(The Magic Blade Fanfiction) Peacock Plume

Two points suddenly turned into zero points... Qaq

I have always been a waste of writing reviews, and the reviews written by a waste of time writing reviews are naturally the best of waste. So just talk nonsense, just to make people laugh and look at it, don't take it seriously. I started reading Gu Liang when he had about twenty chapters, and I dived into the water for a few more chapters (ahem!) Until I was pulled out of the water by a girl's long comment. I have always felt that writing fan fiction is both easy and difficult. The easy part is that the characters in the background are already predetermined, and there is no need for originality. The difficulty lies in how to write the characters well. It's like dancing with a pair of exquisite shackles - the words can neither be too outrageous nor too rigid - this is really not an easy task. This is true for fans who write novels, and even more so for fans who write Gu Long's novels. Let's talk about characterization first. The protagonists of the article, Ye Xiaokai and Fu Xiaoxue (uh... And Yan Xiaosan?), Are well written by Gu Liang. The three characters have been described in great detail in the original work. Guliang not only cleverly used typical sentences from the original work in appropriate places, but also described the characters' hearts, expressions and other details very well. It can even be said to be a good supplement to the original work (girl, do you know that you almost wrote all the thoughts I had in mind when I read the original work!). As the saying goes, there are a thousand so-and-so in the eyes of a thousand people. Therefore, these three guys are still a little inconsistent with my personal understanding in some places in the article. For example, I think Ye Xiaokai is a person who is too open-minded (or he is a bit mythologized by Gu Long), so although he has emotions and sorrows, he will not express them so strongly in front of others (especially close relatives), so he may not be as sad in Chapter 12, and may not be as crazy in Chapter 22. Of course, Ye Xiaokai's brain structure is a bit complicated. He is probably the hardest to write about among the three. Everyone's understanding is different. Please forgive me if I'm wrong~ Let's talk about the supporting roles. I think every character who appears in a good novel must play his or her greatest role. It is the selfless dedication of these villains, who may be nameless or faceless, that drives the plot and makes the protagonists. The description of Guliang at the beginning is indeed as Lunzi Guliang said, the supporting characters were written a bit hastily. It improved greatly later. But I always feel that Guliang is still a bit unused. For example, Mrs. Zhuo, her role was very important at first, but later she completely became the soy sauce, and then she played a piece of music and disappeared; another example is Boss Yu, who has been in the soy sauce stage for the Nangong family at first, but later Gu Liang gave him a lot of side descriptions and foreshadowing (it is very written here) Okay), but at the end, he quickly followed Mrs. Zhuo - his plans, actions, dark history (Hey!), Gu Liang were not very clear in writing, so that it took Ye Xiaokai three months to lay out a lot of foreshadowing such as Boss Yu's three-year + plan and Gu Liang's previous confrontation with the capital. (Dirt!!!) As a romance novel, the plot should be very good. Those two guys went from being fake to straight men to revealing their true nature, which is natural and thought-provoking (huh?). Since the plot almost entirely revolves around the protagonist, the entire article is compact and eye-catching. But as a martial arts novel, concerns about the handling of clues and characters emerge. Some of the plots are a little loose, and some of the plots are too tight (especially Chapters 46 and 47). Coupled with some important supporting characters (such as Xiaoxian) who are unknowingly affected by the soy sauce, the ending is a bit rushed. (Nowadays, some girls (including me) have the feeling that they always feel shortcomings even if they don't watch the protagonist's homosexuality, so in terms of the balance of plot, supporting roles, and popularity, it is really not easy to do well) Finally, let's talk about language. Gu Liang's language style is very soft and delicate, the warm part is just right, the abusive part is too numerous to describe (huh?), And the place of making love is like a dream (go away!!!). Most of the problems mentioned by Lunzi Guliang were corrected in the later period. But it is a little rough in some details, such as using "so" too much—— "That night, Ye Kai sat on the roof and blew the night wind for half the night... So Fu Hongxue quietly surrounded him... After a sleepless night, the two of them lay quietly on the bed... Then when the first faint ray of light entered the room..." The two "therefore"s above can be omitted. The first one is repeated with "then", and the second one should be deleted. Thank you Gu Liang for not disapproving of my nonsense and insisting on reading this~ Because Gu Liang wrote "asking for whipping", the shortcomings (obviously made up by you!) Were mentioned too much. But the faults do not hide the good points. Gu Liang's article is indeed a good article, and it is even more happy to read Gu Liang's article. I wish Guliang's articles will get better as he writes more! PS: Please make a sex scene! It needs to be drawn in white! ! Line drawing! ! ! (Get out!!!!)

This damn tenderness... Poof...

This chapter is really heartwarming and healing~ Fortunately, the adults gave them such a happy ending.

I'm not good at writing reviews, but this is a really sweet chapter, which just healed my heart that was hurt by the original... Will there be a sequel? Life stories or something~~

Come on, girl! I'll give you a review after it's finished~ (Uh... These words sound so familiar...) Could it be that Miss Ni or her master wants to sacrifice themselves to fulfill Fu Xiaoxue? It's the most annoying thing to be one chapter short of the ending but not waiting for Shenma!

It's finally over! After reading this chapter, I suddenly felt like I had the urge to be.><I'm looking forward to the ending of the QAQ, come on!

When I see "Xiao Jian" I always think of Little Swallow [Enough! So this person looks very distressed and says...

I realize that every time I comment, I forget to give a rating. I'm wrong ><

A bright red petal. This quantifier is not very accurate [Obsessive-compulsive disorder ing] And TvT is happy that the male concubine has come clean. [Wait, what's wrong?