Dragon Horse, I'll Stay by Your Side

I'm too lazy to talk a lot of nonsense, so let's get started =-= 1. When he walked into the aircraft cabin, his eyes were firm and unruly, like a warrior on an expedition, taking the first step with his father's unfinished dream. First of all, I don't know how you understand Ryoma, but it's not like Ryoma to be so frank. Taking the first step with his father's unfinished dream. Although there is some meaning in it, he himself will never admit it. It is more likely that he will say: I just want to prove that I can do things that the old man can't do. ——Is this... Right? 2. There was a flash of disappointment in his beautiful amber eyes as he sat down in the guest cabin. Cough, I don't think the word pretty is used to describe girls. Of course, in local areas, the adjective "handsome" is also used... =-= Cough. This is just a personal habit. If you don't think so, forget it. (And I have to pick out the words because of Mao) 3. He suddenly realized: he was used to caring about that young man's existence! Becomes important... This discovery made him dazed for a long time. Why? It should be said that the existence of habit itself is terrible. He doesn't want to refuse the free service delivered to his door and blindly accept...? No, he felt that the relationship between him and that person was like a close friend! He suddenly realized what he was thinking, and a mocking smile appeared at the corner of his mouth, feeling a little sad out of thin air. That person was not here now... It's really not like him! This paragraph... Well, I just want to say that Ryoma's nature is destined to make him impossible to be sentimental. He will probably be irritable and then yawn and sleep =-= or he can't sleep and becomes more irritable... Because Ryoma himself is a rough nerve, he will not think so deeply - especially love, except for tennis. 4. On the left side of his body, a young man put his chin on his hand and faced him with a smile. He still had his usual gentle and elegant eyes, his flawless face, and his cynical, evil and unruly expression... ... Ahem, let me explain first that I am not questioning your character... It's just that you are both gentle and evil, elegant and uninhibited. Don't you find it very contradictory... Turn your face. The last sentence of this chapter is a rant! 5…" After a long time, his ethereal voice far away from here and on the horizon passed by the young man's ears, "It's nothing... Although I understand that you want to describe Ryoma's voice as ethereal...=-=... But... I only have the illusion that Ryoma suddenly becomes insane... Turning his face.

That's great, Li Yue, godfather! I support you.

Came here=Dan= Echizen is slightly broken, okay I'm completely useless, don't pay attention to me, and Moe Shou Shou><

It looks good. I want to keep watching it.

Yeah, it's very interesting. I've never read Ryoma's fanfics. I don't dare to read them because I'm afraid that he will be hurt. But this article is very detailed. I feel very sorry for Ryoma.

So what, it's ok. . . Been here. . .

Saw it. Um. Come on Xiao Yue··········

The Aijia came to see it, BL is definitely my cup of tea!! [Quietly: Xiaoqi and I are two extremes] I support you with both hands and feet~~~ By the way, the Ai family likes ambiguity the most!! Don't be careless!!

Well, how can I put it this way? Subjectively speaking, this article is okay. The writing style is a bit bland, and I have different feelings depending on my personal perspective! But objectively speaking, there are some shortcomings. For example, Xiao Fengliu should be the soul wearer, but why does the MP3 contain the theme song of Net King and the song of the voice actor? Somewhat contradictory! Long Ma's current relationship is hazy and ignorant, and Yun Xiaosha is also a little ambiguous. The two of them don't get along like friends, but like lovers who have fallen in love. It might be better to let Yun Xiaosha be more distant. In my impression, Ryoma is a bit proud, and it's okay to deal with people who are emotionally slow. What's more, it's the temptation and ambiguity of people of the same gender who have always been friends with him. It's not bad to add some psychological activities here. For example, I am confused and annoyed about my current mood. I have always believed that what determines a good novel is not how many people will like it, but your setting and writing style can determine whether the article will be well received! Let me give you a suggestion: Don't use narration entirely. Narration can indeed express the author's true feelings and feelings, and it can also describe the soul of the characters in the novel, but it cannot represent everything. It might be better to include some interaction between other people or the subtle reality between two people. I like all the characters in Net King. Every time I write a novel, I adhere to the principle of not discrediting the original work. After all, they are teenagers. Their dream is to stand on that court, encourage each other, bear failure together, and rejoice together when success occurs. I think many people think the same way. To be honest, BL is really not my cup of tea! [Cover face] On a certain day in a certain year, we also tried to write TF novels, but it was not successful, so I am still not suitable for writing BL novels, so I actually admire you for writing such novels. I feel that such novels are actually not easy to grasp, so keep up the good work! I'm looking forward to the next chapter. I broke my firm belief in never reading BL stories for Naizan. Don't let me down~

Forehead. You can write well. I usually don't realize how talented you are...