The Substitute Girlfriend

There is a question. Jiran is about to break off the relationship, so why should she spend money to save her father?

I haven't had time to read it, but now I have finally finished reading several chapters of the later updates. I still like it and want to know the future development. Come on dear!

Review of "Substitute Girlfriend "Rebirth"" (formerly known as "Scandal Boyfriend") by Lin Ge As the first modern rebirth article that Ge received in the shop, Ge was quite looking forward to it. He opened the novel address and read it slowly—— The girl on the cover of the novel is sweet and cute, and the text of the copy is relatively bland, but this allows readers to directly know that Mr. H is writing the story of Xia Wei being reborn into the body of Cinderella Liu Qianjie. However, after reading the copy, Ge has always had a question, that is, when Xia Wei was reborn as Cinderella Liu Qianji, was it after Liu Qianji accidentally returned to ten years ago because of filial piety, or was it that Xia Wei had been reborn to replace Liu Qianji before Liu's mother got a terminal brain tumor? There is also the original sentence (she borrowed money from him to save her mother, and promised to marry him if the money is not paid in ten years). This sentence makes Ge have to guess that in fact, Qiao Yiyang, the third generation rich, also likes her. (The ex-boyfriend's bed photo incident forced the proud daughter Xia Wei to death) Rang Ge has to say that the heroine's previous endurance was too weak! As the mouse continued to scroll down, Ge discovered that Mr. H was a particularly diligent writer in coding. (Piao Duohua likes it~~) However, Ge also found that the number of words in each chapter of Mr. H is relatively small. In addition to his excellent writing style and particularly good control of the storyline, Ge suggested that Mr. H could actually increase the number of words slightly and try to keep it around 3K. The content described in a chapter of about 2K is really limited. Sometimes the key points are not fully grasped before starting the next chapter. As the first chapter we read at the beginning of the song (the heroine was reborn in Liu Qianqing's body and asked Liu's father to threaten her ex-boyfriend Yan Hao with pornographic photos to get money), many of the words used by Mr. H in this chapter did not quite fit the scene described in the content. Ge gave an example carefully: [(Original sentence: A sharp ringtone tore through the night and broke the tranquility) Ge felt that the word tearing apart was really inappropriate. At most, it just broke the tranquility of the night. As for the so-called residential landline number 8521, it was actually a landline number, right? But this is the first time I know the four-digit landline number. (Later I saw Yan Hao's soft tone when he said "Who are you?" He was embarrassed. He called the heroine after she sent him nude photos. Shouldn't he be particularly angry in a particularly cold tone?)] [Original sentence: Her appearance is always so stunning, extraordinary and lifelike. It seems that there are always some people who have a good life, are prosperous and make people jealous since they were born! (Appearance can be changed to appearance. As for the stunning two-character song, it is understandable, but jumpy and lifelike H can be deleted directly. There is no need to use the red or purple ones at the end. (Have you forgotten the two words "mother's fetus" in the front?)] [Original sentence: The place where she lives now is far away from Hirayama University. It takes about half an hour by bus, or forty minutes if you ride a bicycle quickly. (This sentence is completely inconsistent~~ It takes half an hour to take a bus but forty minutes to ride a bicycle to express the so-called "far" mentioned above. After seeing this song, I have to ask, how slow do you have to ride a bicycle to achieve that effect? There are many similar songs later, so I won't go into details~~)] Ge suggested that some redundant and unnecessary words H can be omitted directly. As for the modifiers before nouns and some verbs H, you should carefully consider before using them and then consider whether to use them. The words should not be too many but should be precise. Mr. H should pay attention to this! Never use some words that have no connection with the original meaning in order to reflect the so-called "literary style". This will lead to incoherent and inconsistent sentences that will bore readers. Seeing the rebirth of the heroine Liu Qianjing and the male supporting character Qiao Yiyang when they were juniors in college, can it be confirmed that the heroine's rebirth should be before Liu's mother got terminal brain tumor? Can the subsequent plot song also guess that the heroine returned to ten years ago after Liu's mother got terminal brain tumor? It wasn't until after reading Chapter 38 that Ge discovered that before the heroine was reborn, Liu Qianjiu had accidentally returned to ten years ago because of filial piety~~ (Sweat~~ I feel that this plot setting seems a bit strange~~~) In the article, the character traits of both the heroine and the supporting characters are not outstanding enough and are relatively popular. The plot content of the novel is also relatively large. He does not use appropriate sentences to connect the previous and previous content to describe it clearly, which makes the reading feel a bit abrupt. (Example: In Chapter 6, Qiao Yiyang simply helped, but the heroine suddenly said that she had a boyfriend. How did she feel that Qiao Yiyang liked her at that time? Also, Qiao Yiyang's character changed too quickly later~~) I suggest that the heroine's character song be changed, especially before rebirth. In fact, it would be better to change it to being killed. I also really don't understand the heroine's suicide by swallowing sleeping pills because of her boyfriend's cheating bed photo, and what she said after her rebirth (why not tell Yan Hao and fight him again). She is the mayor's daughter, and if she can't stand her boyfriend's cheating, she can just break up and find a better one. In Chapter 6, the heroine is drunk and takes the initiative to kiss her ex-boyfriend in his arms. It can be seen that subconsciously the heroine still has a fascination and affection for him. (Sweat~ heroine, how many times do you have to be hurt before you can remember~~) After rebirth, shouldn't she hate Yan Hao so much? Why does it feel like the heroine actually likes that scumbag Yan Hao in every line of the song? After Mayor Xia was hospitalized for angina pectoris, the heroine revealed her identity (but Yan Hao didn't know it at the time~~Khan). After seeing this sentence (Xia Wei handed her hand to Yan Hao, intertwining her fingers with him as before, completely giving her body and mind to Yan Hao!), Ge particularly hated her temper. (Mr. H, are you sure you are not writing about the reborn Xia Wei who never forgets her ex-boyfriend and then gets back together after going through difficulties? Can you bear the heart to let the heroine abandon many excellent male partners for such a scumbag? ~Hurry up and tell Ge secretly how many benefits the scumbag Yan Hao has given you~~). The ex-boyfriend Yan Haoyoute in the article is not considered mentally healthy and is not mentally healthy. He must have cheated on her with Huang Zhenzhen, otherwise Huang Zhenzhen would not have said she was pregnant with his child, and he did not deny it at the time. And [(Original sentence: A mistake between him and Xu Weiwei almost destroyed the trust he and Liu Qianji had re-established. Is this Xia Wei reminding him? Such a kind-hearted Xia Wei must be watching him somewhere... He will definitely treat Liu Qianji well and will not allow himself to betray Xia Wei again! Yan Hao swore that he would never betray Xia Wei again! Xia Wei is watching him! Xia Wei, Xia Wei, wait for me...) Mr. H, what's wrong with this paragraph~~] Here, the song also recommends that the heroine's name, Mr. H, should not be used interchangeably, as it hurts the eyes. In Ge's opinion, it is best for the heroine to use the name Liu Qianjie, because after rebirth, she will live under the identity of Liu Qianjie. (However, I suggest Mr. H change the name of Liu Qianji~~) Finally, there are many typos in Mr. H's article, and the use of punctuation marks is not very standardized. It is recommended that Mr. H review the preview of the article several times after coding each chapter. (Touch Mr. H who was quite hurt after reading this~~~) Ink dyes a thousand cities and comments are presented by Pu Linge.

