[Douluo Dalu] Phoenix Crying to the Skies

Hahahaha, it turned out to be the Nether White Tiger of two boys.

Come on~Momada^3^

Your sister has the same name as my classmate.

Come on. . . . .

Well... The author's writing is a bit serious, and it's because it's so unpopular╮(╯▽╰)╭ But you can still tell from the sentences that the author's writing style is very good! Worthy of encouragement, spread flowers~ ... Because it's very good, it looks very serious and so on. It feels like I'm reading a report. Tired or not? When writing something serious, it will look boring and the humor will be reduced. [The person who likes laughter the most is looking at you with a bloody face! _(:з∠)_ Writing this article in a story-telling way is doomed to have a low laugh rate, and what is the point of this article? A man galloping in another world? +_+ Anyway, come on!! There are too few fanfics about Douluo, please keep writing! =3=

Enough of the criticism!

How to put it... I roughly understand your situation, and I can't say that I have any experience or that I have enough ability to teach you, so I just analyze the reasons for you and give you some suggestions. First of all, it's this copywriting... The first reaction is that it's so beautiful, it's a bit dazzling and dizzy. If this is the case, it will make people unable to read. Reading and writing will be too tiring, and people will ignore your copywriting. Therefore, it would be better to change the font color of the copywriting to a simpler one. And I think it might be better to write something that creates suspense. However, the quality of an article mainly depends on its content. To be honest, your writing is really not bad, in fact it is better than what most fans write. It can also be seen that you are very serious and sincere. I basically didn't see any copying of the original text in the article. However, the problem lies in this fanfic. What do people who read the fanfic see? Most of them do it because they like the characters and want to change their destiny, so the core of a fanfic lies in the characters. And your article is basically just using the background of Douluo to write an original story thousands of years in the future. In this way, there is no familiar Shrek Academy, no Shrek Seven Monsters, and no Xiaosan Xiaowu. Therefore, no matter how good your article is, if you don't write about this character, people may not want to read it. An article like yours is basically original. Also, Douluo Dalu is the first part, but many people haven't watched the second part, and I haven't watched it either. In addition, basically everything has been changed, so people don't want to watch it. This is probably the reason why you have so many clicks on the first chapter but very few collections. You have to know that writing this kind of fanfic with only the same background is very unpleasant. In addition, Douluo cannot be listed and open v, so this result is also expected. Most readers come with the mentality of reading fan stories, but they will be very disappointed when they find out that it is not the story of Xiao San at that time, so they leave. Some of them don't even read what you write later. If you click high and low, your article can basically be classified as romance. You can try to write something original, but if you write something original, your writing style is still a bit lacking. If you must write, then stick to it. As the saying goes, gold will always shine. If it doesn't work, just practice writing for the next article. I write text just to be happy for myself, there is no need to worry too much. There is no shortcut to getting good results. If it is a good article, it will eventually be appreciated even if you take detours, so you need to persist until then. PS: In fact, there is no need to be too omnipotent. It is also good to treat it as an ordinary passionate upgrade article. The effect will be much better. Add some small details to the growth process, and the ability needs a little bit of development. In the beginning, it is a bit bloody to just rely on aura to make a strong mother vomit blood... It's best not to be too cute when it comes to cute little foxes... Adding a little JQ is necessary! In short, although this article still has room for improvement, the collection and comments are indeed a bit unfair. Don't be too sad. Come on and write your own articles well is the most important thing. I also know someone who writes Douluo. Her writing style was not very good at the beginning and the number of words was very few, but in the end she was really great! People need to grow, and it doesn't matter what the first article is. In short, the details of a novel determine success or failure, the writing style determines the height, and imagination and innovation are also extremely important! That's it, hope it helps, since you said you wanted advice I just wrote this. This is also my first time to give long-term reviews to people. They are all written articles. I understand your feelings too. Don't worry too much about this. That's it. Come on. —— By Mu Mu Coco Island Changping Pu

JJ is still mainly about female visual novels. It seems that the protagonist is "he" which is more common in □. In addition, those who have not read Douluo Continent may not click on the title of the book. Those who have read Douluo Continent, for example, after entering the nest and seeing no one in the main character and supporting cast, they will start to quit. The setting of Douluo Dalu is very grand, so you must grasp it carefully and don't abandon the background and focus on the emotions. This will be no different from other romance novels.

Is this a romance or a fan?

QAQ felt really miserable when I saw this. You must understand who I am23333