A century of loneliness came to an end that day.
Beginning with zero and ending with zero, yet without a single regret.
Perhaps this long wait...
was all for the sake of meeting you during those five days.
Natsuki Mayu, a member of the Thirteenth Division.
She has always been easy to overlook, until one day she receives a mission to reinforce the forces in the Human World.
It is her first mission in over a hundred years as a Soul Reaper.
She never imagined it would also be her last.
Hueco Mundo is in turmoil, and Karakura Town is under attack by a horde of Hollows.
A conspiracy hidden for a century gradually comes to light, along with an inescapable fate and an unavoidable sacrifice.
What should have remained undisturbed is stirred, sending ripples through the world.
Author's Note
1. Revised the story and changed the ending.
2. The Zanpakuto's abilities have some bugs, so please go easy on me.
3. The story begins after the Lost Substitute Soul Reaper arc and ends before the Thousand-Year Blood War.
The main setting is Karakura Town.
4. Is it okay if the male lead is 15?
--Add me to your favorites~~!--
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Theme: Parting isn't always a bad thing.
I watched it again when I had nothing to do, and sure enough, I still found it cruel...
Review of "[Death] Abducting a Strawberry Boy"
Cute Xiaomi and Zhuyu like to get straight to the point, so we won't be polite.
About the title
Is this title meant to be cute? Putting aside the Bleach fan factor, the cuteness is really not enough. But this is a doujin after all, and one of the great advantages of doujin is that as long as the word "Death" is directed at it, fans will probably flock to it. But except for the viewers who are already cute about death, it is difficult to capture the rest of the readership.
About copywriting
I won't say anything about the previous internal monologue. From a certain perspective, it's okay, but from an eye-catching perspective, it's a lot more problematic. First, there is only entanglement and no conflict. Is that what you want? Second, the information given is too scattered. It's like ten bullets in a gun. You shoot at ten different locations. No one of them is really penetrated. It leaves a deep impression on people. It's not enough to scratch the surface. As for the summary of the story behind it, it must be because I was reading the article on my mobile phone. The first sentence was a bit too long... It took three full lines to end. This is not the point. The point is that the subject matter of this article is really not suitable for the online literature world. Have you seen any book about analyzing the inner world that became very popular in the online literary world? If you are writing the article for the purpose of ratings, I advise you to change the copy and put in the exciting points that people are looking forward to. As the saying goes, changing the soup without changing the medicine, why some super bad movies can achieve ratings has nothing to do with the script, but everything to do with the hype. There are two major strategies for movie promotion. One is to promote the movie itself if the content of the movie is topical. If it is not topical, the movie will be dismembered, either by hyping the director, the actors, or a certain plot. So even if you write a book about analyzing the heart, you must not reveal this in advance, because the current social environment is not interested in this. If you want to make people interested and catch their attention first, you must squeeze out the non-essential drama from your article and make it a big deal.
Chapter 1
I have heard Xiaomi talk about its two major problems, which are lukewarmness and too much dialogue. I have read a lot of articles... This boy is really poisoned by Japanese anime. However, Xiao He succeeds or fails. It is precisely because he has watched too many anime that Xiaomi has the skillful writing skills and control ability he has today. But I sincerely want to say that there are enough fandoms. If you add more, you will die. It is because the image of the character has been determined through animation, and you have no creativity at all, and you don't have to work hard to make the image of a character more vivid, lifelike, and vivid. That's why the current situation is tepid. Reading your article is like watching a cartoon, always separated by a screen, and there is no sense of involvement. Of all the characters who appear in this first chapter, none of them are impressive. Probably only the sentence at the end, "So is there such a person in our team?" Is touching and makes people feel that this article is alive. Why, probably because this is the only inner monologue.
Looking through so many articles on Xiaomi, I thought carefully about what your problem is for a long time, and then I found a possibility, that is, the speech and behavior of each character are not due to their inner wishes, but because they have already set up this behavior and style, and they handle things in the same way. It really hurts. They are not alive, but puppets. The reader cannot communicate with their souls. You lie on the corpse of the original work without recreating it.
The first chapter is almost a foreshadowing, explaining the cause of the incident, and then the heroine appears.
