Girl, they all say that when we were together, we each had ulterior motives, and that our separation was inevitable. So what should I call the way I can't stop worrying about you in the days to come? And who will pass it off as gossip and let it reach your ears?
My life in the past had its joys and sorrows, perhaps more sorrow than joy. But now, all I can remember is happiness!
Washing away all worldly glamour doesn't necessarily mean becoming as still as a flower. He had everything to himself, yet couldn't keep Xia Shen for even one summer.
They all say time and distance are the cure for forgetting someone. But I really fucking want to ask the couples who broke up over long distance: how did you manage to become so fragile?
I used to have no desires or feelings, but your clear, graceful brows made me develop a special affection for you.
It feels a bit scattered, but the content is good and worth reading. Please update it soon!
The novel has strong jumps, but no sense of rhythm. I won't go into details about the advantages of the novel. I'll probably focus on what you're satisfied with, and pay attention to the shortcomings.
The commas are used with character (but not in a mature way). The characters' dialogue does not have to be in quotation marks, but some of your pauses affect the expression of the content.
Overall, this is a good novel, with many sentences containing depth. However, the narrative is unclear, and you only know who is whose mother after reading the fifth chapter. As an online novel (still a new work by a newcomer), few people will ponder it over and over again. Either don't show too many people and things at the beginning, or describe it simply and clearly.