In harem novels, there is a certain kind of person: they lack the protagonist's radiance and serve as a foil to the lead.
Their only purpose is to pave the way for the protagonist's success. The men become his underlings, while the women join his harem.
But what if one day, the supporting characters wake up?
Will they still willingly sacrifice themselves for the protagonist?
This is a serious, plot-driven story. I'm a new writer, so I hope you'll show your support!
My new novel is a serious suspenseful Sword and Fairy fanfic, The World as a Chessboard. I can't figure out how to post a link, so here's the URL: http://www.jjwxc.net/onebook.php?novelid=1740110
Please show it lots of support~
Everyone, come check out my new novel. It's so cold out here, QAQ
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Surprisingly, I think it's very cute~ It's different from the usual follow-up novels with themes like Jinjiang. The characteristics of the stallion are very distinct~ Thirty-two likes~
Okay, I know it's a little late to comment now, but the main reason is that I just saw this article now. I originally wanted not to comment, but I just couldn't help but complain. Anyway, the author probably won't come back to read the comments, so let me vent my anger. If the author sees it, give me a TAT.
First of all, I really can't tell whether this is the main story or the main story, but the characters of both characters seem not very full. Well, this is not even my shortcomings. The shortcomings are as follows:
At the beginning, where was An and Long's relationship development? I thought I was going to see them develop JQ, but as soon as I opened and closed my eyes, they completed their development. Could it be that they were shy and didn't want us to see it? Sweat... I think the author could describe more details when they were in school, otherwise it would really make people feel uncomfortable.
Personally, I feel that the author's logic is not very strict, and sometimes it doesn't match up well. For example, in that door, wasn't An injured while trying to save the dragon? The entity was also injured, which was quite serious. But when the dragon came out, An actually had nothing to worry about. Khan, it was really amazing. And when he was confessing, didn't Long say he didn't want power and only wanted a loving wife and beautiful family? But didn't he say before that he wanted to marry a princess to increase his power? Also in the fantasy world, don't say that he loves the princess, doesn't he repeatedly emphasize that he doesn't love the princess?
The strength of Long and An should be described, and the process can also be written. I didn't think they were that powerful before, but it felt so unexpected to start fighting the big boss all of a sudden. There are a lot of characters, but I can't remember them all, it's too confusing. It feels like everyone is a supporting role, and they all end up being just secondary characters. In fact, you don't need to write so much about the BOSS level, but you should try to make each character more fleshed out, otherwise it will feel confusing and confusing.
Long said that he treated An differently from those other princesses (by the way, who is Lily? The female cannon fodder should show her face at least), but he really didn't see it. At most, they just like them. Hey, when An Zai and Long Dai were so nervous in the fantasy world, they were not jealous. But Long's jealousy in the demon world was too inexplicable. Especially in the fantasy world, An actually let it go like this. After all, they expressed their feelings to each other, but they just let it go. Could it be that An just wanted to be one of the harem? Or is it too holy? But having said that, they are still two straight men after all. One has so many girls, and the other is an ascetic saint. It is too easy to express feelings for each other. I don't think about it at all. Isn't it awkward? Later, when An went to crash the wedding, it was too abrupt. But Long is really a scumbag. Does An really find it interesting to restrain Long in that way? Okay, I have emotional mysophobia...
Why were you naked when you were in the river of time? Besides, An could change clothes and wake up before the dragon. Why not wear clothes? Isn't it just for sex and seduction?
Well, I also feel that the spell is too long, and there is a suspicion of trying to make up the word count (the watch tells me that I am really trying to make up the word count!). In fact, I just need to write a name. There is also the God of Light and other things. I mentioned it before, and just write the name directly at the end. There is no need to add a prefix, which feels very wordy.
In fact, the author has written a lot of good things, the battles and the like are pretty good, and the writing is pretty good. Anyway, I won't praise the author if it's good. After all, I'm just here to complain, (*^__^*). The author's story should be a very large structure, but if it is written in so few words, it will develop too fast, the plot will be incomplete, and the logic will be confusing. If you want to write, it is recommended to have more words, otherwise the structure should be smaller. Otherwise it would be really frustrating to watch!
Well, the above are just personal opinions, and the logic is a bit confusing. If the author sees it, please feel free to... (Click lightly, ~~~~(>_<)~~~~)
Keep up the good work and hope to see better works from you!
Sure enough, I still love it.
Hmm, is it really over?
Please ask for extras, please ask for meat, and please defeat various gods~
Please add more food, please add more food, please add more food, please add more food, please add more food, please add more food, please add more food, please add more food, please add more food, please add more food, please add more food, please add more food, please add more food, please add more food, please add more food.
