Campus in Motion

I'm here to send flowers Bingda seems to have pointed out some shortcomings in the article 8 But since it's an exchange of opinions~~~~~~~~~~I have to say something The rest of the article is still very interesting~~~~~~~~~ Let me tell you my thoughts on the first two chapters The scene description in the whole article is really vague~~~~~~~~ If you want it to be smoother for readers, I think you should explain it when changing scenes. Furthermore, more work should be done on the appearance of the characters~~~~~~~~These are old words again Also, let's talk about He Zihan Boy-like~~~~~~~Dark skin~~~~~~~Short hair~~~~~~~~~~The type who usually talks less This is the first impression she gave me At first I thought she would be a woman-friendly girl~~``a very handsome girl But after looking at it later, I realized that she is a bit introverted~~~she prefers to be alone with her thoughts~~~~she should be a more traditional person 8 But this is also in line with the original setting~~~~~~If you are introverted and handsome, others will still think it is cool~~~~~~~~~~~It is just that you have become a girl~~~~~~~~~I no longer feel like a boy. But later~~~~~~when I met Leng Ning~~~~~I met He Zihan who was a bit different~~~~~~How should I put it~~~~~~~ She was a bit squeamish about a little woman Finally, I gave him a bracelet~~~~~~~~it just made me lively. . . . . . . . See you guys again at 8. . . . . . . . 8~~~~~~~~~~~~8 . . . . . . . Having said so much~~~~~~I feel like I am just nitpicking 8 Anyway, there are still a lot of flowers~~~~~~~~~~~You are right, adults, don't argue with me I will continue to read the following articles~~~~~~~~If I have any ideas, I will ask adults for advice Come on

Although the articles I write are not good, I have read a lot of campus articles. The adult story is very scattered and bland. This is not a problem. If it is handled well, it will still look good. It's just that the characters in the adult novels don't have very distinct personalities and are not very likable. The scene changes are also a bit abrupt. Even some of the dialogues feel weird. The descriptions are a bit like the compositions I wrote before. In short, I can't explain it clearly in a few words. If the adults are not angry, I will come and see it when I have time. My personal opinion, please forgive me.

Faint to death Don't know what to write

Well... What's going on with Zhou Xiao and the heroine... Don't understand Maybe I didn't read carefully, but it's better to understand more clearly. In fact, it turns out that the heroine's name is He Bai, right? That's a good name Either change it to a more beautiful name, or keep it simple. My current name... Feels a bit vulgar But this is purely a personal opinion...

I like criticism, and I like bricks even more. Please give me your advice.

I think a more normal tone should be used. It seems that there are no big ups and downs. And it looks like there are really many people dancing here. This easily distracts from the main line.

Why is the word count so small?

Please revise the beginning of this chapter! I don't like girls coming and going again!

Xinxin, (you don't mind if I call you that?), Isn't that female pig of yours a bit too mature? Can a girl who is only a teenager and had low self-esteem before get rid of the shadow of low self-esteem and mature into that? Suspect…

Xinxin, (that... Is it okay to call her that?) Is your female pig too mature? He doesn't look like a teenager at all. And can a girl who used to have low self-esteem mature to such a point?