[Which is more important, gorgeous rhetoric or ups and downs of the plot?
The content of the title is something I wanted to ask when I saw many articles a long time ago. I saw the author's article and couldn't help but come in and write a long comment.
If the author does not accept my evaluation, just ignore it.
Here are just some suggestions
Undoubtedly, every sentence written by the author is beautiful.
So beautiful that every sentence makes me moan.
Just like the author often asks readers: How are you, have you been abused?
But readers have repeatedly answered: It seems not.
Yes, such a gorgeous sentence, if you squeeze all the water out of it, there is really only a few lines in a chapter.
The story has been going on for so long and all we can see is:
1. The heroine is very powerful, very beautiful, and otherworldly beautiful, so Kid likes her, Kira likes her, and Xiao Tang also likes her.
2. The female supporting role is very shameless. She still has to hook up with a man. She is also very beautiful, very kitsch.
Okay, even if we leave aside the topic of Su Busu, how is this different from Aunt Qiong Yao's story routine?
Such a facial expression of the story really makes readers want to watch it, not to mention they keep moaning for no reason.
The author has been emphasizing that everyone loves very painfully
Why is it painful? Have no idea.
Kira's extra story uses poetic language to describe Kira's thoughts, but not the content of her thoughts.
After draining all these gorgeous words, it was just that he met the gentle and beautiful heroine during a difficult time, so he fell in love with her, but found that Kidd also liked her, so he was very confused.
He was too entangled to look like the killing warrior Kira.
Luo also loves very painfully
Why is it painful? Don't know either
Luo's extra story also uses poetic language to describe how Luo flipped through diaries and read newspapers, but he just didn't understand why he was so entangled.
After draining these gorgeous words, we come to the conclusion: the woman Luo liked was related to ancient weapons, and then she left and disappeared.
Even if it's related to ancient weapons, it's a foreshadowing. What the relationship is may be discussed later, and why he left may be discussed later, but there's no point in writing it here!
I don't know why so many time-traveling novels like to make the heroine related to Pluto, Uranus, Neptune, and D. Obviously there are related people in the original work, but they have to be related to time travel in different worlds. And I don't know where the connection is.
In short, except for the author repeatedly emphasizing that he is being abused, it seems that I really can't see where the abuse is.
Although the smoothness of the text and good writing style are really important, these are all based on the premise that the story can be told completely.
If you don't know what the plot is talking about, or you simply squeezed out the text without much content, what's the use of all the gorgeous words? What's more, I still can't see where the abuse is.
After thinking about the above personal nonsense opinions, I'll give it a zero score.
I came here to comment from a forum. It does seem like the writing is a bit scattered.
And Luo crying like this... Seems a bit OOC
The writing is beautiful, but it looks beautiful, but it doesn't actually convey much content.
Each line is a short sentence. Writing a novel is not a long poem after all.
All in all, it's too scattered, and the same goes for the next few chapters.
By the way, I want to complain that the name Song Yunji looks very Korean.
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Can you change the way you cry? Lily, it's okay to cry and laugh at the same time. 0 0
I remember boiled sweet potatoes taste so sweet
The weak setting is so cute!!! ▽
I thought of the heroine getting into an accident in Dianshan Mountain and then being dumped over there in the South China Sea.
Because I don't pay much attention to writing, I can't always finish writing my text TUT
I still really want to see it
I still really want to see it
[Which is more important, gorgeous rhetoric or ups and downs of the plot? The content of the title is something I wanted to ask when I saw many articles a long time ago. I saw the author's article and couldn't help but come in and write a long comment. If the author does not accept my evaluation, just ignore it. Here are just some suggestions Undoubtedly, every sentence written by the author is beautiful. So beautiful that every sentence makes me moan. Just like the author often asks readers: How are you, have you been abused? But readers have repeatedly answered: It seems not. Yes, such a gorgeous sentence, if you squeeze all the water out of it, there is really only a few lines in a chapter. The story has been going on for so long and all we can see is: 1. The heroine is very powerful, very beautiful, and otherworldly beautiful, so Kid likes her, Kira likes her, and Xiao Tang also likes her. 2. The female supporting role is very shameless. She still has to hook up with a man. She is also very beautiful, very kitsch. Okay, even if we leave aside the topic of Su Busu, how is this different from Aunt Qiong Yao's story routine? Such a facial expression of the story really makes readers want to watch it, not to mention they keep moaning for no reason. The author has been emphasizing that everyone loves very painfully Why is it painful? Have no idea. Kira's extra story uses poetic language to describe Kira's thoughts, but not the content of her thoughts. After draining all these gorgeous words, it was just that he met the gentle and beautiful heroine during a difficult time, so he fell in love with her, but found that Kidd also liked her, so he was very confused. He was too entangled to look like the killing warrior Kira. Luo also loves very painfully Why is it painful? Don't know either Luo's extra story also uses poetic language to describe how Luo flipped through diaries and read newspapers, but he just didn't understand why he was so entangled. After draining these gorgeous words, we come to the conclusion: the woman Luo liked was related to ancient weapons, and then she left and disappeared. Even if it's related to ancient weapons, it's a foreshadowing. What the relationship is may be discussed later, and why he left may be discussed later, but there's no point in writing it here! I don't know why so many time-traveling novels like to make the heroine related to Pluto, Uranus, Neptune, and D. Obviously there are related people in the original work, but they have to be related to time travel in different worlds. And I don't know where the connection is. In short, except for the author repeatedly emphasizing that he is being abused, it seems that I really can't see where the abuse is. Although the smoothness of the text and good writing style are really important, these are all based on the premise that the story can be told completely. If you don't know what the plot is talking about, or you simply squeezed out the text without much content, what's the use of all the gorgeous words? What's more, I still can't see where the abuse is. After thinking about the above personal nonsense opinions, I'll give it a zero score.
I came here to comment from a forum. It does seem like the writing is a bit scattered. And Luo crying like this... Seems a bit OOC
The writing is beautiful, but it looks beautiful, but it doesn't actually convey much content. Each line is a short sentence. Writing a novel is not a long poem after all. All in all, it's too scattered, and the same goes for the next few chapters. By the way, I want to complain that the name Song Yunji looks very Korean. If me This way Comment and speak Author do you think watching Will comfortable Huh?
Can you change the way you cry? Lily, it's okay to cry and laugh at the same time. 0 0
I remember boiled sweet potatoes taste so sweet
The weak setting is so cute!!! ▽
I thought of the heroine getting into an accident in Dianshan Mountain and then being dumped over there in the South China Sea.
Because I don't pay much attention to writing, I can't always finish writing my text TUT