This is not a true story, but a fantastical, mysterious dream where humans and gods coexist and immortals come and go.
Huh? Why are her hands so soft? They feel so good to hold.
When Qianye, covered in a nosebleed, collapsed into the arms of that breathtakingly beautiful girl, perhaps no one could have imagined that such a custom might really exist. In that strange, snow-white homeland, when a young boy touches a girl's hand, he has pledged himself to her for life. Then he must pass seven trials before kneeling before her and presenting her with a sacred flower crown. From then on, they will accompany each other for all eternity, never to part...
Come on, I've been paying attention
"If a person is bluffing, will he get angry so easily? Does that mean that Qianye really possesses peerless martial arts? If what he told is a lie, how dare he go to White Horse Academy? Wouldn't his lie be exposed immediately after meeting Old Man Cangyue and Shangguan Liuyun?" Delete this paragraph directly, the effect will be better. Laiji is just an unknown person, so there is no need to be so detailed. The article must be concise, otherwise readers will be bored and may feel that you are trying to make up for the word count. What should be given up should still be given up. . . The editor knows that you may have some difficulties in your heart, but the purpose is to express it to the point.
"Looking at his red nose and round and sunken face," I feel cute when I see these adjectives, but the whole sentence combined is "Qianye looked at his mostly bald head, and then looked at his red nose and round and sunken face, and there were actually a lot of messy hairs on it." It's a bit disgusting. Together, they are nondescript. This is not the only one. The article is not sharp enough.
"I saw that the man had a frightened face. He was wearing a silk and satin dress. It was doughy. He was obviously a small business owner with a good business." Note that silk and satin are fabrics and clothing. They must be professional and professional. Today's readers are very sophisticated. Although this is a small detail, it often affects the reader's mood to continue reading.
Brother, keep writing!
Finally saw it. Cang Yue, the name of my former heroine~
My mother, this Qianye is too strong~~~~This is okay~~~~I don't know what to say to the heroine
Where are my classmates... I want to see my classmates... It's not some cockfighting... Young Master Nai said that Yue'er has bad intentions, but it's useless just to tell me, you have to make some foreshadowing or something. There is also a third party that is not necessarily related to pornography, so I wrote it with confidence and boldness.
Mumu got goosebumps for a while~~~~This woman used a beauty trap~~~~~Jinjiang smoked again last night~~~~I couldn't comment for a long time
Young Master, can we cut off the heroine and the insensitive male protagonist who are so supportive of Xiaobai (yes, they are also supportive of Wu Wu who ignores chickens for what reason?!!). It was such a tragedy that I forgot about my classmates' faces and burst into tears... Looking forward to Shangguan and Luo Bingwang having a 3P with that one... Let the scumbag man and white woman@#