Blurb:
The previous generation lived through a hail of bullets. This life is peaceful, yet I cannot feel the warmth I long for. You say I'm the warmth you need, but you don't know that you are my everything!
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Blurb:
Chen Yiyan was reborn in a fleeting moment of distraction. Outsiders see clearly, while those involved are blinded. In her previous life, she died a senseless death caught up in the scheme. This time, she's on the outside, watching the show with a smile. How wonderful!
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Xiao Mo, there are so many typos! You have to change it, otherwise you will lose your level as a scholar.
Congratulations on the completion, spread flowers and give points
The big bad wolf has not successfully abducted him, hahaha
It's been a long time since I read a modern rebirth story, and when I saw Enter V, well, I didn't know who the male protagonist was. When I saw her uncle appear, I really thought it was the male protagonist, and then I guessed wrong again. It was his biological uncle... (Justified: I didn't think about blood connection at first.) Looking at the introduction, there should be love, right? The male protagonist is not clear to V? Even if it doesn't appear in the first thousand words, still want to lay a slightly obvious ambush as soon as possible?
I felt that I read it quite quickly. I looked back later when I went to Jinjiang on my computer. I still have to tell Xuanxuan, I heard that each chapter should be 3,000 words best. The number of words in each chapter is too few, and the content is not fully presented.
I think the first work is okay, and I don't have dyslexia. The introduction is too simple, not particularly attractive, and has no highlights. (The introduction is very annoying, but it is very important, so you should think about it carefully.) The story has a framework and the ideas are reasonable. If there is a more perfect expression, I think it will be perfect.
The story in the first few chapters was not strong, so I didn't get involved until the end. A good beginning is half the battle? I have seen many works that are slow to warm up, but this one is too fast, with a complete God's perspective, and the protagonist is downplayed.
The image of Yao Yi is semi-full. She was a mercenary in her previous life and was reborn into a family with only her grandmother. Thanks to her experience in her previous life and her strong English foundation, she got good grades and knew how to save money in small ways. Haha, everyone likes this smart female director.
I think this image is half incomplete, and it has to do with the author's narration.
When I was a child, did I listen to the older generation telling old stories, or did I listen to my mother's bedtime stories, or when I grew up, did I focus on the teacher's narration in class. Is different. The old man and mother are there to satisfy your curiosity or put you to sleep, but the teacher is there to teach you and solve your doubts. The author is like a teacher. You have to tell your students that they have to grasp the ins and outs of the content you teach, and they have to grasp the refinement and complexity themselves. A novel is a story, and the lowest level is just tasteless. Only when you go beyond this line will people be willing to listen. I say this because, Xuanxuan, you really keep a running account←_←.
Chua, Chua, Chua Yao Yi grew up very fast. What I remember most is her exam, perfect score, first place, and going to the market during the Chinese New Year. Can these events be described in more detail? They are all big events, right? And you chose to write this in the first few chapters. Two characters, without too much dialogue, told in a straightforward manner. Have you read it carefully after finishing it? Her path to making money was full of twists and turns. After all, being reborn as a child is the process of growing up, gaining insights and understanding, because no one is perfect. I used a magnifying glass to zoom in on it, and I forgot which two chapters had no dialogue. It was not like a transitional chapter. It felt like a big jump in time and space, and it was always being summarized. There is also very little psychological portrayal of Yao Yi, and there is also very little perspective from the sidelines. It stands to reason that she has a golden finger, but such an outstanding girl is not, but I did not feel that it was an enjoyable article when I read it. Doesn't she have any trace of her personality as a mercenary in her previous life?
I suggest that Xuanxuan start with the characterization of the characters. They should be vivid, with flesh and blood and emotions, which will definitely lead to the occurrence of events. The ups and downs of the plot should be exciting, and the story of rebirth should be more exciting, while house fighting is more suitable for dullness. Still need to learn.
It's great to be able to write for such a long time. It's very perseverant and deserves encouragement. Come on!
[Jiuge Changpingpu, Chen Nu]
11 Years old is already very old, okay? I remember my aunt was 11 years old when I first came here. She was over 1.5 Meters tall, so she couldn't be hugged casually like a child...
Generally speaking, older female bosses don't like young and beautiful female subordinates, and they have to give them some slack.
Wow, I met an author who plans to publish a new article on November 11th.
When they returned to H City, it was time to get off work. Instructing the driver to take Su Ho home first, Yao Yi thought for a moment that he hadn't been to Lin Zizheng's company yet, so he told the driver who came to pick him up that he should go to Lin Zizheng's company.
When they returned to H City, it was time to get off work. Instructing the driver to take Su Ho home first, Yao Yi thought for a moment that he hadn't been to Lin Zizheng's company yet, so he told the driver who came to pick him up that he should go to Lin Zizheng's company.
