Lanterns Along the Mu River

I really think it was well written%>_<%

The author's writing style is good. While telling the story, he also uses "I" to express his own feelings. There are many sentences that are impressive. It's a pity that it's finished. Otherwise, if each chapter had 3,000 words, it would have developed better~ But it doesn't affect my appreciation of the author~

After reading the article, I have a few thoughts that I would like to mention to the author personally. Of course, the following points are purely personal opinions. If there are any unreasonable points, you can ignore them. I have to say, when I opened this webpage and saw the word count of the chapter, I was instantly horrified. The number of words is astonishing. The maximum number of chapters is 1,000 words, which is basically seven to eight thousand words. There are so many that I felt sick to my stomach just reading it. I don't know what other readers think, but if it were me and I saw that many words in a chapter, I wouldn't want to click in and read it. It doesn't make sense to say that the plots are connected. Which novel's plots are not connected? Which TV series doesn't have a compact plot? It's all about the protagonists and the main story. If that's the case, why is it divided into chapters? What are you doing with episodes? Sometimes the plot is broken into chapters to set up suspense. For example, if a certain novel reaches its exciting point, but it has not been serialized yet, readers will express their urge for updates, resentment, and concern. This will make it easier to capture the readers' hearts. For example, they may behave like this: Ahhhh, how could it be gone at the most exciting time?! I still want to see it! This leaves suspense and whets the reader's appetite, which is sometimes much better than letting it all out at once. This can also attract readers to want to read chapter after chapter, instead of saying that I have read the plot in one go, satisfied, solved all the doubts, and don't want to read anymore. Secondly, this is inconvenient for readers to read. Just imagine, if readers get confused after reading a few thousand words, they want to save it for next time. But when he wanted to look again, where did he see it? Half middle? Don't you have to look for it slowly? Well, that's what happened to me. Halfway through a chapter, my family calls for dinner. If I come back and open the web page to continue reading, I have to start from the beginning. There is an advantage to having a small number of words. Because there are not many words in a chapter, readers can finish this chapter quickly and remember it to continue reading the next chapter next time. Speaking of the main text, the writing throughout is smooth, full of ancient flavor, novel setting, clever conception, and unconventional storyline. Especially when the cursed Mushui Village is mentioned in the opening chapter, there is a beautiful foreshadowing that is fascinating. However, the first-person narrative written by the author himself seems cumbersome due to too many psychological monologue statements. In fact, it contains a lot of sad, plaintive and gorgeous words. The perspective focuses too much on the heroine, so that the portrayal of other characters is not clear enough and the outlines are somewhat blurred. Furthermore, the transition of the storyline is handled confusingly, with one moment being memories and the next being reality. For a while he was in Mushui Village, and for a while he ran outside the village. For example, at the end of the second chapter it is written "He said: My name is Hua Deng", and at the beginning of the third chapter it is immediately changed to "Before I could say anything to stop her, the little girl came over by herself". It neither specified the transition of time nor described the change of location. The direct jump was too abrupt. When I first read it, I was really confused. I thought I missed a paragraph because of my poor eyesight. When I went back and took a look, I made sure I didn't miss it. This improper transition is not only reflected between two chapters, but also within the same chapter. Because of the large jumps, the time when the plot takes place is confused, and some parts are really confusing and half-understood. Then let's talk about Guren's experience. Several characters suddenly appeared there, but the identities and relationships between the characters were not clearly explained, so I couldn't understand what the author wanted to express. To sum up, the author's writing style is good, and the writing style is also full of classical charm, but the arrangement of the number of words, the portrayal of characters, and the handling of plot transitions need to be strengthened. That's it, done. [Jiuge Changping Shop & Qingsui]