Chapter 2
So the second chapter is also unfolding? This article starts with two lines, and then they merge together to become the main line. It's just that there are so many dialogues, and this is too ridiculous. The length is already very short, and there are less irrelevant words. I haven't watched Bleach, so I don't know how to interpret the characters as broken, but in fact, Rukia and Ichigo were just chatting, and by the way, let's talk about topics related to the plot. Don't you know that there is something in the world called memories... Something that is really useful in such a large space can actually be covered in three sentences through Ichigo's narration and memories. So you are slow to unfold, you are really slow to unfold. I put this article in my hands. Three chapters can be condensed into one chapter. However, the psychological activities of the characters are still blank. I will not complain about this.
Chapter 3 to Chapter 9
Xiaomi is really used to using language to show his inner activities. This can be regarded as the style of Japanese animation... Finally, the two lines merged into one. When it comes to playing games or whatever, Xiaomi's characteristic is clear organization. I beg you to write an original article. This feeling of revealing the original settings everywhere really makes me feel helpless. Moreover, the language style is also very Japanese-style anime, so it is destined to only attract die-hard anime fans. As the plot develops, there is neither climax nor conflict. No wonder there is no conflict in Xiaomi's copywriting, because there is no such thing in the main text. The heroine is so easy to forget, but she is very calm and can be together, and does not compete for the expectations that come from it. It seems that Xiaomi likes this kind of heroine very much?
Chapter 10 to Chapter 18
Can I say that I read Chapter 10 in a messy way? I really don't know what Xiaomi is talking about if I don't read the original work. All kinds of logical confusions appeared. Then I read Chapter 15 and finally found the logic. Then it was like the end of the theater version. All the truth was revealed and all suspicions turned into positive energy. The whole story is repressed and repressed and then bursts out at the last moment. It can be considered exciting, but few people have the patience to see the end of it. The story is a good one, but if there is a problem, the foreshadowing is too bland. The final ending is really sad. In the end, did the heroine cut off the hero's memory? What's the matter with this kind of sadness?
Extra
I have to say that Xiaomi is very good at handling the emotions between boys and girls, but what happened in the last chapter? ? ? Is this the ultimate cute genre? ? Can you do some more QAQs? Is that okay? !
Overall rating
The opening is 7 points, the transition is 7 points, and the ending is 9 points. A very sad novel, worth reading several times. Although it's a bit messy...
The above is shamelessly presented by the ink-stained bamboo rain of Qiancheng...
= = This is called perfunctory
... Hey, this is called a bad ending
Poor Oni Wujun. . But I won't sympathize with you.
Kindness. . Was he still killed by Ichigo? Will you die if you get stabbed? Sure enough, there is no protagonist halo.
Why do you think the ending and the extra chapter are so heartwarming... Sure enough, it's weird that I'm a bit cruel...
It feels so warm [Hold your chin]
I actually confused the face of Strawberry Boy! ! !
Okay, this kind of extra ending is not very sad.
This time it should be really completed. . . . . . . .
Keep up the good work!
Complete abuse= =I'm here to finish the last chapter
Destroy hahaha~
I watched it again when I had nothing to do, and sure enough, I still found it cruel...
Review of "[Death] Abducting a Strawberry Boy" Cute Xiaomi and Zhuyu like to get straight to the point, so we won't be polite. About the title Is this title meant to be cute? Putting aside the Bleach fan factor, the cuteness is really not enough. But this is a doujin after all, and one of the great advantages of doujin is that as long as the word "Death" is directed at it, fans will probably flock to it. But except for the viewers who are already cute about death, it is difficult to capture the rest of the readership. About copywriting I won't say anything about the previous internal monologue. From a certain perspective, it's okay, but from an eye-catching perspective, it's a lot more problematic. First, there is only entanglement and no conflict. Is that what you want? Second, the information given is too scattered. It's like ten bullets in a gun. You shoot at ten different locations. No one of them is really penetrated. It leaves a deep impression on people. It's not enough to scratch the surface. As for the summary of the story behind it, it must be because I was reading the article on my mobile phone. The first sentence was a bit too long... It took three full lines to end. This is not the point. The point is that the subject matter of this article is really not suitable for the online literature world. Have you seen any book about analyzing the inner world that became very popular in the online literary world? If you are writing the article for the purpose of ratings, I advise you to change the copy and put in the exciting points that people are looking forward to. As the saying goes, changing the soup without changing the medicine, why some super bad movies can achieve ratings has nothing to do with the script, but everything to do with the hype. There are two major strategies for movie promotion. One is to promote the movie itself if the content of the movie is topical. If it is not topical, the movie will be dismembered, either by hyping