I forgive you so quickly. . . .
This kind of horse is stupid and useless. It looks like a supporting role... Look at the sky
Damn it! Although the author explained a lot, he still couldn't change the emotional flaws. Whether it's a loyal dog or a scumbag, the turn is very stiff, making the whole article not very smooth to read. Not bad, rich plot
I want to read the story of Fra and Letea
Madam, do you still have any locked chapters?
So warm
Surprisingly, I think it's very cute~ It's different from the usual follow-up novels with themes like Jinjiang. The characteristics of the stallion are very distinct~ Thirty-two likes~
Okay, I know it's a little late to comment now, but the main reason is that I just saw this article now. I originally wanted not to comment, but I just couldn't help but complain. Anyway, the author probably won't come back to read the comments, so let me vent my anger. If the author sees it, give me a TAT. First of all, I really can't tell whether this is the main story or the main story, but the characters of both characters seem not very full. Well, this is not even my shortcomings. The shortcomings are as follows: At the beginning, where was An and Long's relationship development? I thought I was going to see them develop JQ, but as soon as I opened and closed my eyes, they completed their development. Could it be that they were shy and didn't want us to see it? Sweat... I think the author could describe more details when they were in school, otherwise it would really make people feel uncomfortable. Personally, I feel that the author's logic is not very strict, and sometimes it doesn't match up well. For example, in that door, wasn't An injured while trying to save the dragon? The entity was also injured, which was quite serious. But when the dragon came out, An actually had nothing to worry about. Khan, it was really amazing. And when he was confessing, didn't Long say he didn't want power and only wanted a loving wife and beautiful family? But didn't he say before that he wanted to marry a princess to increase his power? Also in the fantasy world, don't say that he loves the princess, doesn't he repeatedly emphasize that he doesn't love the princess? The strength of Long and An should be described, and the process can also be written. I didn't think they were that powerful before, but it felt so unexpected to start fighting the big boss all of a sudden. There are a lot of characters, but I can't remember them all, it's too confusing. It feels like everyone is a supporting role, and they all end up being just secondary characters. In fact, you don't need to write so much about the BOSS level, but you should try to make each character more fleshed out, otherwise it will feel confusing and confusing. Long said that he treated An differently from those other princesses (by the way, who is Lily? The female cannon fodder should show her face at least), but he really didn't see it. At most, they just like them. Hey, when An Zai and Long Dai were so nervous in the fantasy world, they were not jealous. But Long's jealousy in the demon world was too inexplicable. Especially in the fantasy world, An actually let it go like this. After all, they expressed their feelings to each other, but they just let it go. Could it be that An just wanted to be one of the harem? Or is it too holy? But having said that, they are still two straight men after all. One has so many girls, and the other is an ascetic saint. It is too easy to express feelings for each other. I don't think about it at all. Isn't it awkward? Later, when An went to crash the wedding, it was too abrupt. But Long is really a scumbag. Does An really find it interesting to restrain Long in that way? Okay, I have emotional mysophobia... Why were you naked when you were in the river of time? Besides, An could change clothes and wake up before the dragon. Why not wear clothes? Isn't it just for sex and seduction? Well, I also feel that the spell is too long, and there is a suspicion of trying to make up the word count (the watch tells me that I am really trying to make up the word count!). In fact, I just need to write a name. There is also the God of Light and other things. I mentioned it before, and just write the name directly at the end. There is no need to add a prefix, which feels very wordy. In fact, the author has written a lot of good things, the battles and the like are pretty good, and the writing is pretty good. Anyway, I won't praise the author if it's good. After all, I'm just here to complain, (*^__^*). The author's story should be a very large structure, but if it is written in so few words, it will develop too fast, the plot will be incomplete, and the logic will be confusing. If you want to write, it is recommended to have more words, otherwise the structure should be smaller. Otherwise it would be really frustrating to watch! Well, the above are just personal opinions, and the logic is a bit confusing. If the author sees it, please feel free to... (Click lightly, ~~~~(>_<)~~~~) Keep up the good work and hope to see better works from you!
Sure enough, I still love it.
Hmm, is it really over? Please ask for extras, please ask for meat, and please defeat various gods~ Please add more food, please add more food, please add more food, please add more food, please add more food, please add more food, please add more food, please add more food, please add more food, please add more food, please add more food, please add more food, please add more food, please add more food, please add more food.
I forgive you so quickly. . . .
This kind of horse is stupid and useless. It looks like a supporting role... Look at the sky
Damn it! Although the author explained a lot, he still couldn't change the emotional flaws. Whether it's a loyal dog or a scumbag, the turn is very stiff, making the whole article not very smooth to read. Not bad, rich plot