not guaranteed to be completely correct. The author can also selectively read it. At first glance, the author's article is very relaxing and easy to understand. There is no difficulty in reading. The author's plot setting does not have any conflicts. For a newcomer, the author is great. From the perspective of a reviewer, let me talk about my feelings about this article. Now that the author has signed a contract, the authorized project can be changed by the editor. In this case, the points will be more every time he publishes. If the author is a new author, it will be very beneficial to the natural list. If not, it will not have much difference between changing or not. The article gives me the feeling that the first person and the third person appear alternately. I am afraid that the author used the first person when writing the draft, but changed it to the third person when publishing. This gives people a very strange feeling. It is obviously the third person but reads like the first person, which is very strange. The whole article is developed through dialogue, and the same is true for scene changes. Although it is easy to read at the beginning, if every chapter is described like this, it will feel boring. In the article, Ruoxi complains a lot in her heart, always "remembering the past". For time travel stories, there are always one or two "remembering the past", but "remembering the past" will appear whenever something happens in the author's article, which is somewhat unnecessary. The plot is always too smooth. For example, if Ruo tide wants to know something, someone will immediately explain it to her. Is the protagonist's halo too strong? And he was afraid that she wouldn't understand. He spoke a long paragraph without breathing. It was a bit strange to write like this. After all, everyone always thinks about the mood and situation at the time before speaking. It didn't feel real. Detailed descriptions are usually briefly summarized by the author in the form of narration. Sometimes you feel like something has been cut out in the middle? Actually, I really want to ask the author what is your main plot? Because I only saw the relationship in Chapter 13, all I saw was how Ruoxi forgave the people who would kill her, and her willingness to help others without fear of death. As for the main plot, it was really unclear. In other words, the author's main plot is very scattered, making it difficult to grasp the key points and integrate it. In terms of plot description, after Ruoxi returns to Shangshu Mansion to clarify her interpersonal relationships, the author hopes to be more accurate and careful in writing about her family, such as who is in the mansion, what is their relationship with Ruoxi, what are the courtyards divided into, which courtyard each person lives in, etc. In this case, the name of a certain courtyard will not appear and it will take a long time to guess. The maid in the article refers to herself as "I", which is not quite right. Using "I" to refer to herself represents the same identity, but the maid and the lady obviously cannot be equal, let alone have the same identity, so they cannot use "I". Of course, this is my obsession. Finally, I hope that the author will use more action descriptions and psychological descriptions to promote the development of the plot in his writing process, and make the articles more vivid, with less dialogue, and more conflicting descriptions of scenes and events. It may be better if there are a few twists and turns. For example, if a person has any thoughts in her heart, how she looks, what actions she will make, etc. The above are some of my opinions, author, please do your best! By lazy person|Coco Island Changping Shop
The main line of the story can be seen from the title: the heroine wants to marry someone, so as a reader, you will have questions, who does the heroine want to marry? What kind of person is the heroine's husband? What will happen? At the beginning of the article, she was rescued by Dr. Mingyue and had her face disguised. The heroine's face was washed and seen by the doctor. At that time, I thought the doctor was the male protagonist, but from the back it turned out that it was not the case. I believe I am not the only one who thought the doctor was the male protagonist. This will also cause a problem. As a reader, will I be disappointed with the real male protagonist? This will cause a certain rate of abandonment of the article. The shaping of the real male protagonist's character is particularly important. In the following chapters, the male protagonist's appearance rate has increased significantly, but I still can't figure out the male protagonist's character, whether he is sinister, gentle, or willful. I have to say that the male protagonist's character is a bit crooked. Let's talk about the pace of the article. I think the author has a better grasp on this point. Shi Liao doesn't like to read articles that make me feel tired, that is, articles that are too fast-paced. The author's writing makes me feel more comfortable. The story proceeds in an orderly manner, one link after another, with tension and relaxation, which is good. But I feel that the conflict is still not too obvious, the climax is not high enough, and the ups and downs are not big enough. The conflict is what attracts readers' attention, and the more stable plot will lose some readers. After reading through Chapter 21, I think the conflict has several aspects: between the heroine's mother and her concubine, between the heroine and her sister, and between the heroine and her former sisters. When I read the text, I thought it was a house-fight + palace-fight article, but when I read it, it didn't seem like that, because I didn't see any obvious family conflict. The affairs in the palace have not been mentioned yet, so I will not comment. The clues in the article so far are just a few cases besides the heroine getting married, such as chickenpox, flower picking, and kidnapping of girls... I think the author handled this part very well, making the article unbroken, with a thread running through it, and the coherence of the plot can catch the reader's attention. Shi Liao offers a little flower here to crack the case, which increases the interaction between the heroine and the hero. The emotional drama is interspersed in it. The interesting stories between the two of them all enhance the readability of the article. But it's still a matter of character as mentioned above. The characters of the male and female protagonists, the character of the doctor... The characters of several main characters left me a little confused. The characters of the heroine's brother and his little childhood sweetheart are relatively stable and three-dimensional, which also illustrates the author's writing skills. Oh, by the way, there is also the content of the first chapter, why the heroine needs to disguise herself. There are many small foreshadowings in the article, which shows that Guliang's thoughts are delicate~ I forgot to mention one more thing. Sure enough, as people get older, their memory deteriorates... Guliang's way of writing. The content of the first few chapters gave me the illusion of being in the first person, and then the content introduced the background. One chapter introduced a lot of characters. I personally think it should be done bit by bit, and what the girl wants to say should be added bit by bit along with the plot. Hmm... As expected, it's still not cute. Can you please forgive me? I think the plot of Gu Liang's novel is good. It is the skeleton of the article. The skeleton is not crooked and lays the foundation of the article. But the flesh and blood added to it were not plump enough, so it couldn't hold it up. But writing skills will get better if you practice them. Shi Liao thinks so. I hope Gu Liang will persevere and look forward to the following plot! Jingchu Changpingpu [ShiPo] comments
Come and collect it, come on!
Wait for the update O(∩_∩)O
I'm here to spread flowers~Congratulations on opening the pit~