[Reborn!] Forget

I don't know why I watched it again in the middle of the night, and suddenly I fell in love with Tutoring. .

↑ Regarding the title, please forgive me for not knowing how to express my feelings. OTL, it really took me a long time, I feel guilty… But to be honest, after reading it, my first feeling was the so-called feeling of loss, and I had no special thoughts about other content. But since this is a long review, I still have to say a few more things. I've always been very reluctant to read BE's articles, well, as for this article... Since it has a HE ending, I should be able to accept it? ——No matter, even if it's HE, this article can't escape the faint feeling of sadness [sigh] Maybe it's not an artistic style, but for me, it's a style that I try to escape forever. Dramas involving the Mafia generally inevitably include heavy related topics. If you add the labels of "betrayal" and "amnesia", it would be really... So sad_(:з)∠)_(Even if the truth is hidden under the betrayal, and even if you will remember it again after losing your memory, what happened happened, and even if the broken hole in your heart is sutured, it will still leave scars. Because I have been hurt, I am afraid, and because my desire for feelings is uncertain, my fear turns into despair, which leads to a tragedy. ... However, just like the clearance game, life is a game of choices, so there is a parallel world. (I have always felt that the setting of a parallel world is the most likely existence. Every choice you make will lead to a completely different branch path. Once you take it, there is no chance of turning back.) Therefore, there is the possibility of HE. ... Uh, is this going too far? I accidentally made some "literary" thoughts, so I'd better get back to the topic. Well, the plot, as I said above, is full of all kinds of melancholy, and people can't help but have thoughts of regret or lamentation... (So I always try to avoid this type, because it is really... OTL) But from a development point of view, this arrangement is very reasonable, or in other words, if you just turn back for the so-called HE, it will be very disharmonious, so I have no objection to the ending... In short, any situation is a possibility, isn't it? The author writes what he wants to write and what he wants to express, then that is enough. Of course, for me, a better ending is definitely not to retreat, but to face my feelings bravely, and not to escape even the most disturbing and hesitant parts. Escape can only bring you temporary relief and cause more pain. Of course, this is based on the conditions for the possibility of HE, but since Sora and Dino are in love (hey), then this is not a problem, right? Ww As for the writing, it's okay, there doesn't seem to be any problem. However, from a structural point of view, the article is a bit loosely written (but short stories are generally easy to write with this effect), and some give people the feeling that each section is separated... Well, since it is a way of recalling, it seems that there is nothing that can be done? = = (By the way, if you are talking to the same person, you don't need to use blank lines. It will be easier to read. ... Others, I can't point out the others? There may still be some minor flaws in the language, but if you write more and practice more, you can always improve slowly. If you want to improve, you have to accumulate a little bit, and I can't give any specific opinions╮(￣▽￣")╭ Anyway, please keep up the good work!

To be honest, when I saw Dino recalling that there should be a person wearing men's clothing in the photo, I thought for a moment that I had misjudged my sexual orientation. Fortunately, I later realized that it was just a woman disguised as a man. Okay, now I can't figure out how to introduce it, so let's get back to business and start commenting. I have always had a special preference for short stories, and the short story BE is even more to my liking. Therefore, after reading this story, my love for Dino was awakened. Frankly speaking, I think it might be better if the BE line is changed to one where he goes to find Sora in another world but comes back alone in the end. As for the HE part... That's really a far-fetched dream. By the way, please allow me to say that I don't know if Sora has the sound of kuro, but my first reaction from kuro is black, and Sora must be Sora. Of course, if there is indeed this correspondence, just ignore my complaints. Start with forgetting and end with forgetting. Even if the identity and status match, even if we are lucky enough to meet each other, even if we fall in love so deeply, there are still so many unavoidable feelings. Family, companionship, trust. Family, loved ones, secrets. Carrying sin and paying the price with death, all Sora Inoue thought about at that moment must be Dino Gabrielne. -Then I come to life. ——I pretend to forget you. ——I am stuck here. HE is a distant dream. Maybe Dino was really ready to give up everything when he went to find Sora. Abandon everything to stay with you. But what is more reasonable may be that the moment you see Sora, the moment you see her and her family living well, you understand what else you have to bear besides love. They met in the context of the Mafia, which was a blessing and a curse. He should come back, and even if he sheds tears while holding the memories, he must still be able to smile. Although I think that the author may not necessarily intend to modify this short story, I like this setting very much, and I still hope to make some comments from the perspective of modification. This can be regarded as a little willful freedom on my part as a reviewer. Because of the length of the short story, it must be focused. Judging from the postscript, it may have been originally designed to be a long story, but this does not matter. I think there are two entry points that are more appropriate, one is suspense and the other is tear-jerking. Speaking of suspense, it actually mainly allows readers to guess why Dino lost his memory and whether Sora was betrayed. If it were written like this, there would need to be some major changes in the entire layout, especially the arrangement and setting of memories. The order in which Dino recalls the fragments actually has a lot to write about. As for tearing, it's easier to understand. This is another line, which is closer to the author's current style, but it can only be said that the author did not do enough in rendering. It gave me a sense of melancholy, but unfortunately it only passed by in a flash. This may need to enhance the beauty of the memory fragments, and at the same time, the cover-up of some outsiders can also be arranged in more detail. It would be better if it can be integrated with the plot. Moreover, just to give an example, at the end of a chapter, after Dino recalled some things about Sora, he suddenly remembered that she had betrayed him. This kind of conflict setting effect is also quite good. As I was writing this, I couldn't help but have an idea. Maybe the Wing Chronicles had such a profound impact on me that the topic was a little off topic. In short, Sora set up a spell to make Dino lose his memory (I haven't studied the principle). So with the power of love, Dino recalled those fragments. What was his state of mind when he looked at those scenes when he recalled them? Do you feel the same way, or do you feel distressed, lost, and overwhelmed from the perspective of an audience, but at the same time, you feel that something is missing? I have always felt that forgetting is a very heavy topic. I have unknowingly rambled so much. Most of it is actually my wild imagination. I hope that occasionally something can be helpful to the author. Please do your best~

See BE…very short…

Wait, is there a BE line?!