It's been a long time since I had the urge to read an article in one sitting, but a large article made me read it in one sitting, and then I felt a strong urge to write a long review, but I didn't know if my poor writing style could express what I was thinking! When I first read the large text, there was a hint of sadness in the lines. However, this kind of text is like a beautiful poppy flower, very coquettish and poignant, making people feel like they can't stop. As I read on, I became entangled with the fate of each character in the article, but the fate of everyone, going round and round, is ultimately inseparable from the trouble of the word love. As soon as you enter the gate of lovesickness, you will know the pain of lovesickness. What is love in this world that can only make people want to stop? Wuli searched hard for Honglian and never gave up. Ji Guo ignored Gu Xiangzhi's sacrifice and waited silently. And Tianjiu's silent devotion to Honglian are all touching. This is love, right? Because there is true love in the world, heaven and earth will be eternal! Ten years of life and death are so vast that I cannot forget them without thinking about them. Yan'er thought that her ten years of silent waiting was the real hurt, but she never imagined that Hua Deng had been waiting silently for ten years. Hua Deng's little efforts slowly eroded Yan'er's heart like drizzle, and it also eroded my heart. I will never forget the chuckle and joking words of that independent and unique man when we first met. But who can see the affectionate heart underneath the appearance of a disciple... Hua Deng used his actions to prove that if you love someone, you have to give everything. So he was willing to endure two years of bone-eroding and heart-piercing pain in exchange for one year of being with Yan'er. He knew that Yan'er had abandoned him time and time again, but he still couldn't bear to leave her and still lingered by her side. I was moved by the sincerity of this gentle and jade-like man. But we all know that they cannot escape their fate, so when I read the article, I was always worried. I was afraid that I would not be able to draw a happy ending to true love in the world. Fortunately, okay, in the end Hua Deng's reincarnation left us with a thought. You used to protect Yan'er all the time, now it's time for Yan'er to protect you, okay? Yan'er's last sentence: My name is Hua Deng, a sudden spring breeze blew away the sorrow all over the ground!

Here is the unreliable Xiao Qian. The author's story was already finished when I accepted the order, so I would like to praise the author's perseverance first. In fact, among Jinjiang's ancient poems, overly literary titles are not particularly pleasing. Although the title contains the name of the protagonist, I still don't quite understand what it means. This may be the reason why the first point of the article is not high and unattractive. I was really surprised to see that the author's 130,000-word article was completed in just fourteen chapters. It may be the author's first time writing an article. In fact, it is best to control the number of words in Jinjiangli chapters to 3,000 to 4,000, so that readers will not be too tired to read and will not feel short, but 10,000 or even 20,000 words per chapter is a bit too much. The chapter summary is also a very important thing. It seems that the author has not filled it in, so it is recommended to write down the more eye-catching parts of this chapter to attract readers. The cover and columns are both beautiful and old-fashioned, but the copywriting is a bit unclear. Perhaps because I am a novice, such introductory copywriting is actually not very attractive in Jinjiang. The copywriting usually pays attention to cuteness and explosive points. Of course, this does not mean that it is too bloody, but to extract the highlights of the story. The author's copywriting is just a simple introduction, and the questions asked seem to be more gripping, but in fact, people who have not read the article have little interest in suspense. For an ancient style article, the author's writing style is really good, rather it is a bit too good, as if the gorgeous words are pieced together, so the beginning is too lyrical, which actually reduces the sense of substitution, because the reader has just read an article, and the beginning is not suitable for lyricism. In fact, in Jinjiang's online literary cafes, even if it is an ancient style of writing, the priority for writing is to tell a clear story. If the narrative structure of an article is not clear, no matter how gorgeous the writing style is, it will appear cumbersome. Of course, apart from the above, the author's lyrical writing in the following text is very good, and the first-person sense of substitution is also good. The curse at the beginning really created a sense of gloom. The grievances of the previous generation and the birth of the heroine must have left a deep shadow on her. Seeing that she was illiterate, I suddenly felt very sorry for this girl. Although the appearance of other supporting characters was a bit sudden, and the overall feeling was that there were too many characters, the foreshadowing of the female supervisor calling herself Hua Deng was well laid out. I didn't finish it because of time issues. The overall feeling is that the story is very poignant and suspenseful, but the author still needs to improve on the narrative aspect. Although it is in the first person, the sense of substitution is not particularly sufficient. It may be because it cuts to a sad scene of the heroine all at once, leaving readers who have just read the article at a loss. I think this story has a complete context in the author's mind, but because it was my first time to write an article, I didn't grasp the entry point at the beginning of the story well, and the rhythm of the article was disrupted all of a sudden. In short, I still like this article very much. I think the reason why it is relatively cold is that Internet literature culture is not suitable for using overly literary titles, especially when the author does not have a reader base. Lyrics can be included, but at least it must wait for the readers to have an overall impression of the story. I hope the author can persevere, work hard to hone his storytelling skills, and write more outstanding works.

Watching it little by little makes me sad

Wow, this is my thing, I want to take my time, haha

The president expressed that he couldn't stand it anymore~~ Why is there no one coming to see such a good article?!! I want to download it to my phone and read it every night!

Leave your name first when it rains, collect it and take a look!