Turns out there's no limit to how unlucky someone can get! I went mountain climbing and got buried in an avalanche.
After being flash-frozen for more than three thousand years, my luck finally changed. I got upgraded genes, a smart assistant thrown in, and room and board while I went to school! This sounds way too good to be true. Is there some kind of catch?!
Wait, why are all the people around me handsome guys? What?! In the future, there are fewer than one female for every hundred men?!
Um, I really do owe a lot for my education, food, and genetic upgrades, but do I really have to pay it off by selling myself? Can I get a discount~~~~ Cough, cough. Handsome creditor, I'm not strong enough to take on assassins and the like~~!
What a rip-off! I'm strong by day, but turn back into a good-for-nothing at night. Even the genetic upgrade came with a discount!
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Congratulations on the completion! ! ! (When did I forget this? I really have a bad memory.)
Let me talk about my views on this article. The author has a very comprehensive world view, and it can be seen that some small details are all thought out by himself.
I think the author must have thought about the worldview for a long time before it was so perfect^3^
The logic of some major aspects is relatively comprehensive, and there are basically no major loopholes.
The writing is also good and has its own unique style. Come on!
The three-dimensional architecture described through text is also relatively comprehensive.
But perhaps because it was my first time writing, the personalities and characteristics of many characters were not reflected, and the characters were somewhat superficial.
As for the protagonist, he should be the one with the most descriptions, but Xiao Yue's character is really too diverse. For example, he likes to be cute, relatively dull, a bit irritable, always in trouble, has no long memory, no sense of crisis, is unreliable at critical moments, is indiscriminately soft-hearted, likes to be independent, but also loves to be dependent, and is selective in his newfound skills.
The only two features that he thinks are special are the golden fingers for converting batteries and the big dark eyes.
And as far as Xiaoyue is concerned, one of the shortcomings of the author is that the author did not write clearly the logic of the character settings...
For example, Xiaoyue's golden fingers are one that converts batteries and can be used as a savings pool (this can be seen from the increase in mental level caused by using a large amount of fluorite), and the other is mental defense, or a shield or something, which is the golden finger that appeared at the beginning to shield or invalidate other people's mental power. However, this golden finger was not made clear at all in the later stage, and it felt like it was being ignored. Many fighting scenes can be used completely, but there is always a feeling that this has been selectively forgotten in order to create a new plot.
In addition, it is recommended that the author try to figure out the psychological characteristics of the characters. For example, Elian, when he first appears, including the early stage, is facially paralyzed, cool and rarely talks, very calm and majestic. Because of his miserable life experience and the importance of his identity, he has a lot of responsibility and looks low-key and planning. However, it changes too quickly later on and basically turns into sweet-talking, a bit chatty, and likes to tease. He loses his cool easily, is passionate, has no dignity, and his life experience and responsibility seem to be diluted by love.
The two protagonists are a bit out of shape. In the early stage, the characters were relatively accurate. Starting from a year after the confession failed and they deliberately separated, the characters gradually went out of shape. TUT…
There are basically no flaws in the early settings, but there are too many flaws in the later fighting scenes and conspiracy scenes. I don't know if it's because of the serialization that the author didn't think about it carefully.
From the fighting scenes, it can be seen that the author wanted to describe a wonderful and compact scene that highlights the importance of the protagonist, but in reality it seems that the enemy is very strong → the protagonist is soft-hearted → misses the opportunity to counterattack or pre-emptively → suffers from various misfortunes → suddenly becomes domineering → the powerful enemy suddenly becomes a passerby.
You really need to think clearly about conspiracy dramas, otherwise you will always feel like you are lowering your IQ when watching it.
In general, I loved it in the early stages and could not tell that I was a novice at all, but a lot of the processing in the middle and later stages revealed that I was a novice, and my love for the game slowly went down with the loopholes.
The author loves silly jokes (the world view setting is obviously very novel).
Take a loophole for example. At the beginning, it is said that mental power is better than physical skills, especially mutated mental power. However, later it is said that mental power is useless. Using a machine to change from S-level mental power to S-level physical skills is regarded as a point in the dark demon world. Is there any problem with this = = I don't understand. After reading the article, I found that mental power is divided into three types: comfort and treatment, defensive isolation, and attack operation. Since there is aggression, does it make sense to use S mental power to S-level physical skills to enter the dark demon world?
There is also a loophole. When the protagonist was practicing boxing in the early stage, he basically didn't use his mental power due to his stable emotions. Then he used physical skills to hit more than 100, and after using the mental power to mobilize his mental power, he hit more than 900. So it's the telekinesis attached to the fist that makes it so powerful, right? The protagonist also had a force field that neutralized mental power before. In the middle period, after absorbing the fluorite force field, it expanded to a circle of 1M or 2M. But in the middle and later stages, the enemies who had the mental power to attack the protagonists were not dealt with by the golden finger of the protagonist.
