I changed the title~ The old one was a little too clichéd~
As an insignificant extra in The Deer and the Cauldron, what will Lu Anran do?
Dragon Island is where she was born and raised. There, she meets her scheming senior brother and the arrogant, proud Prince Zheng Keshuang. She is Lu Gaoxuan's only daughter.
The imperial palace is where she has no choice but to stay. Here, she meets the sister-obsessed Kangxi, the smooth-talking Wei Xiaobao, and the clever Princess Jianning. She is a princess of the Qing Empire.
In the end, everything will settle into place, leaving no trace behind.
Lu Anran: My ultimate goal is to meet all the famous people in The Deer and the Cauldron, then live happily and carefree with my parents and younger brother.
"Hahahaha..."
She threw back her head and laughed, startling countless birds into flight.
The heroine is a bit lazy and not exactly clever, and she doesn't have a strong sense of right and wrong. I'm doing my best to fill in the plot. Feel free to point out any problems~
I update daily, around 9:10 every morning.
Below is Lu Anran's character profile. Thanks to the lovely ladies at Bishui~
I've started a new story!
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Hello, author, this is Taosu from He Qihu's Changping Shop. I am very happy to review the article for you, the author! At the same time, I am also very sorry for delaying my comment so late because of the three-dimensional time. I take a bow!
Then there is the fact that Tao Su has not read the original work of "The Deer and the Cauldron", but has only watched the TV series of "The Deer and the Cauldron", so his understanding of the original work is not deep and not comprehensive. Therefore, if Tao Su is wrong about the plot or some issues, please don't mind.
Then the next step is the topic.
Let's talk about the copy first.
In fact, the author's copywriting is not good enough. First, it is too simple, and second, it is a bit unclear. The function of copywriting is to attract people who don't know anything about the article to read it. Therefore, it is best to write down the cute and explosive points (or interesting points) of the article in the copywriting, so as to achieve the purpose of attracting readers. However, the author's current copywriting has absolutely nothing to reflect the cuteness of the article, and it makes people wonder what the author is talking about after reading it.
Therefore, it is recommended that the author change the copywriting, which can be conversational, narrative, etc., As long as it can reflect the cuteness of the character, the interesting points of the article, or anything that the author thinks can attract readers.
Then by the way, let's talk about the author's brief introduction.
In fact, the content introduction is very important, because some readers like to read the content introduction before reading the article to see if there are any cute spots that hit them. If so, they will definitely click in to read the article.
Therefore, it is recommended that the author should not ignore the content introduction and select some exciting words in the article (such as cute words, words that can leave doubts, touching words, etc.) And put them in the content introduction. This will also help attract readers to read.
Next is the content of the article.
Since I have not read the original work of "The Deer and the Cauldron", Tao Su will not comment on the plot and characters. I will only comment on whether these plots and characters are attractive.
After reading the whole article, I feel that the author still lacks some strength in description. The whole article is more like narrating the story rather than describing the story. Moreover, the author also has some problems with scene transitions, which often appear surprising, and you even need to read back again to know what happened.
Moreover, the character of the heroine is a bit too childish (due to the passage of time, I have forgotten whether Lu Anran is in the original work or the author created it, please forgive me), and sometimes her behavior style makes people feel very childish, which makes the whole character have no connotation and seems very shallow (personal feeling).
In addition, the emotional development between the male protagonist and the female protagonist is also somewhat abnormal. For example, the author's setting for the male protagonist is an iceberg? (At least that's what I think. Don't slap me in the face if the positioning is wrong...) But he seems to treat the heroine very differently from the beginning, and I don't understand why this is the case (for example, what is so special about the heroine or what makes her different from others, so the male protagonist treats her like this).
Therefore, I suggest that the author polishes the handling of emotions a little more. Don't let the characters follow the plot, but let the plot follow the characters. In other words, what the author needs to do is to imagine how people with characters like the hero and heroine will react when encountering a certain thing (plot), instead of just letting things happen to the characters and not thinking about whether the characters have such a reasonable reaction.
The above is just my opinion. I wish the author better and better writing!
——He Qihu's long comment on Pu Tao Su
Tang Seng did not mean to be wordy in ancient times. . .
The heroine's behavior is very unreasonable. If it were my biological father who cared about another woman, regardless of whether his mother was a mistress or not, he would be very angry with that woman and his father.
