[Alternate Universe] Yesterday Is Gone

As a side comment, I would like to briefly express my views on this article. Please don't mind the harsh words. It's all my fault (kneel down) TAT. The author's writing style is concise and not cumbersome, and the story is told naturally. But there are some problems that I don't know if the author himself is aware of. Your article is not three-dimensional enough to give others the feeling of being there and fully feeling the mood of the characters. This may be a problem of experience and lack of experience in various aspects. The places that should be more complicated are described in an understatement, which only gives people a deep impression. If the subsequent articles happen to be connected in series, there will be a sense of space jumping and discontinuity. In my opinion, the girl's writing style may be more suitable for writing modern or fantasy. At first glance, it may seem full of ancient flavor, but upon closer inspection, it loses some charm. Where ancient words should be used, it is expressed in vernacular, which means it lacks cultural heritage. There are many descriptions of dialogues, and they can fully express the emotions of the characters, but is there a lack of description of the environment? Just like in middle school Chinese language test questions, the description of the environment can often exaggerate the mood of the characters and make people more immersed in the situation. Doesn't it make up for the girl's lack of three-dimensional sense? Regarding the setting, I actually don't quite accept it. Maybe I'm too impressed with the Three Kingdoms in history? As I read it, I couldn't help but get drawn into OTZ. As for the heroine, she was overly favored by the emperor from the beginning, and the favor was even a little unreal╮(╯▽╰)╭. Although I don't deny that there may indeed be such a loving father, but if such a father is the emperor... It feels a bit like Su. I remember the heroine was said to be willful all her life at the end? This sentence... Doesn't feel right. Is she really willful about love? At least in my opinion, the majority of people are tolerant╮(╯▽╰)╭ As for the male protagonist, I don't think he loves the female protagonist. At least on the surface, I don't know whether he is using the female protagonist at all. Since he is a heartless man (ahem), he must be more ruthless. The female protagonist does not seem to be very distressed. I am a little confused, or am I not understanding enough? Anyway, I don't really like the male protagonist, really. The love that is endured under responsibility can also make people empathize with it (ah, the male protagonist is so pitiful, he can't help himself), you want people to feel this way. Regarding the heroine's father, I didn't see some of the qualities that an emperor should have. He doted on his daughter, eh, but he was also said to be suspicious and seriously ill. Well, in theory, it seemed very harmonious, but from the inside out, I felt that everything shouldn't be like this, ah Kou Hu [Throwing the table, I felt that the qualities conflicted in various ways, at least emotionally. All the venomous remarks are due to my recent bad mood. I am actually a soft girl! Daggy, look at my nameRolling [Wochao Changping Shop] Produced by Toffee

Hello, the rain is also lingering. I am very happy to leave a long comment on your article. At the beginning of the article, the court discussed an issue about relief for the victims, and the method of calling on wealthy households to donate money aroused my interest. The meaning of the article is that when dealing with wealthy families who are unwilling to donate, first rob their wealth and create an established fact, so that they suffer a dumb loss; then create public opinion, through the people's thanks, the emperor gives them a plaque, and increases their reputation among the people and the government as compensation. It's a method of adding red dates and big sticks. I don't know if I'm right? I personally also thought of a way, that is, to directly raid their homes and accuse them of collaborating with the enemy and betraying the country. There is no need to be too lenient with them, because as a feudal country, the foundation of the country is agriculture, and what is to be developed is the small-scale peasant economy. The development of these large households will intensify land annexation and hinder the development of national taxation, so it is necessary to appropriately restrain it. There is no need to kill them all, just leave some of them and they will naturally be obedient. But this seems too cruel. Now let's get back to the topic. The author writes about the desire for power and the insistence on responsibility that destroys a love. At the beginning, when writing about the affairs of the court, we were shown a talented and smart Princess Xuan Ge. The tacit understanding between her and the prime minister Yu Ning in white also made us turn our attention to this good young master. After that, the two went out to the palace to travel together, and they were deeply in love. They were indeed a match made in heaven. But at the same time, I also smelled a different atmosphere, suggesting that their relationship was rough. Sure enough, the manipulator of the proposal appeared. After reading it and thinking about it carefully, Wei Guo's proposal was so confident that there was indeed something fishy about it. This naturally leads to the marriage between Xuan Ning. I don't understand. Later, the author also said that two emperors could rule together. What's there to worry about? The emperor only has this daughter. To be honest, it is more conducive for the emperor to rule and consolidate the political power than the empress ascending the throne. Furthermore, Yu Ning is indeed capable. The most important thing is that she loves him, that's fine. Xuan Ge may not be unable to give up her rights. It can be seen from the later chapters that Emperor Shu was a very affectionate person. I believe that as long as his daughter lives a good life, after his death, the world will not care at all whose surname is. HE is within reach. Then I discovered that the focus of the debate was not the marriage (which was finally approved), but the male protagonist Yu Ning's undue love. When the male protagonist finally agreed (I can't think of a reason why he wouldn't agree), the two countries were about to go to war because of the marriage. I thought the male protagonist was raising a flag at the end of Chapter 2, but I didn't expect there would be something even more ruthless. The male protagonist is actually the second prince of an enemy country, and he united with Qi and Wei to destroy the Han Dynasty. I suspect that the proposal was also made by him (the author once again made me no longer believe in love). The princess who lost her country naturally has no reason to live. Even if she loves this man again, she will not be aggrieved to save her love. She has the responsibility of a princess - to commit suicide for her country. (Think of Hua Xu cited ==) I think Xuan Ge did nothing wrong. When a person lives in the world, there are always many things to bear, and he cannot abandon them for his own selfishness. Secondly, I feel that no matter how they fall in love, there are always flaws in their love. Can you forget the revenge of killing your father? Faced with the community of enemies and lovers, I don't think Xuan Ge will be in pain every moment, so it is better to end it early and end it happily. But what happened to the male protagonist? Is his brain broken? I didn't see where he was helpless. He was obviously driven by desire, but he still couldn't figure it out. There was obviously a better choice in front of him before, so why did he let it go. If the author hadn't said that they really loved each other, I couldn't help but wonder if he was sincere in the first place. Do you regret it now? What's the use? The article describes emotions like a trickling stream, but also contains hidden waves. I feel that the story is still unfinished. If it were written as a novella, it might allow readers to have a deeper understanding of what the author wants to express. The short story is actually limited in content and cannot fully express the characters and plot. Although the use of ancient proverbs is intentional, it is not novel enough and the rendering power is not enough. The use of words and sentences should be carefully considered. Sometimes improper wording of sentences is harmful to the meaning of the text and can cause discomfort to readers. You can read more famous works to deepen your understanding of the use of words, or write more and read your own articles as Ouyang Xiu said, and mistakes will naturally be revealed. The above are some of my humble opinions, I hope you won't be offended. I look forward to more outstanding and touching articles coming out from Lingmeng, and I hope that my creative journey will become wider and wider. I also hope to come and play in the shop often. 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