In addition, this also involves a loophole, that is, mental power can be attached to objects and cause actual physical damage. It can also be used to climb mountains or be used as mats, and it can also be torn off by insects. This means that mental power is not only spiritual, but can also be embodied, right? So why not use mental defense? Just like the protagonist's golden finger, the position of neutralizing or defending mental power can be used as a physical defensive shield. Why do you always get so cruel by K = =.
In addition, as far as mental power is concerned, mental power itself can attack enemies that are lower than its own mental power level, right? Those enemies who only have S-level physical skills without using mental power can destroy their brains one by one. For example, the mental power of Xiao Yue and Elian is originally of the attack operation system, so whether it is embodied or spiritualized (isn't the spiritualized brainwave that exists in oneself) feasible?
This is just like someone with level S physical skills can definitely suppress someone with level E physical skills.
That's probably all I can think of...
Having said all this, I hope the author can see it and really make progress.
To be honest, I was really attracted to it in the early stages, but it was too loose in the middle and later stages! I'm a little disappointed, I hope the next one will be better, I think you have the potential to become a great master.
I am someone who doesn't buy V for high-quality products (although this approach is more NC = =), but I hope the author will make progress and let me buy your V! !
First of all, this article feels very relaxed, warm, a little cute, but not white, and very loving. Cai's writing style is very good and has his own unique style. Each author has a different way of expressing himself (it's very different from me. I used to mostly read ancient Chinese and write ancient Chinese, haha~~so it really felt like I was watching a Hollywood science fiction blockbuster, hehe~~) - so I was very shocked to find that the science fiction articles I wrote looked like ancient Chinese prose, ahhhhhhh...
Let's get back to the subject: Secondly, the plot is very good. From the perspective of Dongyue's change of fortune after being buried alive and frozen for three thousand years, this setting is quite exciting. The two protagonists meet, get to know each other, and finally come together. Such pure emotions are an eternal topic. The warm style seems a bit bland. It would be better if there was a little passion. (Personal opinion)
There are also various settings that are quite novel. What impressed me most is the three-dimensional printing. Printing various items is a very cute thing when you think about it. This is more vivid than Doraemon, haha~~
What the author wants to express is also very profound, "If a person suddenly finds that he has no law, morality, conscience... Without all restraints, what will this person become?" This is human nature. When a person reaches the top, he will want to possess more, and greed will never end. This is "heaven" people. The people in heaven claim to be gods. They may have "godly" technology but not the tolerant heart of gods, so they can only be tyrannical dictators.
Therefore, a check and balance is needed. This is the function of the protagonist, so the "Devil World" was created in an attempt to return the world to normal. This also means that war in human nature will always exist, no matter in which world it is.
Let's talk about the shortcomings:
I think it would be better if the characters were portrayed more fully, especially for the two protagonists, Yu Dongyue is okay, I think he is quite cute and cute. Elian, on the other hand, didn't impress me.
Also, although the plot is good, it's a bit bland and doesn't have that powerful, hit-and-miss impact. (This may be because the author's handling of the plot is not mature enough, but there is no problem with the writing style.)
However, when I saw Yu Dongyue's accident later, I was still a little entangled, and my heart was slightly shocked. (It seems that I am not too cruel~~sweat~~~)
It was so cute to see Yu Dongyue turn into a calf, and the part where he was carrying a nuclear bomb, hahahaha. I like buffaloes and think they are very cute, so I secretly imagined Xiao Yue as a little buffalo, hehehehe...
Another person thinks that in the main text, Yu Dongyue should be transformed back to be more perfect. It would be better to have a wedding by the way, haha. Anyway, this article looks relaxed and joyful, which makes it even more joyful. (But if Elian had a wedding with a calf... Hahahaha~~~)
(Finally, I want to say: Please forgive my reading speed of six lines at a glance. I am very busy at the moment. Except for revising a few chapters of the new article, I have no time to read and I am not in the mood to read. So this long review should be - Parallel import, ~~You take a picture of me, and I will be a Xiaoqiang~~Ouch, you bite me~~~)
Last but not least: There was a guy named Wells in an article I read last time. Pursuit of profit is his biggest nature, so I feel a little sweaty when I see this name here
Also: I finally got a thousand words, oh
It's amazing how it ended before I even changed back to my body. Although I will change back in the extra chapter, I still feel awkward saying...
Elian exists for the sake of the marriage and family harmony of our ancestors [The fog...
