The protagonists are still together, but the focus is on Xiaoyou and Xiaofeng. This time we will give them a happy ending ^＿＾
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It's hard to understand, transcend and catch up with love love
Hmm~ It's the first time I read this type of article. It's not as boring as I thought. It's very good. I'm attracted to it!
Also, I am writing in Duyan and have never written anything like Xiao Zuo's, so I don't need to adopt some of my suggestions.
Let's talk about the copy first. (This is what Fubai told me.) Copy is the face of an article. Generally, readers will read the copy first. If they find the copy attractive enough, they will have the desire to click and read. Xiao Zuo's copywriting is relatively short, but it can still arouse readers' interest in reading, and can highlight certain characteristics of the text, giving it a sense of prophecy. Qing suggested that Xiao Zuo could make the copy more detailed and extract more essential parts!
Of course, the title of the book is also the first factor to attract readers. The title of Xiao Zuo's article is very classic and comfortable. Readers can give the article a specific positioning at a glance! Like it!
In terms of character creation, I feel that it is a little lacking. The costumes of the characters are of the ancient kind, so when describing, this point should be highlighted. It's best to have different clothes between what you wear in daily life and what you wear when fighting. Hehe, it feels like there will be a very three-dimensional feeling visually.
In terms of character dialogue, I think Xiao Zuo needs to be strengthened. For example, in the first chapter, "What an annoying guy. Hey, you look like Qiongqi. That Qiongqi, one of the four ferocious beasts." This sentence is a bit awkward. You might as well say, "You look really like Qiongqi. You don't even know who Qiongqi is when you look like this. Let me tell you, Qiongqi is one of the four ferocious beasts." This way, you can also highlight certain character traits of the heroine (just suggestions~~~~)
Oh, by the way, Qing suggested that Xiao Zuo use a subtitle for each chapter. This is also a way to attract readers. When they see the title, readers can think of the plot you want to write, instead of guessing numbers like 1233~!
That's all Qing said. When Xiao Zuo writes more, the character structure, and the plot development are more mature and fuller, Qing will come back to give Xiao Zuo some suggestions, hehe~!
Finally, Qing would like to say that Xiao Zuo's writing is very good! Qing didn't even dare to write this type of article, because it is very demanding and requires the author to have good imagination and association skills, as well as a solid literary foundation. So, come on! Xiao Zuo!
Not bad, not bad... Speaking of which, I actually like War of the Rings... Hidden a lot of JQ = =
Madam is mighty! Long live madam, long live long live! Worship~
Grown ups. . I like your article, and I came here just for this fanfic. Come on for more
Not bad. Like it.
Who is the protagonist in the article? The author replies:
Shake his head. Mi has.
Uh... Dada has locked 44... Was it my tweet that made Dada angry?
Give me flowers, give me flowers~I will escape...
Oh. . . . . I can see a bit of JQ. . . .
It has a very heavy ending. This is one of the most disturbing articles I have ever read, but it is true. Come on, it's really well written.
We want to see how they calm down in the end?
Do you want to say that this is a show between the emperor and the general?
Otherwise, the emperor would not agree to let him go, and all the civil and military officials would not agree...
In fact, "Shu" sounds good, but "Kangkang" is really chilling. . .
This sister... - -
Beautifully written, updates are too slow
Come on, I'm looking forward to what happens next.
I'm so sorry~~~I've been busy with HC recently and can't write even half a word~~~Please wait a moment. I will definitely update next week.
Actually I like Xiaohei better
Although that Ann is very gentle and seems to be the ideal choice in many people's minds, she is too gentle. I don't know if this is an appropriate description. It always felt like he was used to waiting and Chang Ge's initiative. Wouldn't a person who is always so passive feel uncomfortable? Alas, the two of them had long memories comparable to childhood sweethearts, but it was a pity that they did not get together. As the saying goes, people with different Tao will not conspire against each other. Why has this An and that Chu been like this for so many years? I kind of wonder about the mentality of the old man of the Chu family and the head of the An family back then.
