http://1012465.jjwxc.net I've switched to a new secret identity. My pen name is Yaoweicao, and my new story, A Clueless Kitten and a Clueless Demon, launched on June 1. Come jump in, ladies!
When Xia Yu returns to the place where he lived as a child, he learns that Wang Qifeng, his childhood playmate who always cared for and protected him, has depression. Xia Yu hesitates: should he help him with his honest nature, or his body (PUNTED AWAY), or should he keep his distance like everyone else?
Xia Yu: Damn it, how can someone so young have depression! I'll save you!
Wang Qifeng: …
Xia Yu: What the hell! You're gay! Why didn't you say so earlier? Stay away from me!
Wang Qifeng: Xiaoyu... I feel awful...
Xia Yu: Damn! Is it acting up? Quick, lie down and rest!
I hope you'll leave your valuable suggestions after reading. Thank you!
P.S. Chapter 23 is actually Chapter 24. The real Chapter 23 is at this link, so click it hard!!~~: http://bulaoge.net/?yanyaoyao
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When I read the first and second chapters, I felt that the author's writing was smooth and organized. From the third chapter, I realized that it was still very immature. The focus of the character description was not in place, and the psychological activities were not realistic enough. In Chapter 4, I saw "What kind of hospital is this? The doctor is so irresponsible!" It felt like the protagonist had traveled through time - -! In fact, writing naturally is the most important, and there is no need to be deliberate about choosing words and sentences. It can be regarded as giving suggestions to the author.
I'm here. Ouch! Ouch! Ouch! Damn, it's so pretty!! Receive the article! Is this article finished? It's not over yet, so I'm going to chase you! Please accept my flowers + comments + love!
Support it, the writing is really awesome. As soon as I came up, I was "washed and waiting"
Come on! Dear, the writing is very good (I saw the bad plot of Jinjiang Notice~≧▽≦)/~) Keep up the good work~
It ended just when I thought it would go on forever. .
Severe depression or moderate to mild depression? Generally, depression will not reach the point of fainting...
I don't like... She uses a lot of bad words. When I met Fang Fang during the trip - let's call it that - it really seemed like she was bullying her. She felt like she had no quality and was nothing. The twist was very abrupt. I originally thought that She should be a soft-hearted straight man, but she should be a very cute one. Also, the plot in bed happened too fast. Does Gou want to die? I feel so frustrated!
Yaoyao, come on, I look forward to your new chapter.
Should. I totally feel that this person deserves to be beaten... I feel very anxious. What's wrong with those who only like this article but don't like it? I feel that if I hadn't been depressed, I could have found a high-quality girlfriend without having to blame a straight guy. I feel like the straight guy in this article is prone to cheating after marriage...
It ended too soon~ I said I wasn't satisfied with it~