Xiaoyue's face is so girly, but she's still pretty good.
My comment was swallowed yesterday (ㄒoㄒ)
Black line...
In fact, I think typing with hooves on the keyboard is better than writing. After all, there are differences in the difficulty of the movements.
Think of a cow sitting on its butt on the ground with its front hooves BALABALA typing on the keyboard...
Congratulations on the completion! ! ! (When did I forget this? I really have a bad memory.)
Let me talk about my views on this article. The author has a very comprehensive world view, and it can be seen that some small details are all thought out by himself. I think the author must have thought about the worldview for a long time before it was so perfect^3^ The logic of some major aspects is relatively comprehensive, and there are basically no major loopholes. The writing is also good and has its own unique style. Come on! The three-dimensional architecture described through text is also relatively comprehensive. But perhaps because it was my first time writing, the personalities and characteristics of many characters were not reflected, and the characters were somewhat superficial. As for the protagonist, he should be the one with the most descriptions, but Xiao Yue's character is really too diverse. For example, he likes to be cute, relatively dull, a bit irritable, always in trouble, has no long memory, no sense of crisis, is unreliable at critical moments, is indiscriminately soft-hearted, likes to be independent, but also loves to be dependent, and is selective in his newfound skills. The only two features that he thinks are special are the golden fingers for converting batteries and the big dark eyes. And as far as Xiaoyue is concerned, one of the shortcomings of the author is that the author did not write clearly the logic of the character settings... For example, Xiaoyue's golden fingers are one that converts batteries and can be used as a savings pool (this can be seen from the increase in mental level caused by using a large amount of fluorite), and the other is mental defense, or a shield or something, which is the golden finger that appeared at the beginning to shield or invalidate other people's mental power. However, this golden finger was not made clear at all in the later stage, and it felt like it was being ignored. Many fighting scenes can be used completely, but there is always a feeling that this has been selectively forgotten in order to create a new plot. In addition, it is recommended that the author try to figure out the psychological characteristics of the characters. For example, Elian, when he first appears, including the early stage, is facially paralyzed, cool and rarely talks, very calm and majestic. Because of his miserable life experience and the importance of his identity, he has a lot of responsibility and looks low-key and planning. However, it changes too quickly later on and basically turns into sweet-talking, a bit chatty, and likes to tease. He loses his cool easily, is passionate, has no dignity, and his life experience and responsibility seem to be diluted by love. The two protagonists are a bit out of shape. In the early stage, the characters were relatively accurate. Starting from a year after the confession failed and they deliberately separated, the characters gradually went out of shape. TUT… There are basically no flaws in the early settings, but there are too many flaws in the later fighting scenes and conspiracy scenes. I don't know if it's because of the serialization that the author didn't think about it carefully. From the fighting scenes, it can be seen that the author wanted to describe a wonderful and compact scene that highlights the importance of the protagonist, but in reality it seems that the enemy is very strong → the protagonist is soft-hearted → misses the opportunity to counterattack or pre-emptively → suffers from various misfortunes → suddenly becomes domineering → the powerful enemy suddenly becomes a passerby. You really need to think clearly about conspiracy dramas, otherwise you will always feel like you are lowering your IQ when watching it. In general, I loved it in the early stages and could not tell that I was a novice at all, but a lot of the processing in the middle and later stages revealed that I was a novice, and my love for the game slowly went down with the loopholes. The author loves silly jokes (the world view setting is obviously very novel). Take a loophole for example. At the beginning, it is said that mental power is better than physical skills, especially mutated mental power. However, later it is said that mental power is useless. Using a machine to change from S-level mental power to S-level physical skills is regarded as a point in the dark demon world. Is there any problem with this = = I don't understand. After reading the article, I found that mental power is divided into three types: comfort and treatment, defensive isolation, and attack operation. Since there is aggression, does it make sense to use S mental power to S-level physical skills to enter the dark demon world? There is also a loophole. When the protagonist was practicing boxing in the early stage, he basically didn't use his mental power due to his stable emotions. Then he used physical skills to hit more than 100, and after using the mental power to mobilize his mental power, he hit more than 900. So it's the telekinesis attached to the fist that makes it so powerful, right? The protagonist also had a force field that neutralized mental power before. In the middle period, after absorbing the fluorite force field, it expanded to a circle of 1M or 2M. But in the middle and later stages, the enemies who had the mental power to attack the protagonists were not dealt with by the golden finger of the protagonist. In addition, this also involves a loophole, that is, mental power can be attached to objects and cause actual physical damage. It can also be used to climb mountains or be used as mats, and it can also be torn off by insects. This means that mental power is not only spiritual, but can also be embodied, right? So why not use mental defense? Just like the protagonist's golden finger, the position of neutralizing or defending mental power can be used as a physical defensive shield. Why do you always get so cruel by K = =. In addition, as far as mental power is concerned, mental power itself can attack enemies that are lower than its own mental power level, right? Those enemies who only have S-level physical skills without using mental power can destroy their brains one by one. For example, the mental power of Xiao Yue and Elian is originally of the attack operation system, so whether it is embodied or spiritualized (isn't the spiritualized brainwave that exists in oneself) feasible? This is just like someone with level S physical skills can definitely suppress someone with level E physical skills. That's probably all I can think of... Having said all this, I hope the author can see it and really make progress. To be honest, I was really attracted to it in the early stages, but it was too loose in the middle and later stages! I'm a little disappointed, I hope the next one will be better, I think you have the potential to become a great master. I am someone who doesn't buy V for high-quality products (although this approach is more NC = =), but I hope the author will make progress and let me buy your V! !