the director, the actors, or a certain plot. So even if you write a book about analyzing the heart, you must not reveal this in advance, because the current social environment is not interested in this. If you want to make people interested and catch their attention first, you must squeeze out the non-essential drama from your article and make it a big deal. Chapter 1 I have heard Xiaomi talk about its two major problems, which are lukewarmness and too much dialogue. I have read a lot of articles... This boy is really poisoned by Japanese anime. However, Xiao He succeeds or fails. It is precisely because he has watched too many anime that Xiaomi has the skillful writing skills and control ability he has today. But I sincerely want to say that there are enough fandoms. If you add more, you will die. It is because the image of the character has been determined through animation, and you have no creativity at all, and you don't have to work hard to make the image of a character more vivid, lifelike, and vivid. That's why the current situation is tepid. Reading your article is like watching a cartoon, always separated by a screen, and there is no sense of involvement. Of all the characters who appear in this first chapter, none of them are impressive. Probably only the sentence at the end, "So is there such a person in our team?" Is touching and makes people feel that this article is alive. Why, probably because this is the only inner monologue. Looking through so many articles on Xiaomi, I thought carefully about what your problem is for a long time, and then I found a possibility, that is, the speech and behavior of each character are not due to their inner wishes, but because they have already set up this behavior and style, and they handle things in the same way. It really hurts. They are not alive, but puppets. The reader cannot communicate with their souls. You lie on the corpse of the original work without recreating it. The first chapter is almost a foreshadowing, explaining the cause of the incident, and then the heroine appears. Chapter 2 So the second chapter is also unfolding? This article starts with two lines, and then they merge together to become the main line. It's just that there are so many dialogues, and this is too ridiculous. The length is already very short, and there are less irrelevant words. I haven't watched Bleach, so I don't know how to interpret the characters as broken, but in fact, Rukia and Ichigo were just chatting, and by the way, let's talk about topics related to the plot. Don't you know that there is something in the world called memories... Something that is really useful in such a large space can actually be covered in three sentences through Ichigo's narration and memories. So you are slow to unfold, you are really slow to unfold. I put this article in my hands. Three chapters can be condensed into one chapter. However, the psychological activities of the characters are still blank. I will not complain about this. Chapter 3 to Chapter 9 Xiaomi is really used to using language to show his inner activities. This can be regarded as the style of Japanese animation... Finally, the two lines merged into one. When it comes to playing games or whatever, Xiaomi's characteristic is clear organization. I beg you to write an original article. This feeling of revealing the original settings everywhere really makes me feel helpless. Moreover, the language style is also very Japanese-style anime, so it is destined to only attract die-hard anime fans. As the plot develops, there is neither climax nor conflict. No wonder there is no conflict in Xiaomi's copywriting, because there is no such thing in the main text. The heroine is so easy to forget, but she is very calm and can be together, and does not compete for the expectations that come from it. It seems that Xiaomi likes this kind of heroine very much? Chapter 10 to Chapter 18 Can I say that I read Chapter 10 in a messy way? I really don't know what Xiaomi is talking about if I don't read the original work. All kinds of logical confusions appeared. Then I read Chapter 15 and finally found the logic. Then it was like the end of the theater version. All the truth was revealed and all suspicions turned into positive energy. The whole story is repressed and repressed and then bursts out at the last moment. It can be considered exciting, but few people have the patience to see the end of it. The story is a good one, but if there is a problem, the foreshadowing is too bland. The final ending is really sad. In the end, did the heroine cut off the hero's memory? What's the matter with this kind of sadness? Extra I have to say that Xiaomi is very good at handling the emotions between boys and girls, but what happened in the last chapter? ? ? Is this the ultimate cute genre? ? Can you do some more QAQs? Is that okay? ! Overall rating The opening is 7 points, the transition is 7 points, and the ending is 9 points. A very sad novel, worth reading several times. Although it's a bit messy... The above is shamelessly presented by the ink-stained bamboo rain of Qiancheng...
= = This is called perfunctory
... Hey, this is called a bad ending
Poor Oni Wujun. . But I won't sympathize with you.
Kindness. . Was he still killed by Ichigo? Will you die if you get stabbed? Sure enough, there is no protagonist halo.
Why do you think the ending and the extra chapter are so heartwarming... Sure enough, it's weird that I'm a bit cruel...
It feels so warm [Hold your chin]
I actually confused the face of Strawberry Boy! ! ! Okay, this kind of extra ending is not very sad. This time it should be really completed. . . . . . . . Keep up the good work!
Complete abuse= =I'm here to finish the last chapter Destroy hahaha~