Reborn for Revenge

Review of "Rebirth with Revenge" byA Thousand Cities Stained with Ink Stream First of all, I want to apologize to Ye Zi, because I am studying medicine and have exams, so I am very busy. I was supposed to comment within a week, but apparently I was delayed. I'm sorry, dear Ye Zi! ! Title: Although it is a little popular, it highlights the theme, which is revenge, which is very good! Cover: The character material is very interesting, but the font layout is a bit random, and it doesn't seem to match the title. You can try changing it~ Copywriting: I don't think the heroine's husband has much affection for her. Wouldn't it be more appropriate if the words were just "A lonely grave thousands of miles away, and it's desolate everywhere." Beginning: The opening chapter is particularly beautiful! I have to say that Ye Zi's writing style is very good. The environment he renders is like an ink painting, expressive and real. It is cold, scary, and a bit decisive... A long description of the scenery can convey so many meanings. It's awesome! Without good writing skills, it is impossible to write such a feeling. Reading your words, there is an indescribable feeling of comfort. In just one chapter, even though I am not the heroine, Ye Zi did not talk about her past in detail, but I just felt the heroine's stupidity and hatred. Ye Zi, your story-telling ability is simply... In fact, you are a pen fairy, right? ! The opening chapter is very good, but there is still a peacekeeping aspect, that is, the opening line does not seem to fit the plot. In fact, with Ye Zi's writing style, the words can be slightly modified to fit the plot! Storyline: The plot arrangement is not bad, but I feel that the dangerous scenes are not created enough and thrilling enough. And there are so many words, but it seems that there is no real meaning yet Climax In fact, Ye Zi can consider setting a sharper relationship with Huansha and Mu Chun, which involves the setting of Huansha. Please see below - Character settings: Apart from anything else, the setting of the two protagonists seems to be somewhat peaceful. Huansha's setting is very strange. She is obviously disgusted with Mu Chun from the bottom of her heart, and she hates his touch. But how can she pretend so well in front of such a powerful person? Even after experiencing life and death, Huansha in Ye Zi's novel is not the woman who can completely control her emotions, but just a little bit of poor control will reveal her inner disgust. Besides, with Mu Chun's character and awareness, he couldn't detect Huansha's disgust. Is he still the prime minister who can deceive all women? I thought about it, but I really can't explain it. If there is something that cannot be explained about the character, it can only prove that the character has collapsed... So where can leaves start? Xiaoxi, let's talk about Qianjian. Although Huansha has gone through great changes before and came back from the dead, she must hate Mu Chun to the core. But is there a possibility of hatred arising out of love? A. Let's talk about love first. In this case, Huansha has a love-hate relationship with Mu Chun. When she faced Mu Chun's closeness, she felt not only disgusted but also a little more sentimental. In this way, it can not only express the sharp contradiction in Huansha's heart, but also make Mu Chun (I insist that he cannot be unaware of Huansha's disgust for him) become interested in Huansha (disgusted, but also somewhat nostalgic?), And then can't stop wanting Huansha. One is inseparable from love and hate, and the other is unable to stop. Such revenge should be more attractive to readers ~ and it can create suspense: Can Huansha resist her lingering love for Mu Chun and avenge herself and her family? When Mu Chun faced Huansha who couldn't see through it, he still had the taboo Ning Yuan in his heart. What kind of feelings did he have? Do Huansha and Mu Chun fall in love and kill each other, or what? B. Let's talk about lovelessness. If Huansha hates Mu Chun from the bottom of her heart, she has not yet learned how to send and receive feelings freely, and Mu Chun cannot be unaware of it, then how will the two of them get along? If the two are playing a game of mutual suspicion, it should be more able to create a thrilling feeling every step of the way. C. The summary is that Ye Zi's character setting may need to be adjusted slightly~ Final nitpick: 1. Narration - calm and calm words tell the story, but in some places Ye Ye may have used too little pen and ink, or maybe the timing is wrong. For example, in Chang'an Si Ye, why did Huansha have to go to capture the oiran? It was because she was going to Chang'an Si Ye, so why did she go to Chang'an Si Ye? Are there any features there that can help her fulfill her wish? If Ye Zi could have written out the role of Siye in Chang'an when he first mentioned it, then Huansha would have fought tooth and nail for it, and readers would have a stronger sense of involvement, and they would be more looking forward to paying attention to this process! So Ye Ye can pay more attention to this~ 2. Punctuation—— a. Period: Ye Zi rarely uses periods? When writing a novel, it is best to have no more than 8 commas in one sentence, and the sentence should not be too long, otherwise it will affect reading. Without a period, a sentence will be less beautiful. Regarding sentence phrasing, Ye Zi needs to pay some attention~ b. Colon: When a person starts to speak, he must start with a colon and surround the words with quotation marks on both sides. But leaves rarely use colons. Of course, you can also start a sentence with a comma, but usually you can start with a comma when you have already said half of the sentence before, and then add the character's actions or other descriptions, and then continue to speak. For example: "Who is it?" Huansha sat up and asked, paused, and suddenly laughed again, "So it's you." 3. Typos - there are some typos. Starting from the second chapter, there are some minor typos, especially in the later chapters. Ye Zi must remember to find time to catch bugs. For example, Chapter 33: "King Qi... But King Qi said, Your Majesty (it should be "sir", right?) Ji people have their own destiny,..." 4. Chapter 11: "In ten minutes, I will come and take you out." After Moye said that, he turned and left. (Here, it is said that there was no saying of ten minutes in ancient times... But there was a saying of quarter of an hour. A quarter of an hour = 15 minutes, if I remember correctly~)

I don't understand. Isn't the heroine dead? Then who is it now?

The shameless heroine doesn't reflect on herself for her own mistakes. Revenge is right. Shouldn't she hate herself more? She's so mean and disgusting.

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I finished reading it all at once, waiting to gain weight before reading again

The fourth prince should be the last Nanzhu, who tortured this heartless Mu Chun to death

Good-looking and good-looking…

It's getting more and more exciting. Bodhi works hard to code and update soon.

Torture the scumbag to death! Reading this kind of article is like self-abuse~ Big update soon~

Really plain! Why did Mao Jinjiang remove my comments? ! I continue! By the way, I like this story! By the way, I have collected it! Don't swallow my collection! Jinjiang, your home of saints!