Online Gaming: Fisherman's Shore

My dear... It seems like there haven't been any updates for a long time

Wow~ I'm so happy to be praised! I'm so shy! (Blushing) I'm looking forward to the new article, but you should also pay attention to your health and don't be too tired!

So, was it the younger brother Feng Beishu who pushed him down? . . I always thought it was Lin. . .

Hello Funamatsu! I'm here to read the article. I'm sorry that it took me so long to write a comment. I read your article very carefully, but it's a pity that I gave up. Let me tell you why I gave up. First, I can see from the text that you are a very serious and hard-working author, but your writing skills are still lacking in some detailed descriptions and scene transitions, which will make some readers like me who love words have doubts about the details of the article. I hope you can write better and better and hone your skills ^_^ Second, in the essay request, I mentioned that I wanted to read "easy cute articles". However, most of your articles are not cute enough and have few laughs, so I have to abandon your articles because of my personal preferences. I am sorry. Third, the beginning of your article is a bit dark. Although the courier is brightened, it is unfortunately not handled well enough and the character seems a bit unreal. Moreover, the protagonist has some negative emotions towards the game he plays, which made me feel a little uncomfortable. Because in my understanding, playing a game must be because you like it. But if he starts to hate the game so much, why does he continue to play it? If it's just for the money, treat gaming like a job and don't complain. This kind of description will make people think that the protagonist has a twisted psychology and a bad personality. Well, maybe you will think that my third point is a bit exaggerated and a bit distorted. Maybe you will say that the character of the protagonist will be gradually portrayed in the chapters that I have not seen in the future. However, I have read about ten chapters now, but I still haven't been "caught" by your article. A slow-burning article should also have highlights at the beginning to catch readers, right? After all, most readers are like me. They will abandon the article after reading about ten chapters and find it not to their liking. Therefore, I speculate that this is the reason why your article has not become popular... Of course, the above are just some of my personal opinions. Your article still has many advantages, such as the clever plot, the creative background setting, and the setting of game professions that are also surprising. I believe that if I continue reading, I will definitely find more of your advantages. I would like to apologize to you for my willful abandonment of the article. I hope that more people will discover the advantages of your article and continue to read it. Finally, even though I have written so many words, I still did not fill in the topic to make it a long review. This is because I am afraid that someone will read this review and believe my one-sided evaluation and stop reading your article. I feel that I am not qualified to write a long review for you without reading the full text of your article. That's all I want to say, please keep up the good work! (I hope you won't be hit by some of my personal opinions:)

Update soon, update soon, looking forward to it~

Perhaps because of the narrative technique, the suspense thrown at the beginning of the article loses its due tension in the slightly protracted description later, so that the reader lacks the motivation to continue reading. Plain writing style is actually very good, but the author may have higher requirements on rhythm control. Thank you for your submission. I believe you will write better and better.

I've seen it before and made a lot of mistakes. The overall writing style is a bit depressing. There are too many people with whom the male protagonist is ambiguous, and the male protagonist's character is quite annoying and too self-centered. It is difficult to get one-on-one with him, and many people will definitely be sad in the end. Personally, I prefer Brother CP

I added the word "fisherman"

I'm lying on a patch of green grass on the slope

Although it always feels like a suspense film wrapped in an online game shell, it still looks good.