A collection of the women of the Pirate world! They're all best sisters. The protagonist was added later: a purple-haired young lady. Your support is welcome. If you think updates are slow, please forgive me. I'm a new writer and still young, so I hope you'll be patient with me.
Isn't there someone who wants to make a bloody show?
Can Han Nai see through people's hearts?
Curious, curious~ And if Sharp-chan is too tired, you need to rest more~
Hey, why are the double quotation marks messed up like this? Wow!! Ying Ying
The twist in the plot is a bit abrupt, but that's okay. In addition, you don't have to repeatedly emphasize the heroine's hair color and eye color. Just say it a few times~
The other thing is to add some plot narration~
As for the content of the story... I can't say~ After all, you have to think about it yourself. However, as the author, you know all the plots when you write the story, so you can understand the content of the story, but the readers don't know, so you still have to talk about some plots~
Sharp-chan, I'm here to support you~ You know who I am, my name is just missing a word╮(╯_╰)╭
After reading this chapter, I think your writing style is pretty good, and the content you wrote is not trivial. However, when I read the beginning of the first chapter, I felt a sense of peacekeeping. How should I put it, it was the conversation between Perona and Loren. Although I roughly know the plot after reading two chapters, I feel that you are There should be some narration between their conversations at the beginning, written from Perona's perspective, why Perona saw Loren in this place, and why she came out to work. It was just a dialogue, and then watching them become good sisters, I felt that the progress was too fast. After all, they had just met...
It's so cold, I have to pile bricks on my face to show my self-deprecation, I'd better wait until my wings become stronger, 55
Isn't there someone who wants to make a bloody show?
Can Han Nai see through people's hearts? Curious, curious~ And if Sharp-chan is too tired, you need to rest more~
Hey, why are the double quotation marks messed up like this? Wow!! Ying Ying
The twist in the plot is a bit abrupt, but that's okay. In addition, you don't have to repeatedly emphasize the heroine's hair color and eye color. Just say it a few times~ The other thing is to add some plot narration~ As for the content of the story... I can't say~ After all, you have to think about it yourself. However, as the author, you know all the plots when you write the story, so you can understand the content of the story, but the readers don't know, so you still have to talk about some plots~
Sharp-chan, I'm here to support you~ You know who I am, my name is just missing a word╮(╯_╰)╭ After reading this chapter, I think your writing style is pretty good, and the content you wrote is not trivial. However, when I read the beginning of the first chapter, I felt a sense of peacekeeping. How should I put it, it was the conversation between Perona and Loren. Although I roughly know the plot after reading two chapters, I feel that you are There should be some narration between their conversations at the beginning, written from Perona's perspective, why Perona saw Loren in this place, and why she came out to work. It was just a dialogue, and then watching them become good sisters, I felt that the progress was too fast. After all, they had just met...
It's so cold, I have to pile bricks on my face to show my self-deprecation, I'd better wait until my wings become stronger, 55