BS came to accept the article, saying that he doesn't read the fan's article, but he has already accepted it, please spread the flowers, please support the author.
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In one sentence, there are experts everywhere on Shenlong Island.
The heroine's lines are sometimes a bit naive, and I don't know what the positioning of this article is.
Words like "good engine oil" and "mulberry heart" are a bit supernatural, click, braised, and instantly travel through time~
Lu Zhui was a little frightened by Lu Anran's sudden scolding from the little girl~
Look, look, look, look, look, look, look
This ending. . . . . . .
Is this a naughty kid?
Hello, author, this is Taosu from He Qihu's Changping Shop. I am very happy to review the article for you, the author! At the same time, I am also very sorry for delaying my comment so late because of the three-dimensional time. I take a bow! Then there is the fact that Tao Su has not read the original work of "The Deer and the Cauldron", but has only watched the TV series of "The Deer and the Cauldron", so his understanding of the original work is not deep and not comprehensive. Therefore, if Tao Su is wrong about the plot or some issues, please don't mind. Then the next step is the topic. Let's talk about the copy first. In fact, the author's copywriting is not good enough. First, it is too simple, and second, it is a bit unclear. The function of copywriting is to attract people who don't know anything about the article to read it. Therefore, it is best to write down the cute and explosive points (or interesting points) of the article in the copywriting, so as to achieve the purpose of attracting readers. However, the author's current copywriting has absolutely nothing to reflect the cuteness of the article, and it makes people wonder what the author is talking about after reading it. Therefore, it is recommended that the author change the copywriting, which can be conversational, narrative, etc., As long as it can reflect the cuteness of the character, the interesting points of the article, or anything that the author thinks can attract readers. Then by the way, let's talk about the author's brief introduction. In fact, the content introduction is very important, because some readers like to read the content introduction before reading the article to see if there are any cute spots that hit them. If so, they will definitely click in to read the article. Therefore, it is recommended that the author should not ignore the content introduction and select some exciting words in the article (such as cute words, words that can leave doubts, touching words, etc.) And put them in the content introduction. This will also help attract readers to read. Next is the content of the article. Since I have not read the original work of "The Deer and the Cauldron", Tao Su will not comment on the plot and characters. I will only comment on whether these plots and characters are attractive. After reading the whole article, I feel that the author still lacks some strength in description. The whole article is more like narrating the story rather than describing the story. Moreover, the author also has some problems with scene transitions, which often appear surprising, and you even need to read back again to know what happened. Moreover, the character of the heroine is a bit too childish (due to the passage of time, I have forgotten whether Lu Anran is in the original work or the author created it, please forgive me), and sometimes her behavior style makes people feel very childish, which makes the whole character have no connotation and seems very shallow (personal feeling). In addition, the emotional development between the male protagonist and the female protagonist is also somewhat abnormal. For example, the author's setting for the male protagonist is an iceberg? (At least that's what I think. Don't slap me in the face if the positioning is wrong...) But he seems to treat the heroine very differently from the beginning, and I don't understand why this is the case (for example, what is so special about the heroine or what makes her different from others, so the male protagonist treats her like this). Therefore, I suggest that the author polishes the handling of emotions a little more. Don't let the characters follow the plot, but let the plot follow the characters. In other words, what the author needs to do is to imagine how people with characters like the hero and heroine will react when encountering a certain thing (plot), instead of just letting things happen to the characters and not thinking about whether the characters have such a reasonable reaction. The above is just my opinion. I wish the author better and better writing! ——He Qihu's long comment on Pu Tao Su
Tang Seng did not mean to be wordy in ancient times. . .
The heroine's behavior is very unreasonable. If it were my biological father who cared about another woman, regardless of whether his mother was a mistress or not, he would be very angry with that woman and his father.
BS came to accept the article, saying that he doesn't read the fan's article, but he has already accepted it, please spread the flowers, please support the author.
This comment is waiting for review by the administrator and has been automatically blocked by the system. It will be displayed after passing the review!
In one sentence, there are experts everywhere on Shenlong Island. The heroine's lines are sometimes a bit naive, and I don't know what the positioning of this article is. Words like "good engine oil" and "mulberry heart" are a bit supernatural, click, braised, and instantly travel through time~
Lu Zhui was a little frightened by Lu Anran's sudden scolding from the little girl~