If I hadn't met you all, I would probably still be standing still;
If I hadn't met you, I might have fallen into an endless abyss, able only to gaze up at the light.
I will do my best to protect the warmth you've given me, regardless of family, for the sake of friendship alone.
The male lead is Hibari Kyoya, quiet and well-behaved on the outside, but severely afflicted with chuunibyou on the inside. No explanation needed...
The female lead is Kihara Yu, not a transmigrator, and a stubborn little thing, like some kind of omnivore = =
The supporting cast won't be as one-note as in Rain-Warmed First Encounter. 27 makes all kinds of sarcastic remarks, 80 is a natural airhead, and Reborn is as sharp as ever...
There's fun, there's fighting, no Mary Sue, no H-scenes, and little romance.
There is some of the original plot, but not much. It includes the ten-years-later era, and the overall tone is still light and fresh.
[Long after I started writing this, I found out that Yamamoto Takeshi's voice actor is also named Yu. Now I'm wondering if I should switch the names of Kondo Hatsune from Rain-Warmed First Encounter and this story's heroine...]
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There was a little bit of abuse in the front, and tears left my eyes. Hey, I can't stand the abuse now. I could say it before, hey ↖(^ω^)↗
I just read this fanfic today and wrote a review overnight, but I don't know if the author can read it~ Awesome! This is a very good article ~ really good ~ In terms of character setting, I personally feel that the heroine's fighting ability (right from the beginning) is a little strong. No matter how long she plays, she won't be able to fight with bare hands for more than 20 minutes. . . Of course, extreme situations are possible~ The character is well grasped~ There is no Mary Sue in Kihara Yu's cute part, which is good~ But can you describe it~ Because after seeing other people's profile descriptions, I really can't imagine that kind of cuteness. It just feels a bit vague, and then the kissing scene started without knowing how cute it is. Then I have to say that the character of Mr. Hibari was very perfect in the beginning, but later on, I don't know what happened, but it seemed a bit rushed. It can be seen from the initial fight that Skylark is still a cold middle-aged boy, but the whole kissing scene fell apart/overturning the table. How did he become a villain? It doesn't feel quite in line with the original work. Maybe it would be more powerful if it were stronger. Oh, no, what you wrote is quite strong, but I always feel that the bell skylark put a little more emotion into the kiss~ Oops, it's almost the same meaning, you understand~ Of course, the descriptions of skylarks in the later period are very good, but it feels like it would be more... How should I say, more? It would be better if the second half of the article is longer and the plot is extended further~ Then it comes to the plot. I've always wanted to ask, is the entire emotional thread a little too bland? There are no big ups and downs, just come here, I feel a bit boring (wait! I am not saying that your writing is boring, it means that there is no significant battle in the future chapter in the phenomenon. You have written this story very well!) The author has some ideas in this article, but the structure is not up to standard. Specifically, there is less writing about the process of emotional development and results compared to the previous acquaintance process. In other words, there is too much written in the front. You see, there are 26 chapters in total. Grandma did not die until Chapter 15, which means that the role of Grandma should have played a big role. However, I feel like there is something lacking in the grandma part. What I say may make you unhappy, but besides proving that Kihara has a sense of worthiness and accelerating his relationship with Hibari, the death of grandma seems to have done little to change the personality of the heroine. Because it runs through most of the fanfic, it must have some important role,,. It stands to reason that the heroine should have some big changes, love, how should I say it? That's what my intuition tells me. It means something like that. Next, let's talk about writing style. Wen Ai is great! I felt like I was going to cry during the previous paragraph. It's very touching, very delicate, and touching. It was later that I felt that my impression of the Kihara girl had faded. Because of the setting, the heroine acted in a nonchalant manner and spoke in a nonchalant tone, so the overall feeling was that the heroine's aura became lighter later on! I would like to give you a suggestion: you don't need a lot of lyrical parts. It might be better to have one or two sentences that hit the point. . Finally, let's talk about language style. As far as this article is concerned, the feeling is light, sad, and peaceful (yes, don't ask me why the word tranquil is included, because of the feeling!), But I think the relaxed adventure style may be more interesting ~ I'm not saying that your style is not good, it is just a bit heavy. Of course, this has nothing to do with the ending. I hope you can read Shark Zi's article. Maybe you know her, and you don't want to change it deliberately. I just feel that the style will make you feel better when writing it, and it won't be as heavy as this article? Finally, I wish you good health and a good mood. Please read more tutoring bg, especially the first-generation articles. Mmmah, please pay attention to your updates.
Ahhhhh!!! So handsome!!!! Except for the fact that I think my first kiss should be my [Hey, hey, hey], everything else is perfect!!! Master, I'm going to knock you down!!!!!
Well, after typing, many words are gone... O(╯□╰)oMany words are gone, ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh, you convulsive Jinjiang!!!
Well, probably the only shortcoming I noticed is that the too rapid plot and the development of their relationship made me a little confused... Mr. Chairman's attitude towards Xiaoyu from the beginning was [interested] → then turned into [possessive] → then [like]? Maybe so? Well... I'll say it again, please give me a side story... Huh... I suddenly realized that this is a long review...
There's such a handsome way of chasing each other. Could it be that the couple look like~~~~so in love?
Strongly requesting a sequel~~~~[tears running]
Author! In fact, this cosplay will satisfy your yy! ←_←
This is the time when Yunque talks a lot, hehe~ I love bonds
Don't abuse the heroine~~~~~[tears]