Crossover: In Dreams and Out

I'm confused, confused, confused and upset

After reading it, I feel a bit weird. I feel that the male protagonist and Changqin are together inexplicably. I don't feel it at all. Moreover, the background of the male protagonist is so strong, but I feel that he is cowardly and powerless. Moreover, the emotional line of the article is so thin.

The author is not suitable to write this kind of protagonist who seems to be very powerful on the surface but is only strong because of the setting, because this kind of protagonist's character is only suitable for the kind of young lady in the boudoir, and it is the kind of young and confused young lady, because the protagonist's heart is always weak, and it does not make him weak because of amnesia. If he has a strong character, he will still be strong even if he loses his memory. When writing a book, you need to give people a sense of immersion. There are too many plots here, and it gives the impression that the protagonist is super disgusting, weak, and super holy. He always says that he doesn't care, but he is actually a fool. So forget it. Anyway, your articles will always be this kind of protagonist, and you will always be the kind of protagonist who can only rely on plot arrangements, otherwise he will definitely die. Also, there are a lot of nonsense, such as "I didn't expect this accident to happen" and so on. Accidents are not expected but they are called accidents when they happen. In one paragraph, it seems that the protagonist stepped on a branch, and then it said "I didn't expect that I would step on a branch" or something like that. I was speechless. In short, the whole text is all kinds of outrageous, so you should write Xiaoyan, the kind of Qiong Yao Xiaoyan, you are suitable for writing the little white flowers in the article. Start with the article that suits you, and then you can slowly practice your writing.

This is my first time posting a comment, but I really want to explain that what started out as a good article turned out to be so shitty!

I don't like it at all. The protagonist is always confused, getting as much as a pig, waiting to be slaughtered when he's full. No highlights. You are writing articles, not really living your life. Whose article seems to have no surprises in life, like... A foot wrap... You understand

Leave a comment, I like this article. Although I skipped a few chapters in the middle, I still like it overall.

The ending is so unscientific, I always felt that it would be very long, and I was disappointed.

Dear~~~This article is actually a Danmei article covered in romance~~~~~It's so loving~~~~~~~I haven't read articles with romance tags for a long time, but I still finished reading this article, so I can read it as a Danmei article.

Bang bang bang! Applause to celebrate the end! Let me ask you one more question, dear, when are you going to write the article about Flowers in the House?

Haha, it's great to get the certificate~