Did Ling use her own blood to save Sesshomaru's heart?
Completely contrary to the character of the original! It is impossible for Rei and Sesshomaru to have these expressions!!
Can the locked chapters 17 24 30 be released? The key content is gone.
It's very good, but when I go to the Western Kingdom, it feels like a palace drama.
It is recommended that Suzu wear a white kimono.
Not bad, keep up the good work
This is an unknown shop. [Xiaohuo] from Changping Shop. Thank you for placing the order. Now I will make a simple review of Dada's article. My personal opinion is for reference only!
1. [Copywriting] What's the big problem with the cover? I won't go into details here. It's that the cover doesn't match the title of the article. Is it because of the name change? Another thing to note is that the layout of the copy is still a bit strange. There is no content and it feels a bit empty. Take advantage of the fact that copy can attract readers and add some content to your copy. When readers come in to read your article, the first thing they see is the copy. If the copy cannot attract readers, the loss of readers will be severe. It is suggested that you can add some quotations in the article, or a summary of the content of the article, or some descriptions. In short, it would be better if it is a little longer.
2. [Overall] Sesshomaru's love is great, but are you sure this is HE? Xiaohuo, I am silently sad, what is the melancholy rush after reading it? Also, are you going to write a sequel afterward? If not, please change it to Completed. I'm still very confused about what you call HE. Look at how many readers downstairs are full of shame. Let's have a side story to heal us! There is no extra story, my little heart is smashing into pieces! Please be healed!
3. [Description] The description is very smooth, but it may not pay enough attention to details. The flow of the article is good. I read it in one go. (This has been the case recently. Today there are already 7 points on the list. What is this melancholy rush...) However, the overall feeling is that it is not interesting enough. I always feel that I am missing a breath. The inner feelings of the characters and the detailed descriptions are not enough. Come on! Especially in some early chapters, I felt that the pace of substitution was too fast. The inner description of the characters is actually a key to the success of this article, as well as the description of the situation. The last chapter is particularly outstanding, which well highlights the kind of melancholy and wandering. I highly recommend that in future articles, you can focus more on the inner and outer descriptions of the characters, as this will have unexpected effects.
4. [Plot] The plot setting is pretty good. Although I don't like the ending, I have to say that this ending is indeed a good arrangement. Sesshomaru's arrogance is not that he is willing to have a half-demon child, or that I am not willing? So if we want to be together for a lifetime, I think this way is the best. Although I mistakenly thought it was a sweet text at the beginning, but in the end it told me that I was thinking too much! HE will not appear on Sesshomaru. Girl, you abused me, you really abused me. If there is no extra story, I will cry for you.
5. [Others] This is just a small suggestion. If you sign a contract, it is best to open up your new pit before finishing. This way you can introduce readers to your new pit, otherwise it will be a pity. In addition, some work can also be done on the chapter names and summary. Personally, I think some authors do a very good job in this area!
Haha, generally speaking, these are the above contents. Of course, these are some personal opinions and are for reference only. You can decide whether to adopt it or not based on your actual views and circumstances.
So this is Xiaohuo's penultimate order today. I will definitely be spoiled by 7 consecutive orders every day, hahaha.
Thank you so much for calling me by name. I look forward to asking for reviews next time and continue to come to our shop.
Unheard shop name·Changping Shop [Small Fire]
November 11, 2012
This is [Unheard Shop Name·Changping Shop], the girl's order has been released, please click on Chapter 63 inside the shop to take the order.
Cover your face, you're so abused. It's finally finished, thank you for your hard work. Sprinkle flowers.
However, is this HE? Ahhhhhhh, crying bitterly.
So excited. The fight was so intense and so exciting.
Did Ling use her own blood to save Sesshomaru's heart?
Completely contrary to the character of the original! It is impossible for Rei and Sesshomaru to have these expressions!!
Can the locked chapters 17 24 30 be released? The key content is gone.
It's very good, but when I go to the Western Kingdom, it feels like a palace drama.
It is recommended that Suzu wear a white kimono.
Not bad, keep up the good work
This is an unknown shop. [Xiaohuo] from Changping Shop. Thank you for placing the order. Now I will make a simple review of Dada's article. My personal opinion is for reference only! 1. [Copywriting] What's the big problem with the cover? I won't go into details here. It's that the cover doesn't match the title of the article. Is it because of the name change? Another thing to note is that the layout of the copy is still a bit strange. There is no content and it feels a bit empty. Take advantage of the fact that copy can attract readers and add some content to your copy. When readers come in to read your article, the first thing they see is the copy. If the copy cannot attract readers, the loss of readers will be severe. It is suggested that you can add some quotations in the article, or a summary of the content of the article, or some descriptions. In short, it would be better if it is a little longer. 2. [Overall] Sesshomaru's love is great, but are you sure this is HE? Xiaohuo, I am silently sad, what is the melancholy rush after reading it? Also, are you going to write a sequel afterward? If not, please change it to Completed. I'm still very confused about what you call HE. Look at how many readers downstairs are full of shame. Let's have a side story to heal us! There is no extra story, my little heart is smashing into pieces! Please be healed! 3. [Description] The description is very smooth, but it may not pay enough attention to details. The flow of the article is good. I read it in one go. (This has been the case recently. Today there are already 7 points on the list. What is this melancholy rush...) However, the overall feeling is that it is not interesting enough. I always feel that I am missing a breath. The inner feelings of the characters and the detailed descriptions are not enough. Come on! Especially in some early chapters, I felt that the pace of substitution was too fast. The inner description of the characters is actually a key to the success of this article, as well as the description of the situation. The last chapter is particularly outstanding, which well highlights the kind of melancholy and wandering. I highly recommend that in future articles, you can focus more on the inner and outer descriptions of the characters, as this will have unexpected effects. 4. [Plot] The plot setting is pretty good. Although I don't like the ending, I have to say that this ending is indeed a good arrangement. Sesshomaru's arrogance is not that he is willing to have a half-demon child, or that I am not willing? So if we want to be together for a lifetime, I think this way is the best. Although I mistakenly thought it was a sweet text at the beginning, but in the end it told me that I was thinking too much! HE will not appear on Sesshomaru. Girl, you abused me, you really abused me. If there is no extra story, I will cry for you. 5. [Others] This is just a small suggestion. If you sign a contract, it is best to open up your new pit before finishing. This way you can introduce readers to your new pit, otherwise it will be a pity. In addition, some work can also be done on the chapter names and summary. Personally, I think some authors do a very good job in this area! Haha, generally speaking, these are the above contents. Of course, these are some personal opinions and are for reference only. You can decide whether to adopt it or not based on your actual views and circumstances. So this is Xiaohuo's penultimate order today. I will definitely be spoiled by 7 consecutive orders every day, hahaha. Thank you so much for calling me by name. I look forward to asking for reviews next time and continue to come to our shop. Unheard shop name·Changping Shop [Small Fire] November 11, 2012
This is [Unheard Shop Name·Changping Shop], the girl's order has been released, please click on Chapter 63 inside the shop to take the order.
Cover your face, you're so abused. It's finally finished, thank you for your hard work. Sprinkle flowers. However, is this HE? Ahhhhhhh, crying bitterly.
So excited. The fight was so intense and so exciting.