[Star Wish] Foresight

Chagall and Bella's togetherness ----Reflections after reading "Precognition" Dreams are something that can make you feel overwhelmed when you hold them in your hands. They are most beautiful when you are chasing them. ----Excerpted from "Precognition" I have always felt that it was a pity that I did not have the opportunity or time to carefully read a celebrity volunteer fanzine, and it was a pity that I did not buy the author's fanzine. The main reason is that I was really too busy. Only this year did I have the time and energy to carefully read and return to this field. Now I play games to find the feeling of writing fanzines. I picked this story to read, which is a bit unexpected, but it makes sense. When I saw this story in JJ, I was attracted by the clean copywriting and beautiful cover. Another reason is that it is short enough that I can read it in one go (...). In fact, the whole story feels very gentle and comfortable after reading it. Just like the author Ruoyi gives me the feeling, she may not be such an eye-catching author, but she has a unique style and taste. The plot may be very conventional, but you will find that she actually brings her own thinking into such simplicity. "Precognition" is 20,000 words, with clear plot clues, one Fang Li line and one Fang Wang line. According to the classification of fan fiction, it is a quite satisfactory emotional story of Fang Wang Li triangle cp, but it is slightly different. In this story, Fang Meizi has the power of the sixth sense. This is a very innovative aspect of the whole story. The story begins with a meeting by the river, and narrates the growth process of Fang Ruoqi, a newcomer in the film industry. As a fan of the unswerving director Wang Da, I feel that the most successful part of this novel is that Wang Rui'an portrays it very realistically and delicately, without distortion and in line with the classic and retro feeling of Ming 2. There are many small details that are quite outstanding, including Fang Li's conversation in Venice, Fang Wang's play with the snow scene at the end, etc. There are no other fan fictions that involve racking their brains in intrigues, dark style, blind sweetness, or deliberately trying to be "unique" to attract attention. The author has followed the original context of the game very carefully and rigorously, and continues to develop on this basis. This is very worthy of recognition. In fact, after talking about so many advantages, I still have to give flowers first and then bricks. I hope the author doesn't mind this. The purpose is to discuss the article and talk about my humble opinion. The whole story follows the characteristics of subtraction in writing (no overstuffing, no overly literary and artistic flourishes), and there are not too many too fancy things, which is quite good. But after reading it, I have some opinions of my own. I personally think that since your outline or the center of the story is precognition, the whole clue should be more complete. I was a little confused when I read it, huh? Is this the end? I always feel like I still have more to say. If you think about it carefully, what may be more debatable is that there are some flaws in the plot of precognition and sixth sense. Whether a main story line is attractive usually depends on whether the story concept is well integrated into the story. In fact, at the beginning, I had high expectations for the whole story. I always thought about prediction, well, it must be a very interesting story, but overall, the theme of prediction was not clearly expressed. Fang Ruoqi has the ability to predict, which has been reflected in many small details, such as Fang Li's chocolate conversation, Fang's search for the moonlight treasure box, etc. But why does she have prediction, how to use it, and what impact it has on the two main characters Wang Li. The following article does not explain. The accident scene at the end of the snow scene can actually lead to a lot of things if it is more cruel, but the relatively plain ending is a bit unexpected. It's like you've actually drawn up the outline and all the details have begun to take shape, but it's a pity that you haven't connected them. If the story line is more specific, other plots can be added, such as why Fang Ruoqi found the Moonlight Treasure Box, why she guessed the five different flavors of chocolate so quickly, and why her ability to Wang Rui'an disappeared. In fact, these all need to be connected in series, and finally brought together, it may be more exciting. In other words, it feels more like a twists and turns. If I want to modify it, based on my not-so-rich experience, I suggest starting with the "precognition" itself and connecting the stories. The emotional lines are already very rich, and adding a complete framework to The Sixth Sense, for example, you can set up a conspiracy theory (this is just the author's suggestion that the story structure does not necessarily have to be this, there can be multiple settings). Or it could be an unexpected interchange ending similar to O. Henry's novels (such as The Gift of the Magi), or it could be to design a very interesting conflict point to connect all the foreseeable jokes scattered in various chapters. To be more specific, you can try, for example, the source of Ruoqi's jokes, or whether it is related to winning the award. The author has a poor sense of plot, so I can't think of anything specific, but I do have it. For example, we can assume that Ruo Qi is a member of an organization and is controlled, and then has a premonition. This premonition can help her get something, or destroy something. When she encounters Wang Rui'an, all her powers disappear (similar to the feeling of everything returning to zero when meeting true love). Then the precognition itself brings about the choices and results of the character in sections. Li Hua is one of the experimental subjects, and the organizer behind it may want to pass If Ruoqi gets something, this can be regarded as the reappearance of a conspiracy theory. Wang Ruien is pure white and resists the entire precognitive ability, while Fang Meizi is controlled in an uncontrolled and ignorant manner (that is to say, she did not know that she was being controlled before the truth was revealed, but only knew that she had this special function). Perhaps even she herself does not know how to solve this problem, and at this moment Li Hua plays a key role in cracking it. The conspiracy set up by the big boss, through the triggering of a certain event, allows Fang Meizi's precognitive ability to be put into concrete use, and then solves the problem (such as where the moonlight treasure box fainted, etc.) And combines it with the emotional line. The overall temperament of the story may change and the length will be lengthened, but it will be more complete. Although blackening Ruoqi is not a good choice, but in terms of the concept of predicting the whole story, it may be more ups and downs. You can read Japanese mysteries or some suspense novels, which may be more enlightening. Or American TV series, etc. But overall, it is a very rigorous story, and the various sweetness and natural emotions in it are very enjoyable to watch. Especially the concept of Chagall and Bella, I think it is very consistent with the atmosphere of the whole story, protecting and supporting each other. It's a very good story. The language is also clear and fluent. Game fans interested in the opponent's CP can take a look. There are also many good sentences, such as the excerpt at the beginning. I hope that King Fang in the story will keep waiting like Chakar and Bela. When I read this story, it felt like I was reliving the game. The descriptions of many scenes have the tenderness of CG scenes. I like it.

I leave a solemn message. I originally wanted to choose the long one, but then I thought about it and ran out of time, so I chose the short one first. Come on for the ten-year update. O(∩_∩)O

Brother Wang is so tough and handsome!!

As the saying goes "care leads to chaos", the more people care, the less likely they are to guess~ Another possibility is that he attracts you precisely because you can't see through him (hey, are you sure you're not talking about the King of Heaven? He has mysterious qualities!) Zan Ruoyi ~ Wang Ruien has such a character, ordinary happiness. Probably the game needs dramatic conflicts to make the characters more distinct, so Director Li's incident is the key to the development of his relationship with Wang Ruien. In fact, Brother Wang is definitely the leading male character in Ming 2! It was a fateful encounter at the beginning~

Lao Wang, who had no flowers to spend, felt a little bit accomplished. But I still have no feelings for him (shows hands), so sad!!!!

"I may not be a romantic lover, I don't know how to say sweet words, and I'm not very good at pleasing girls" is a classic line, right? Is the relationship developing a little too fast?

Finally someone writes a story about Wang Ruien~~~Don't be fooled!!! Dear~~I'm optimistic about you!!

Huahua still has a strong sense of presence. Lao Wang, come on!!!

New work, congratulations~~ This is Wang Fang, congratulations to Lao Wang for no longer being soy sauce!!! (Clap on the left, clap on the right)