HP: I'm Not the Chosen One (LVSS)

Your naming skills are as bad as Dumbledore's...

I emmmmm. . . I won't complain about the writing style, but what is this article talking about? ? ?

? ? ? ? What the hell?

The story is good, but the writing style makes me feel depressed! It feels like a white lotus, right? Or is it Tom? None of it seems right. The plot and activities of other characters' speeches are not detailed. Sometimes when I see a passage, I have to read the whole chapter to find out who said it. Let's just say it's the right line! There are also descriptions of characters, plots and tone, but here they are only briefly touched upon. It feels like the text has been cut out, paragraph by paragraph, and sometimes the story doesn't fit right when I read the previous chapter and read the next one. By the way, isn't this really a self-report of Temple V? The author needs to practice his writing more! Of course, I'm not saying that the story you wrote is not good, but the writing is really problematic and makes it difficult to read. Okay, the above is all a joke! I just wanted to ask, is this a first draft? Author, you are lazy! 😜😜😜 I forgot to mention how the inner activities of Temple V in the article make people feel like he has traveled through time! This question needs to be revised. I suggest you replace the second person pronoun with the second person pronoun! It looks comfortable. This makes it much easier to describe the inner activities of Temple V. Also, wasn't Lucius Harry's cousin-in-law in the HP article I read before? Why did he become an uncle? Harry is Draco's uncle, right? All right! They all said a lot of things, it's time to go to sleep. Best wishes to the author! Looking forward to the next story being more exciting! (｡･㉨･｡)ﾉ♡I love you so much!

The story is good, but the writing style makes me feel depressed! It feels like a white lotus, right? Or is it Tom? None of it seems right. The plot and activities of other characters' speeches are not detailed. Sometimes when I see a passage, I have to read the whole chapter to find out who said it. Let's just say it's the right line! There are also descriptions of characters, plots and tone, but here they are only briefly touched upon. It feels like the text has been cut out, paragraph by paragraph, and sometimes the story doesn't fit right when I read the previous chapter and read the next one. By the way, isn't this really a self-report of Temple V? The author needs to practice his writing more! Of course, I'm not saying that the story you wrote is not good, but the writing is really problematic and makes it difficult to read. Okay, the above is all a joke! I just wanted to ask, is this a first draft? Author, you are lazy! 😜😜😜 I forgot to mention how the inner activities of Temple V in the article make people feel like he has traveled through time! This question needs to be revised. I suggest you replace the second person pronoun with the second person pronoun! It looks comfortable. This makes it much easier to describe the inner activities of Temple V. Also, wasn't Lucius Harry's cousin-in-law in the HP article I read before? Why did he become an uncle? Harry is Draco's uncle, right? All right! They all said a lot of things, it's time to go to sleep. Best wishes to the author! Looking forward to the next story being more exciting! (｡･㉨･｡)ﾉ♡I love you so much!

MJ Nuo╃JUN group... Is it a personal name? I thought it was gibberish

It's heartbreaking...

Which balls? ! And the author, how old are you? !

Author, could you please stop naming the characters with weird names? Even if you say Jordan Brown is better than him!

There are a lot of typos...