Think about it, there is really no way to stop fate when it comes. The first meeting between Xiao Hei and Xiao Bai seemed magical. Two very attractive people. To be honest, I was really shocked by the first chapter. However, it was written just right. I was thinking about how these two people would develop. A bamboo horse came later, and he was still a very gentle bamboo horse. He seemed to have no shortcomings, and the chance of being laid off was very low. Alas, I was very worried about Xiao Hei. Unexpectedly, Zhuma was laid off just because of the affairs of the two families. Alas, Classmate An was so hurt inside. Xiao Hei got a big deal. The plot is so smooth, hehe, as expected, Xiao Hei and Xiao Bai did that when I wanted them to do that, and they really matched each other very well. Although Xiaobai had selfish intentions at the time, classmate Xiaohei just went along with the situation and took advantage.
Later, Xiaobai resolutely said goodbye to Zhuma and Xiaohei. Haha, it was handled so well. It seems like this is the best ending. At that time, I was really afraid that the song would end just like that, leaving a lot of suspense for me to think about. Of course, I continued to write about that happy life, but why did I write about that classmate Mo Xu? He was also a "wild man" and said, "Oh, what a young classmate! I don't know what tricks Xiao Hei used, but they were so silent." Ge, you know, what I like the most is what Ye Mohou and Chang Ge said about An. It will take ten years to clarify the matter. It's so insightful. If I told that paragraph to a friend of mine who was still fussing over it after the breakup, you wouldn't blame me for plagiarizing, right?
Hey, I really like Xiao Hei. Where can I find such a handsome, capable, well-rounded boyfriend? Song, Nai said, are you also looking forward to having such a him? I'm so jealous of Xiaobai, I'm so jealous that I'm dying of jealousy.
Why do you feel a bit like sister brother? Author's reply:
No. . .
I didn't see it. . .
Well written, with so many outstanding male protagonists, who will Lin Jingjing be with? Author's reply:
You'll find out if you keep reading!
Continue to support the dress!
Update on time and there will be collection drops, okay?
This development... Okay, I know it is a pavement to get rid of the scum group... But emotionally accepting the incompetent QvQ and driving into people and so on... I always feel that there is something unscientific? It's too bloody →_→ Although there is a system... It should be no problem...
Author Dadoubi 23333
Lin Dahe Bird's main assist! ! Hahahahaha I laughed to death
It's hard to understand, transcend and catch up with love love
Hmm~ It's the first time I read this type of article. It's not as boring as I thought. It's very good. I'm attracted to it! Also, I am writing in Duyan and have never written anything like Xiao Zuo's, so I don't need to adopt some of my suggestions. Let's talk about the copy first. (This is what Fubai told me.) Copy is the face of an article. Generally, readers will read the copy first. If they find the copy attractive enough, they will have the desire to click and read. Xiao Zuo's copywriting is relatively short, but it can still arouse readers' interest in reading, and can highlight certain characteristics of the text, giving it a sense of prophecy. Qing suggested that Xiao Zuo could make the copy more detailed and extract more essential parts! Of course, the title of the book is also the first factor to attract readers. The title of Xiao Zuo's article is very classic and comfortable. Readers can give the article a specific positioning at a glance! Like it! In terms of character creation, I feel that it is a little lacking. The costumes of the characters are of the ancient kind, so when describing, this point should be highlighted. It's best to have different clothes between what you wear in daily life and what you wear when fighting. Hehe, it feels like there will be a very three-dimensional feeling visually. In terms of character dialogue, I think Xiao Zuo needs to be strengthened. For example, in the first chapter, "What an annoying guy. Hey, you look like Qiongqi. That Qiongqi, one of the four ferocious beasts." This sentence is a bit awkward. You might as well say, "You look really like Qiongqi. You don't even know who Qiongqi is when you look like this. Let me tell you, Qiongqi is one of the four ferocious beasts." This way, you can also highlight certain character traits of the heroine (just suggestions~~~~) Oh, by the way, Qing suggested that Xiao Zuo use a subtitle for each chapter. This is also a way to attract readers. When they see the title, readers can think of the plot you want to write, instead of guessing numbers like 1233~! That's all Qing said. When Xiao Zuo writes more, the character structure, and the plot development are more mature and fuller, Qing will come back to give Xiao Zuo some suggestions, hehe~! Finally, Qing would like to say that Xiao Zuo's writing is very good! Qing didn't even dare to write this type of article, because it is very demanding and requires the author to have good imagination and association skills, as well as a solid literary foundation. So, come on! Xiao Zuo!