I came here from BS. Although modern writing is not my cup of tea, I accepted it and left a comment.

The elevator opened, and Xia Wei walked out with light steps, a youthful and sweet smile on her face. From now on you are Su Clinique, she said to herself. Porridge is such a dedicated person. . . The same is true for Xiaoxiao, either don't do it or do it well.

Does the author plan to write under the names Xia Wei and Liu Qianqing? @. . . . . . Xiaoxiao also dreamed of becoming an actor before, so she is looking forward to this story. . . Take a look. . . .

Did Xia Wei die and time travel into Liu Qian's body? A little dizzy. . . But you should understand it if you keep reading. . . . Big brother is a senior, Xiao Xiao is looking for support and advice (acting like a baby)

In the restaurant, Yan Moli shouted: "Mom, who is here!" This kind of exclamation mark, shouldn't a question be a question mark? A very plain sentence, or a very calm sentence, adding an exclamation mark, all kinds of drama... Well, I withdrew it, mainly because this is my point, maybe I am strange, please continue to work hard, the author, other problems are not big.

The next morning, Xia Wei didn't have her hair cut short. He knew Yan Qiche too well, and this matter was not as simple as she thought. Can't read smoothly. There are still all kinds of exclamation marks... My mother was almost scared to death. She collapsed and still kept all kinds of exclamation marks. I ORZ, I'm sorry.

"Go away! Go away! I will never [call] you again!" Then came the sound of Mother Liu pushing and father Liu crying hysterically: "Why is my life so miserable? I don't worry about marrying you for a day! I am a woman who has to do [groceries] to support the family. You are a man and you know how to hang around outside... You might as well die. You still have the nerve to come back. Go away! Go away!" I don't want to see you, chores. Catch the worm. The chapters have a small number of words, and the layout is dense. You can finish it in just two mouse clicks... It's easy to catch the chicken. [Xia Wei put down her chopsticks and asked with a cold face: "How much do you want? How much do you want before you are willing to leave mom and me!" Liu Sicheng was stunned for a moment, as if his well-behaved daughter would say such harsh words! But just for a moment of surprise, his face glowed with greed. Don't use exclamation points like this... In dramas, this is very dramatic. I'm a bit of a punctuation freak... It's weird when I see people using exclamation points, periods, and ellipses indiscriminately... Well, if you have something to say, just say it, the author doesn't mind, I'll touch you.