[Nura: Rise of the Yokai Clan] Fleeting Life

So in the end, did Rikuo and Kurihara get together?

Do you think Kurihara's Zanpakuto is a Koiban?

I don't understand the final outcome

Natsume Reiko. . . As expected, it was Grandma Reiko from Natsume's friend's tent who broke in.

Comment on "[The Master Slippery] Floating Life" - Qiao You I've seen Death and the Slippery Ghost here, and I like them both. When I saw the setting of Da Da Da's fan fiction in which a death girl came to the world of slick ghosts, I thought it was very fresh. If this setting was also a surprise in Da Da Da's eyes, then I successfully avoided it haha ​​[Long live Rambo, long live beef rice. In the main story, the heroine Hinoban Kurihara is the daughter of Toshiro. The text always emphasizes that Kurihara is two genius children. A genius is undoubtedly Toshiro. He became a captain at the age of ten. His Zanpakutō is a rare ice type and is known as the most powerful Zanpakutō in Soul Society. But... Dad never said who his wife was. Is this intentional? [Tears. I feel like I've read many chapters and still don't know who the heroine's mother is… The foreshadowing that was revealed in the first chapter is better to be solved as soon as possible. If this foreshadowing is very important and cannot be revealed until the end, then downplay it from the beginning and just say that she is Toshiro's daughter. Don't deliberately bring up the mother part. Besides, the article uses a multi-perspective description, and the mystery is almost concentrated on the heroine. Xiaomi didn't read Chapter V, but speaking from the previous point, there were too many settings for the heroine and too many mysteries. My life background is completely blank, my character is unpredictable, and I don't know my thoughts! The purpose is unknown! Damn, that's the heroine... Many times the protagonist doesn't have the consciousness of being the protagonist, that's because the author didn't write them out. After a few chapters, Rikuo's inner description is far more detailed than that of the heroine. In the fan circle, the person readers don't know is not Rikuo but Kurihara... The portrayal of the heroine is obviously not strong enough, and the character characteristics are not distinct. Sometimes he's confused, sometimes he's cute, sometimes he's calm, he can even play pranks... There are so many settings. Written like this, readers can't find the point. In addition, the narrative method is biased towards the stream of consciousness, making the article overall very messy. While reading the article, Xiaomi often jumped out of the plot because she couldn't understand... The only thing I know is that Kurihara is very familiar with the people in Slicker Ghost, and then... Hagoromo Kitsune has a grudge against her orz... Emotional development and so on, I always feel that... When I realize it, it has already started orz... It is recommended that most narratives be told from the heroine's perspective to present the character's personality. It's not enough to show her strength. The mystery lies with the heroine, right? What readers want to know is the truth about these mysteries, right? It's impossible not to do it step by step. My imagination was opened during the process of writing the outline. It seems that I don't have a good grasp of the rhythm of the plot. There are also interactions between characters, with dialogue appearing a bit sudden. Many words in the article are direct In this form, who said it, what expression he used, what he was doing when he said it... This kind of information cannot be conveyed to the readers. The way the dialogue is handled is also one of the culprits that makes the article look scattered. I have said some bad things as I write this, but... There is one more thing I feel I still need to say. As far as copywriting is concerned… Someone once said that one-sentence copywriting is the most outrageous copywriting in history. The role of copywriting is to let readers see the key points, cute points, and main lines of the article... The dialogue in the copywriting is too cute, and the most information you can get from the dialogue is... The background of the story includes the Grim Reaper and the Slippery Ghost, and then... Strong women and weak men. What specific story is going to be told... I don't know. Let's roughly summarize the selling points I saw… The God of Death, the slippery ghost, the interconnected world, the killed God of Death... These... Really have nothing to do with Princess Knight. If this is a cute and joyful article that focuses on daily life... Then that's no problem. But in fact... The story to be told is full of mysteries, and it would be a waste for the copywriting to only include irrelevant dialogue between the heroine and Rikuo. The above are all my personal opinions. I have made some comments on the setting of the article, the narrative method and the emotional development of the task. However, the big data is still very impressive. The descriptions of the scenes and the battle scenes are very graphic. For example, in the first chapter when Kurihara went to the real world, and in the later period when the Hagoromo Fox appeared and started fighting, the beautiful and exciting scenes were vividly described. In addition, the emotions of the characters can also affect the readers. I won't mention them specifically here. Most of them are land creatures. There is also the little psychology between little girls, Oikawa, Kana, Yura, Maki... Different stances, their attitudes towards Kurihara are different, and they can be easily distinguished, and their attitudes are also well controlled. Finally, there are daily fights and so on, the little monster and Chabi No. 2, Such small details are very cute! These are all great advantages, as well as the update speed, I see a lot of love for it. The article is a bit green and there is still a lot of room for improvement. Scene changes and character dialogue are flaws. Because I don't know how to continue, I just skip it, so the article looks like a stream of consciousness. For every writer, there is probably still a long way to go. The road to writing is long and arduous. A momentary whim or inspiration cannot support us to go very far, so we must learn to persevere and learn to continuously accumulate in writing to make up for our shortcomings. I believe that with continued persistence in the future, I will find a path that suits me and walk on it well. This is the long review, I hope it will be of great help. Presented with ink-stained millet from a thousand cities.

It's still great. Speaking of which, if the main character is a slick one, will there be another anime in the future? Looking forward to it~

Wow what's going on? Will Xiao Yuanyuan be very excited when she sees her parents appearing? But are you excited or surprised? I am looking forward to the next update.

I'm so happy. I like Slippery Ghost and the God of Death the most. Don't be too creative. XD Come on and update!!!!

I'm very curious about whom Kurihara is the child of Toshiro Hitsugaya and whose child he is.

Byakuya is still handsome! Sir, is there an update?