When they returned to H City, it was time to get off work. Instructing the driver to take Su Ho home first, Yao Yi thought for a moment that he hadn't been to Lin Zizheng's company yet, so he told the driver who came to pick him up that he should go to Lin Zizheng's company.
Xiao Mo, there are so many typos! You have to change it, otherwise you will lose your level as a scholar.
Congratulations on the completion, spread flowers and give points
The big bad wolf has not successfully abducted him, hahaha
It's been a long time since I read a modern rebirth story, and when I saw Enter V, well, I didn't know who the male protagonist was. When I saw her uncle appear, I really thought it was the male protagonist, and then I guessed wrong again. It was his biological uncle... (Justified: I didn't think about blood connection at first.) Looking at the introduction, there should be love, right? The male protagonist is not clear to V? Even if it doesn't appear in the first thousand words, still want to lay a slightly obvious ambush as soon as possible? I felt that I read it quite quickly. I looked back later when I went to Jinjiang on my computer. I still have to tell Xuanxuan, I heard that each chapter should be 3,000 words best. The number of words in each chapter is too few, and the content is not fully presented. I think the first work is okay, and I don't have dyslexia. The introduction is too simple, not particularly attractive, and has no highlights. (The introduction is very annoying, but it is very important, so you should think about it carefully.) The story has a framework and the ideas are reasonable. If there is a more perfect expression, I think it will be perfect. The story in the first few chapters was not strong, so I didn't get involved until the end. A good beginning is half the battle? I have seen many works that are slow to warm up, but this one is too fast, with a complete God's perspective, and the protagonist is downplayed. The image of Yao Yi is semi-full. She was a mercenary in her previous life and was reborn into a family with only her grandmother. Thanks to her experience in her previous life and her strong English foundation, she got good grades and knew how to save money in small ways. Haha, everyone likes this smart female director. I think this image is half incomplete, and it has to do with the author's narration. When I was a child, did I listen to the older generation telling old stories, or did I listen to my mother's bedtime stories, or when I grew up, did I focus on the teacher's narration in class. Is different. The old man and mother are there to satisfy your curiosity or put you to sleep, but the teacher is there to teach you and solve your doubts. The author is like a teacher. You have to tell your students that they have to grasp the ins and outs of the content you teach, and they have to grasp the refinement and complexity themselves. A novel is a story, and the lowest level is just tasteless. Only when you go beyond this line will people be willing to listen. I say this because, Xuanxuan, you really keep a running account←_←. Chua, Chua, Chua Yao Yi grew up very fast. What I remember most is her exam, perfect score, first place, and going to the market during the Chinese New Year. Can these events be described in more detail? They are all big events, right? And you chose to write this in the first few chapters. Two characters, without too much dialogue, told in a straightforward manner. Have you read it carefully after finishing it? Her path to making money was full of twists and turns. After all, being reborn as a child is the process of growing up, gaining insights and understanding, because no one is perfect. I used a magnifying glass to zoom in on it, and I forgot which two chapters had no dialogue. It was not like a transitional chapter. It felt like a big jump in time and space, and it was always being summarized. There is also very little psychological portrayal of Yao Yi, and there is also very little perspective from the sidelines. It stands to reason that she has a golden finger, but such an outstanding girl is not, but I did not feel that it was an enjoyable article when I read it. Doesn't she have any trace of her personality as a mercenary in her previous life? I suggest that Xuanxuan start with the characterization of the characters. They should be vivid, with flesh and blood and emotions, which will definitely lead to the occurrence of events. The ups and downs of the plot should be exciting, and the story of rebirth should be more exciting, while house fighting is more suitable for dullness. Still need to learn. It's great to be able to write for such a long time. It's very perseverant and deserves encouragement. Come on! [Jiuge Changpingpu, Chen Nu]
11 Years old is already very old, okay? I remember my aunt was 11 years old when I first came here. She was over 1.5 Meters tall, so she couldn't be hugged casually like a child...
Generally speaking, older female bosses don't like young and beautiful female subordinates, and they have to give them some slack.
Wow, I met an author who plans to publish a new article on November 11th.
When they returned to H City, it was time to get off work. Instructing the driver to take Su Ho home first, Yao Yi thought for a moment that he hadn't been to Lin Zizheng's company yet, so he told the driver who came to pick him up that he should go to Lin Zizheng's company.
When they returned to H City, it was time to get off work. Instructing the driver to take Su Ho home first, Yao Yi thought for a moment that he hadn't been to Lin Zizheng's company yet, so he told the driver who came to pick him up that he should go to Lin Zizheng's company.
When they returned to H City, it was time to get off work. Instructing the driver to take Su Ho home first, Yao Yi thought for a moment that he hadn't been to Lin Zizheng's company yet, so he told the driver who came to pick him up that he should go to Lin Zizheng's company.