First of all, this article feels very relaxed, warm, a little cute, but not white, and very loving. Cai's writing style is very good and has his own unique style. Each author has a different way of expressing himself (it's very different from me. I used to mostly read ancient Chinese and write ancient Chinese, haha~~so it really felt like I was watching a Hollywood science fiction blockbuster, hehe~~) - so I was very shocked to find that the science fiction articles I wrote looked like ancient Chinese prose, ahhhhhhh... Let's get back to the subject: Secondly, the plot is very good. From the perspective of Dongyue's change of fortune after being buried alive and frozen for three thousand years, this setting is quite exciting. The two protagonists meet, get to know each other, and finally come together. Such pure emotions are an eternal topic. The warm style seems a bit bland. It would be better if there was a little passion. (Personal opinion) There are also various settings that are quite novel. What impressed me most is the three-dimensional printing. Printing various items is a very cute thing when you think about it. This is more vivid than Doraemon, haha~~ What the author wants to express is also very profound, "If a person suddenly finds that he has no law, morality, conscience... Without all restraints, what will this person become?" This is human nature. When a person reaches the top, he will want to possess more, and greed will never end. This is "heaven" people. The people in heaven claim to be gods. They may have "godly" technology but not the tolerant heart of gods, so they can only be tyrannical dictators. Therefore, a check and balance is needed. This is the function of the protagonist, so the "Devil World" was created in an attempt to return the world to normal. This also means that war in human nature will always exist, no matter in which world it is. Let's talk about the shortcomings: I think it would be better if the characters were portrayed more fully, especially for the two protagonists, Yu Dongyue is okay, I think he is quite cute and cute. Elian, on the other hand, didn't impress me. Also, although the plot is good, it's a bit bland and doesn't have that powerful, hit-and-miss impact. (This may be because the author's handling of the plot is not mature enough, but there is no problem with the writing style.) However, when I saw Yu Dongyue's accident later, I was still a little entangled, and my heart was slightly shocked. (It seems that I am not too cruel~~sweat~~~) It was so cute to see Yu Dongyue turn into a calf, and the part where he was carrying a nuclear bomb, hahahaha. I like buffaloes and think they are very cute, so I secretly imagined Xiao Yue as a little buffalo, hehehehe... Another person thinks that in the main text, Yu Dongyue should be transformed back to be more perfect. It would be better to have a wedding by the way, haha. Anyway, this article looks relaxed and joyful, which makes it even more joyful. (But if Elian had a wedding with a calf... Hahahaha~~~) (Finally, I want to say: Please forgive my reading speed of six lines at a glance. I am very busy at the moment. Except for revising a few chapters of the new article, I have no time to read and I am not in the mood to read. So this long review should be - Parallel import, ~~You take a picture of me, and I will be a Xiaoqiang~~Ouch, you bite me~~~) Last but not least: There was a guy named Wells in an article I read last time. Pursuit of profit is his biggest nature, so I feel a little sweaty when I see this name here Also: I finally got a thousand words, oh
It's amazing how it ended before I even changed back to my body. Although I will change back in the extra chapter, I still feel awkward saying... Elian exists for the sake of the marriage and family harmony of our ancestors [The fog...
Xiaoyue's face is so girly, but she's still pretty good.
My comment was swallowed yesterday (ㄒoㄒ)
Black line... In fact, I think typing with hooves on the keyboard is better than writing. After all, there are differences in the difficulty of the movements. Think of a cow sitting on its butt on the ground with its front hooves BALABALA typing on the keyboard...
Well written, keep up the good work...
This development (⊙o⊙)…
Sure enough, age makes people pervert.