Wake Me When September Ends

Yeah, come and support! ! Ye Chengxi's opinion is the voice of many people. There are indeed too many characters in the dormitory. Secondly, the relationship between teacher and student is a bit too fast. It feels like their relationship has reached the point of ambiguity before I can even distinguish the names of the characters. . But the description is very delicate and the general direction is okay. (Okay, I don't really like teacher-student romance, but I hope I'll adopt it!!) Ps: What's going on with "The scene where Yichen embraced Siran brought back my distant memories". .

"I think you are more beautiful than the book" is so domineering! ! Make up 1 point!

This section really jumped too fast. Inexplicably, the teacher fell in love with his Kodai? This needs to be written in more depth. It's not that the important part of the novel will be placed in the future, and the present will be left arbitrary. In the novel, Si Ran was even more afraid to look at Yichen after hearing his identity. This seemed to be for money, so I have to write this chapter in more detail. Also, there are too many people in the dormitory, so I can't remember them. I think if there are people who will not appear in the future, you don't need to write them down. There is no need to write down everyone in the dormitory.

It's too direct... The daily part of the school should be increased, and then the water flows slowly. It feels like a climax here...

I hope the heroine will grow up in the future... It still feels too weak

In fact... It's really bloody... The impression in my mind of the math teacher has always been that of an uncle with a stubble or a gentle female teacher (why is the contrast so big)

I feel the last few paragraphs... I hope this feeling can last

The appearance of reporters has the effect of ruining the scenery... Really

I feel like the character can be better developed, I look forward to it

It could be a little more transparent... The writing style is fresh and nice.