Parting Tonight

It's still pretty cool when written in big letters.

The author handles the characters and plot of the novel quite well. I still like this style very much. Collected~ Keep up the good work! Finally, don't forget □□yo~ □//www. Jjwxc. Net/onebook. Php? Novelid=2041945 My latest novel "Jin Ruo Jiang Shan" tells the story of the last beloved concubine in the late Qing Dynasty!

It can be seen that the author's writing skills are still very strong. Read one chapter first, and then read the rest when you have time. Come on! If it is gold, it will always shine!

Congratulations to Sha Lijun for being selected as Jinjiang's latest outstanding author, keep up the good work

First, I'll watch it in bed at night. I feel that the author is very appetizing, support~~~! Hope this will be a good story!

Thank you Sally for supporting girls. I looked at your column and found that there was only one article, so I clicked in and read it. It didn't feel like it was my first time writing. But it doesn't matter. According to the girl's habit, as long as the new article is new, she will leave a medium or long comment. Because the girl is also a very busy person, I read the first ten chapters first. It may not be too comprehensive, please forgive me Sally. Okay, enough nonsense, let's comment. The first is the copywriting. Because I haven't read much content, I will focus on the copywriting. Sally is very considerate and also writes the character introductions, which makes it easier for readers to understand and read. This is very good. But now most readers are enjoying fast food culture, and your character introductions start with so-and-so graduates and so-and-so returnees, which makes readers completely unable to see the cuteness, so you can still modify it. The next content should be the introduction to the first volume, and maybe in order to highlight the ups and downs of the plot, more female supporting characters were added. The problem arose when I was reading the text. Girl, I read the first ten chapters and it seems that only two chapters in the first volume are about the city, and the others are about the campus. In fact, I think Sally should focus on the campus in the early stage and then come to the city later, but the copywriting can't reflect it at all. And since a female supporting character is included, it means that this character is still quite important. However, my guess is that this character will not appear until the fifth volume. However, as a character that needs to be described with great emphasis, it is still necessary to explain it briefly in the front. Otherwise, readers will easily forget this character, and it will not make much sense in the copywriting. Next comes the main text. The first volume is fine, but the second volume begins to come to campus. Why does the rhythm sound so similar to "To Youth"? Are all campuses in this style these days? Girl, I haven't read much about this, so I won't comment too much. The first few chapters always emphasize that Xu Zhuo is secretly in love with Liu Xiao, but Liu Xiao is very popular and the heroine is ranked first. Then I thought they didn't have much interaction in college, and then I read along, no, in fact, they were together sometimes, and they had a pleasant conversation. Xu Zhuo is also considered a relatively "status" among the many fans of the male protagonist. She is much luckier than many girls she has a crush on. Girl, there is one thing I don't understand. The text clearly states that Xu Zhuo's reaction when she learned that Liu Xiao was Aladdin was a "surprise". However, in the text, I couldn't see where her surprise was. Instead, she seemed a little embarrassed and scared. She ran away before she even confirmed whether Liu Xiao was Aladdin. No matter how you look at it, it makes people think that Xu Zhuo is afraid of Liu Xiao. There is obviously a bit too much dialogue in the description of the campus later on, especially in Chapter 8 (I don't know if I remember correctly), there seems to be overwhelming dialogue before and after. In fact, Sally's narration is very smooth, but it seems not good to have so many dialogues suddenly. Finally, there is the issue of word count. When I pulled it out, a few articles reached more than 3,000 words (I don't know how many words you have to write, but depending on the progress, it should be more than 100,000). Most of them hovered between 1,500 and 2,500. In JJ, each chapter must be at least 2,000, otherwise the clicks will be bleak, so I suggest that Shari should use her strength to pull up to 2,000 per article. That's all for now. I'm sorry if there are any imperfections in my analysis. I hope Shari doesn't mind. Thanks.

Yes, the pace is a bit slow, it would be better if it came back faster! Come on!