Not bad, not bad... Speaking of which, I actually like War of the Rings... Hidden a lot of JQ = =
Madam is mighty! Long live madam, long live long live! Worship~
Grown ups. . I like your article, and I came here just for this fanfic. Come on for more
Not bad. Like it. Who is the protagonist in the article? The author replies: Shake his head. Mi has.
Uh... Dada has locked 44... Was it my tweet that made Dada angry? Give me flowers, give me flowers~I will escape...
Oh. . . . . I can see a bit of JQ. . . .
It has a very heavy ending. This is one of the most disturbing articles I have ever read, but it is true. Come on, it's really well written.
We want to see how they calm down in the end? Do you want to say that this is a show between the emperor and the general? Otherwise, the emperor would not agree to let him go, and all the civil and military officials would not agree...
In fact, "Shu" sounds good, but "Kangkang" is really chilling. . .
This sister... - -
Beautifully written, updates are too slow
Come on, I'm looking forward to what happens next.
I'm so sorry~~~I've been busy with HC recently and can't write even half a word~~~Please wait a moment. I will definitely update next week.
Actually I like Xiaohei better Although that Ann is very gentle and seems to be the ideal choice in many people's minds, she is too gentle. I don't know if this is an appropriate description. It always felt like he was used to waiting and Chang Ge's initiative. Wouldn't a person who is always so passive feel uncomfortable? Alas, the two of them had long memories comparable to childhood sweethearts, but it was a pity that they did not get together. As the saying goes, people with different Tao will not conspire against each other. Why has this An and that Chu been like this for so many years? I kind of wonder about the mentality of the old man of the Chu family and the head of the An family back then. Think about it, there is really no way to stop fate when it comes. The first meeting between Xiao Hei and Xiao Bai seemed magical. Two very attractive people. To be honest, I was really shocked by the first chapter. However, it was written just right. I was thinking about how these two people would develop. A bamboo horse came later, and he was still a very gentle bamboo horse. He seemed to have no shortcomings, and the chance of being laid off was very low. Alas, I was very worried about Xiao Hei. Unexpectedly, Zhuma was laid off just because of the affairs of the two families. Alas, Classmate An was so hurt inside. Xiao Hei got a big deal. The plot is so smooth, hehe, as expected, Xiao Hei and Xiao Bai did that when I wanted them to do that, and they really matched each other very well. Although Xiaobai had selfish intentions at the time, classmate Xiaohei just went along with the situation and took advantage. Later, Xiaobai resolutely said goodbye to Zhuma and Xiaohei. Haha, it was handled so well. It seems like this is the best ending. At that time, I was really afraid that the song would end just like that, leaving a lot of suspense for me to think about. Of course, I continued to write about that happy life, but why did I write about that classmate Mo Xu? He was also a "wild man" and said, "Oh, what a young classmate! I don't know what tricks Xiao Hei used, but they were so silent." Ge, you know, what I like the most is what Ye Mohou and Chang Ge said about An. It will take ten years to clarify the matter. It's so insightful. If I told that paragraph to a friend of mine who was still fussing over it after the breakup, you wouldn't blame me for plagiarizing, right? Hey, I really like Xiao Hei. Where can I find such a handsome, capable, well-rounded boyfriend? Song, Nai said, are you also looking forward to having such a him? I'm so jealous of Xiaobai, I'm so jealous that I'm dying of jealousy.
Why do you feel a bit like sister brother? Author's reply: No. . . I didn't see it. . .
Well written, with so many outstanding male protagonists, who will Lin Jingjing be with? Author's reply: You'll find out if you keep reading! Continue to support the dress!
Update on time and there will be collection drops, okay?
This development... Okay, I know it is a pavement to get rid of the scum group... But emotionally accepting the incompetent QvQ and driving into people and so on... I always feel that there is something unscientific? It's too bloody →_→ Although there is a system... It should be no problem...
Author Dadoubi 23333
Lin Dahe Bird's main assist! ! Hahahahaha I laughed to death