[Online Game] They Took Mine, So I'll Take It Back

Why is the story written by Lou Yu so gay...

Hello, author, this is Xiaomeng from Pumiao Grocery Store. I am very happy to take your order. This review is solely my own, and I apologize for any inaccuracies. This time the order was picked up by me within a few seconds. I feel really lucky - online game articles have always been my thing! (Drooling) In fact, when I saw the title of the article, I initially thought it was probably a sadistic article, but after I saw the copy, I overturned my idea - judging from the copy, it was clearly a fun article about revenge with pig's feet. But after I really started reading the article (I finished it quickly because there were not many words), I suddenly discovered that it turned out to be a light-hearted and joyful article. The bloody sadomasochistic love story and the conspiracy and conspiracy of revenge against Xiaogong were not there at all. The strange thing is... What is this weird contrast and cuteness? OTZ Ahem, no more nagging, let's get to the point. (Serious face) It can be seen from the column that this is not the first time for Mika to write articles. He has written many long and short stories. He has rich experience and probably has his own routine. This article is also very concise. The first chapter explains some background of the story and throws out the stories that Xiao Gong and Xiao Shou have to tell. However, Xiao Gong only shows his face in the second chapter, and then has no interaction with the protagonist. How to say it? I always feel a little regretful. If I could have a little interaction with the protagonist, there would be more to watch. That would be great. This regret persists throughout the text. In a short story, the intersection between the protagonist and Xiao Gong cannot be too little. Although Mika Jun also wrote it, in this online game article, Xiao Gong and Xiao Shou had no more than five direct conversations in the online game (I didn't count, and it really wasn't many in my impression). For example, after Xue Ji became the editor, I thought the chapter where he interacted with the building was quite good, but it still felt like it was missing the mark. It felt like he was hanging in the air without getting up or down. Another point worth mentioning is that it is clear that Xiao Gong and Xiao Shou are just friends on the Internet, but Mika also described the two of them as having a deep relationship. In the end, when the two recognized each other, they confessed their love and went to bed directly. The progress seemed to be very fast. It would be better if there was a little emotional foreshadowing and plot explanation. I suggest that Mika can work more on this and focus on the emotional scenes. I believe this article can be better. As this article is a short story, Xiao Gong's role is still a little underplayed after all. This may be because too many supporting characters robbed him of his presence. Not only that, the entire storyline is a bit too bland, but it is worth mentioning that when Xiao Gong and the protagonist recognized each other at the end, this plot really attracted me, but if it could be more dramatic or the atmosphere could be controlled, it would be more impressive and worth recalling. The pace of this article is very brisk, and seeing the final ending will make you smile, but it is still a bit unfinished - I am looking forward to the follow-up of the story, and I feel like I hope the author can continue writing. The story of Lou Yu and Xue Ji did not end after they met. With the beginning of their love affair, they still have a long way to go in the future, and there is still a lot of stories that can be written. This kind of incomplete beauty can be regarded as a shining point for a short story! How can a short story be considered good? In my opinion, the first is the plot, and the second is the characters. Without a good plot, it is difficult to create classic characters. Without classic characters, no matter how good the idea is, it cannot be sustained. From Mika Jun's article "Take What I Have, Take It Back", we can already see that you have done a good job in grasping the characters' personalities and adjusting the plot. People always absorb experience to improve. I believe Mika Jun's articles will become better and better as he writes, and I hope that this review of mine can play a certain role in Mika Jun.

I sincerely say that I am here to ask for HP... I sincerely express that I am here to ask for my help in the long journey... I sincerely say that I am here to pray for the gods... I sincerely say that I will definitely not jump into the trap before you finish... I sincerely say you should hurry up and fill in the hole!!!!

Well, the student party can't afford to be hurt. . . . . But it still seems to be urging me to update~~ Come on, Yuda, I support you mentally~~

Yuda, by the way, I have seen this chapter for a long time. . . . It's time for you to learn something new! ! ! Please update! ! Urgent update! ! You can't live up to my expectations. I really like this article! ! Support! ! So for the sake of my support. . . Please update~~~~(>_<)

T T Score first and then read

It means you are laughing while watching... How can you be abusing me!

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>3<I am excited to see the update

Uh, Chapter 3 shows incompetence... The author should re-upload it.