[Kuroko's Basketball] I Leave Because I Love You

Is this the time to give up?

I just left a comment after seeing this. I really want to give you some advice. Author, please pay attention to your article, especially the part when "" is spoken. You will use the word "said" both before and after, but in fact the content of the story is only one sentence, which will make people confused and think that you actually said two sentences but you are missing one. [(Foreword) He whispered to Yi Yueqiu. "Itsuki, you better hold on to me, Saturday morning is still a bit stressful." Because of Midorima's height, he had to lower his head and talk to Yi Yuqiu. Two consecutive words actually say the same sentence, but because the frequency of the words is too high, it will feel unnecessary. But if you really want to write like this, try to replace the action word "speaking". I believe there are many, "open, speak, talk, shout..." Or even just describe the action. There is no need for the author to separate each sentence into a special paragraph, because this will cause the reading to be too fragmented. If you want to progress faster, you can only keep the dialogue without describing the character's actions. However, if you want to describe the character's actions at the same time, such a separation of dialogue and narrative will make people feel confused and constantly switching cameras. Please try reading it yourself and wonder if the picture is shaking in your mind? ["Why did you come to see it? Don't you usually like to see it?" Yi Yueqiu answered directly without asking why Yi Yuejun asked this question. "Because Akashi didn't give us, Teikou's students, the right to say 'no' to him." When Yi Yuejun heard the surname "Akaashi", he asked Yi Yueqiu. "Aki, the 'Akaashi' you are talking about is the general of the 'Generation of Miracles' - Akashi Seijuro?" When Yi Yueqiu heard her brother say Akashi's name, she nodded, which was a response to her brother's question. Yi Yueqiu was stunned for a moment before she came to her senses and said. "Brother, do you know the people in our school's basketball club?" Yi Yuejun nodded and said. The names of the characters at the beginning are obviously the same, but they are repeated again and again... This is not a script, and there is no need to write it like this. It doesn't mean that every period must be changed to a new line, and this is not prose. (In fact, prose will not be like this) Sometimes when these words are spoken by the same person, such layout will also create unnecessary reading gaps. If you can, read the articles of several experts who are often on the list, and you will gain a better understanding of how to arrange the entire layout and story. The above are just my personal opinions. This is a story whose subject matter interests me. However, after reading this, the content description makes me feel very sad. The content is one thing, and the comfort is another. At least I personally am not willing to read the kind of story that will make me dizzy. Maybe what I said won't win your heart at all, and you don't think it's necessary, or you like it very much, etc. Then you can ignore my opinion and just pretend that you didn't see it. Anyway, I'll give it a zero score. If you're willing to adopt it a little bit, I'm sure you'll be better off. There are also some issues with the writing that are rather jerky. These can be made up for by you continuing to write. It's a matter of experience, so I'll stop here. In addition, I chose the article in this chapter as an example just because I happened to leave a comment on this chapter. If you have questions... You can find them yourself. After you read it yourself, you will find places where you feel you really need to pause, places where you feel it would be impossible to stop, and places where you feel it would be better to connect them together. Thanks for reading my nonsense.

Phew—the ten days of tutoring are over. After six days of rest, military training will really begin. Alas...

Two awkward kids...

Military training has been postponed. I just came back from school today. Uh-huh, my mom used my account to go to the school's forum to say that my school was bad, and I got scolded to death. It's so pitiful.

Qiu is quite slow in some aspects... He has to go to military training the day after tomorrow, which is really annoying (╯╰)

JQ ah JQ~ In fact, the heroine has a natural tendency to be stupid~~> <

Can high school and junior high students play practice games together?

How did they treat Midorima?

Ah, Red Team seems to fully meet the requirements.